• Member Since 14th Aug, 2018
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ningo


Comments ( 23 )

You need an editor.

9389711
yes i do can u help me

Mice story grammar needs a little work. All in all a great story.

9572625
The first chapter is based off of your story

TBH, this story lack context on so many details. You also need a grammar/spelling editor.

9623963
i agree and it went to fast so he or she needs to take this time

When is the next update?

I'm working on it

I can get through this bad writing, because I've seen way more horrible writing then this. I'll see how better you write this. (I know I should've said type but you get the idea.)

9815784
then can you help me with my writing?

is it wrong that I want a surprise twist that he switched places with the version of him who is going ot show up for an epic face off with his counterpart later.

Pretty graphic description....

Not a bad idea, let's see what happens next.

10155896
No, but it should be easy to find one.

If it wasn't for the....spelling, and the *cough* "fetishes", then I'd like this type a little better.

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