Perfect. Totally perfect. It was that awful, wretched, non-consensual gray area that wasn't the cartoon of rape you always see on this site. This was rape, make no mistake, and I'm sure plenty of people need to see that.

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And it was sexy to read. Hope to see other ponies in this story, Flutters was perfect, I'd love to see how fat brony fuck can get AJ or Dash.

No bro, keep the realism. Let's watch Rainbow Dash buck his testicles up into his lungs.

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What realism there is in Flutters saying "You can just ask" and sucking his smelly dick by herself? But yeah, Dash can buck him in the nuts... or he can (accidentally) use her deep unsureness of herself, or she would want to 'prove' she's experienced lover and doesn't fear a dick, or any other semi-real reasons. Depends on author.

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It's mostly in the way the rape was carried out. Rape is always portrayed as the cartoonishly over the top version, this is still just as awful and is something a little more close to home.

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Ah, yea, can agree on that!

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Actually the intention there was that the slap intimidates her into compliance. Maybe the "you could just ask" wording is a bit too feisty for Fluttershy, though, yeah. The problem is when writing from the creep's perspective, I can't really explain what's going through her head, just his poor guesses at it.

Anyways, I'm really glad you liked it! Dash would be the natural continuation, because she seems the one most liable to rush into getting revenge for Fluttershy. So, that might happen, we'll see!

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Haha, I'm glad someone appreciated that! :D

The Virgin self insert
VS
The Chad HiE

Seriously though, looking forward to more.

Just your typical "oh wow I'm in Equestria" fare... but with an absolute creep of a brony as the storyteller. You know, the one who is all the negative stereotypes come true at once.

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Is this still going?

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Yes! I've been a bit dormant for a while, and trying to write some other things that failed, but I want to keep this going and your comment gave me a burst of motivation to write a chunk more of chapter two this morning :)

Sorry everyone, I'm very slow and inconsistent.

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i'm glad i could help i love the concept and cant wait for more

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Apology is not accepted. You are not a FlitterFloosh. Work Faster.

Can't wait for the next part