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Twilight Glimmer


It's been a long week this morning.

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Luna sees Celestia send Twilight off with her friends to defeat Discord in ‘The Return of Harmony’. She overhears Celestia say that she can no longer wield the Elements of Harmony. The Princess of the Moon ain’t buying that BS.

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I like stories where Celestia is a pathological liar, it makes vast tracks of lore make sense if she just lied to everybody all the time for no real reason and nobody questions her because its unspoken that she's a god.

Lmao, this story was a great read. Honestly, I hope to see more stuff like this up on FIMfic, the debating between Luna and Cel felt just right with the formality of royalty in language but the bickering of two sisters :trollestia: This deserves a like!

I don’t know enough about old English to use words like ‘thou’ correctly, so she uses modern language.

This makes you smarter than most authors who have bitten that challenge.

Also, it's Early-Modern/Shakespearean/Elisabethan English. Old English looks like :

Hwæt. We Gardena in geardagum,
þeodcyninga, þrym gefrunon,
hu ða æþelingas ellen fremedon.
Oft Scyld Scefing sceaþena þreatum,
monegum mægþum, meodosetla ofteah,
egsode eorlas. Syððan ærest wearð
feasceaft funden, he þæs frofre gebad,
weox under wolcnum, weorðmyndum þah,
oðþæt him æghwylc þara ymbsittendra
ofer hronrade hyran scolde,
gomban gyldan. þæt wæs god cyning.

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I will say, if someone were to write a story where Luna came off the moon speaking in middle-english (what english sounded like 1,000 years ago), it would be one hell of a joke.

I like this talk that Luna uses. It's great!

I’m not sure what just happened, but uhh... I guess I’ll leave you this: get yer numerals out of yer prose.

I don't like this interpretation of Celestia.

If there is a sequel to this I fully expect it to be about the fact that celestia lost to chrysalis

Comment posted by SolidDink deleted Jan 5th, 2019
Comment posted by Twilight Glimmer deleted Jan 4th, 2019

Hmmm this feels a little to much Headcanon for a oneshot. And lunys Dialog feels Off somehow.

I would say try to improve this story a little bit rewrite a few passages and you get my thumps up

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Most useful advice.

Hey, really nice story :) I was wondering if (with your blessing) I could adapt it into a video? I'm starting a series where I take fanfics and bring them to life :) It's called Twitchy Tales.

Here's a video to show what it would be like. :) https://youtu.be/UjSpLvyUDGA

If you're okay with it, please let me know :) Full credit will be given to you, of course. :)

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Awesome, thanks. :) Time to get to work. I'll let you know when it's finished. :)

So... Does this story explain why Luna did nothing to help during the events of A Canterlot Wedding?

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This particular story happens before A Canterlot Wedding, and the sequel hasn’t been completely planned out yet, that’s why I wanted people’s opinions.

I prefer this one over the first option

I like the first idea for a sequel the most but see no reason why both cant be done.

Lazylestia is still better than Molestia :) :trollestia:

“If anypony wants to know, we’ll blame it on Discord.”
“Good idea."

Sure, blame all your flaws on Discord.

I don't know... 2nd?

That line about "At we'd been planning to rule Equestria for our whole lives"
*looks at what Celestia tried to pull in the season 9 premiere*
I smell a nice story idea for what Celestia is about to pull next(and can totally see she kept bothering Luna until she "agreed" in that one in season 9's premiere)

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Hey, I don't mean to bother you, but do you know when it will be finished?

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Well audio was finished a while ago, however i came into money problems and had to put the project on hold and open myself up to commission work and right now, for the last month, my new job is sapping all my strength and energy so I've fallen behind on commissions, once that's all done, then I'll be back on this project. I've got a fair amount of SFM images made for it, but that all takes time. I wanna believe it'll be done by the new year,

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Well yeah. A ruler can't be 100 % honest. And there is good reason for that.

Not only would that majorly threaten national security on so many levels that the country would be destroyed 5 times over within a week.
But also because truth can be more harmful than a white lie.

So what's next for the story?

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Well, Equestrian Security SUCKS wasn't supposed to be a sequel to this when I first came up with the idea. There was going to be a multi-chapter slice of life fic that detailed Cheerful's life with Luna, but shortly after this story concluded, I had a different series out that was gaining popularity, and I was focusing on that. In July, I came up with the idea for ESS, then cancelled it after 600 words. 3 days ago, I looked over it again, and decided to give it a go with what I had.

There will be a story (or stories) detailing Cheerful and Luna's time together, or at least why she's not longer her student, that will happen eventually. It will take place after the events of this story, but before the events of the next. I won't abandon this universe without a satisfying conclusion.

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OK, thanks for the answers. :eeyup:

I swear, she’s going to make Twilight into an alicorn someday just so that she can have some extra help around here.

Best line in the story.

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