What the heck,did you repost or edit this or what?

So I guess anon is erm, "stronger" than the sex demon pony? That's kind of funny to know that humans are more powerful, sexually, than pony sex demons.

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If you're talking about the story overall, it's a fimfiction port with several edits. You could call it a remaster. Otherwise, a user told me there was an issue with the third chapter and notifications due to a fimfiction glitch so I reposted it. Unfortunately this deleted 4 great comments but it's a learning experience. I now know I have to make the chapter file on the day I post or there's issues.

Well that's interesting!

Aight, this is interesting world building. I don't think I've seen this particular route for bat-ponies before, and I'm intrigued to see where you're going with it. Could be cringey, could be freaking awesome. I'm excited to see which!

I definitely like the background for the Thestrals in this universe.
How extensive is the"remaster"? Grammar, or additional story?

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Grammar with a few minor writing flow changes that don't affect story. Biggest plot change was just that their ranks were altered.

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It'll be elaborated on next chapter.

Lol ... had a funny thought ... you know how some people just drink right out of the bottle then put it back in the fridge .. gross ... i imagined umbra doing that then anon grabbing the juice/milk ... shed make the connection of how bad she screwed up after anon makes a comment about germs or indirect kissing.... then proceeds to drink from the bottle.

Each time I open a bat pony story everybat wants me to read it for them
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Ah, now the title makes sense.

I'm liking the world-building, naturally, though it clashes a bit with the Night Guard stallions the show already has. Not that I'm complaining.

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Reposing Chapter 3 didn't just delete the comments. It broke the e-mail notification's link to the chapter. And I didn't receive a second e-mail notification, with the new link.

20%, eh?

If 3% ice spirit is enough to stay in the cold, and while they said what Umbra's fluid can do to someone, how potent are we talking?

Sex-wise, is this a universe where everyone's a 10-30sec romp? Cause if so, this is gonna be crazy.

Like, perpetual fuck ball, crazy.

Human stamina and refractory period, doped up by succubi bewitchment? Both are gonna die

Unless, he's immune

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Thanks for all the feedback. I'm glad you're enjoying it despite the perspective shifts. I tend to think of third as the strongest perspective, but I've made the choice to keep this story in second. For perspective shifts, I felt it was worth the drawbacks to include multiple perspectives at particular times, rather than trying to split a chapter fifty fifty. You've read the second chapter now, so you might see why that is.

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That's adorable. Damn screech puppers and their cuteness.

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So I guess some people got the update notification... I don't get it man. I'm just going to not do that next time.

You gave their ranks as captain, but started having them address each other as major.

A not-that major typo, methinks.

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Agh, I'm always missing stuff like that. Thanks for the catch. Fixed.

Well time to repost my demands. <slams mug down shattering it into many pieces> I demand more of this story. Who must I slay to achieve this goal.

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I gotta ask about the mörkö... is it like moomin mörkö as in the groke or something else? Mörkö also means the boogeyman, specter, pixie, troll and goblin in finnish

Now that I think about it, it feels like they're all going to get in on this.

Blue: seeking warmth, got a big guy who'll wrap you up in warm snuggles.
Sky: what would the blood of a predator do to her?

For a bunch with demon lineage, it's awfully convenient how Anon can fit their quirks

I don't see how any of the Night Ponies (aside from Umbral Dream) here are supposed to be sympathetic. Sure they're discriminated against, but they're pretty horrible. For one, why else do they want the male guard if not for a fucktoy? Because they certianly don't think him capable of anything. Plus their whole "oh woe is us" is hypocritical when they're so forcefully encouraging the one who is part succubus to use and throw away males when she says that's not who she wants to be.

I NEED MORE! This is just to great a world and story setting! But I personally can hardly wait to get back to Anon and Umbra!

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I did a bit of research but the story definitely takes some liberties with lore here, and the Morko was hard to find information on in English. But yes, I was trying to find eastern monsters and that one popped out to me, so I thought it would be fun to include. I wanted to avoid mixing Japanese stuff like a Yuki Ona.

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I suppose it's a matter of how you feel about their behavior. I find them lovable despite their degeneracy but it's true they're certainly not meant to be admirable or heroes.

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Next chapter returns to them.

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I love seeing predictions and conjecture like this. It tells me where people's thoughts are and if they're picking up on certain things, but I can't really comment on anything. The story has to speak for itself, but I guess I'll bend the rule and say you both are impressively close.

So, another comment posted a link to the original story, and I read it
I feel bad for reading ahead, but at the same time I now can't wait to see you continue this. Are you still concentrating on new chapters of the other stories primarily, or is the popularity of this one a motivation to change the update order?

You stopped walking and blinked owlishly. “Oh that’s right. You’re not a bat mare. Maybe I shouldn’t have said anything about that.”

Bat Mare na na na na na na na na na Bat Mare!

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You sneaky little cheater. I should have asked that they remove that link but it's not like it's a tightly held secret, and I really don't blame you. I just didn't expect fimfic readers to tolerate pastebin's green format or go through all the comments to find that.

Are you still concentrating on new chapters of the other stories primarily, or is the popularity of this one a motivation to change the update order?

I mean the success of Bad Blood would be taken into consideration if it wasn't for the fact that Tacet and I'm Cool Not Cute are also successful here. I can honestly say I'm pleasantly surprised to be blessed with a big audience, but that also means it's way more efficient to wrap up the small stories before I take this one on in any serious capacity. One of the biggest reasons I wanted to finish PPP before Bad Blood is also because PPP is pure smut and lets me practice writing that sort of content (I kinda suck at it still). Porn scenes become a more prominent part of this story as it goes on ,and I originally dropped this story in part because I was struggling to write them. I want to do Bad Blood justice and make sure those scenes are good, whereas I feel comfortable experimenting and making mistakes in PPP.

Alright, this has become my most anticipated fic at the moment. Keep up the great work.

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Fair enough, sorry for cheating but when I found the link I just couldn't help myself.
From what I had read, I'll say that your smut skills weren't lacking by any means. It definitely wasn't pure porn though, so I do understand what you mean by prioritizing and getting feedback through PPP.
I'll definitely be looking forward to what's next!
Also that Lyra pic had me in stitches..

hung over as Bacchus only knows

*aggressively giggle snorts*

Hah!

I’ll be adding this one

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it's a BBC code called preformatting. Looks like [p r e] [ / p r e] without the spaces and with content between the two tags. It changes the font to monospace and I thought that made it look more military.

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I'm glad someone got that.

*holds up a large mirror*

We still need more and this level of cuteness needs a warning label! Ponys like me could get diabetes just from reading it!

Hey, this is really good, mind writing more real quick?

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Huh, now I kinda feel bad about having that link up. Didn't think I mess with anyone's temptation to spoil themselves when I was just pointing out how surprised I am to see this old and familiar story. Apologies for the sinful temptation of spoilers.

Neat. Look forward to more

I love the spin you put on this.

Im looking forward to more.

The Monk

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Not your fault, I just can't help myself
I'm not going out of my way to mention anything from it though, and HGAW said there will be some changes anyway.

Downloaded the current three chapters and I like how you tell who is currently the second person character with those statuses, some were funny! The chapter "Bloodlines" had me do a double-take on Umbra's lineage. Gonna be mighty interesting, so interesting I'm gonna have to Fav, Track, and Like to make sure I keep updated! You're doing great!

That was an interesting take on bat ponys. I'm excited for more

Aww, poor little umbra! She's such a sweetheart!

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“Um… Mine is Mörkö,”

To his friends, he's Mörökölli. An unexpected but a pleasant addition.

Ooo the plot thickens. I like this.

"Caption Umbra" looks like a typo for "Captain Umbra".

What's up with the chest tuft? I've seen it mentioned elsewhere. What's the importance of it?

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They are the epitome of mareliness and important for attracting a mate.

What the hell... entchanted condoms This is going to mindblowing

“Nobody needs to hear your belly aching,” you said, keeping your voice low as Celestia continued her speech. “We’re all tired and as hung over as Bacchus only knows, so don’t make any noise or the Princess might send us to PT or something. Then you’ll really have something to grumble about.”

Lol, now the ponies are using our slang term for Pony Town... I think. Idk. @_@

He shrugged and turned toward the kitchen. “I just like you.”

If Night Sky could hear him now... A simple slap wouldn't cut it.

”L-Leave it to a bat pony to be so unbelievably crass and short-witted about their own history. It’s not right to go over such a topic with the fairer sex using such bluntness.”

When you hear "fairer sex" and realize they're talking about a guy. >_> gender roles reversal confirmed.

“She has twenty percent succubus.”

The I R O N Y.

Damn... Stallion succubus must be the ultimate breeding studs