During Sunset's escape to the human world, she didn't account for one thing. Her human self being on the other side of the mirror when she went over?
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Oh, this is not going to end well. The "real" Sunset is going to loose it but good once she comes back, and with good reason.
Celestia really should know better, it's probably a good thing she is immortal, because her road to hell is paved in solid gold "good intentions" by now.
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Yup but that's a long way off so we will see how well sunset will be able to deal with that by the time it rolls around.
The use of magic to edit the EQG world's Sunset to think she was a pony and her life as a human was a lie is not only unconscionable, it gets rid of a lot of character building moments for this human Sunset, as stuff can't be revealed to her as an outsider. Also, now this pony one has to deal with all the consequences of pony Sunset's actions (because she thinks she is that pony) that Celestia can't sweep under the rug, and really there is no possible positive outcome to this farce later on.
Let's say pony Sunset Shimmer comes back, the portal issue is resolved. Former human-Sunset Shimmer has her memories restored, and... what? Her memories of playing pony Sunset removed? She'd be betrayed either way. And for whose benefit, exactly? This feels like Celestia playing with the lives of her subjects. It also shows her as being manipulative and untrustworthy if this is revealed.
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Look I'm not a good enough writer to handle something like that yet and I have spent time thinking about how i could change it to be better and I couldn't think of anything that I could do that I could handle doing, and yes I know what I had celestia do was bad and I do intend to have it addressed later when I've gotten better and even then I dont know if I'll be able to handle it well. I'm just going to write and try to take criticism to heart I just dont know what to do here that I can write and that will sound good. This is sadly the best I can do right now because I'm bad. Hopefully I'll be able to return to this at some point after I've finished it and hopefully be able to rewrite it better or put a better take on it.
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It's more a criticism of her character actions than the author's writing ability. I mean, other stories have had characters do things without thinking through the long-term implications. I do think there is a lost opportunity of using Sunset as a fish out of water, but that's more a stylistic choice.
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Well I am going to try with the fish out of water still, probably wont end well bit I am going to try. Now I know I didnt expand on the memories celestia put in there but now I'm thinking I should have found a way to, but I didnt but my intent was that since I have those memories as a basic framework so she knows how to walk and such. With the dreams filling in some things. I dont know how exactly I'm going to handle this but this sunset is going to be different than the other and I have one idea I want to go with Sunset dont know if I'll be able to do it but I'm going to try.