Fractured Friendship

by chris the cynic

Schism

Sunset walked through the snow and repeated Twilight's final sentence in her mind again and again.

Sometimes all you can do is stay strong . . .

Sunset was the most hated girl in CHS. Again. The difference was: this time she didn't have the five most popular girls in school looking out for her.

She couldn't take a step without being reminded that she wasn't wanted in this world. Every time she took to the halls she was "accidentally" bumped so many times the collisions all bled together into one big aching throbbing pain. What was being said hurt more.

She'd been left sobbing on the floor of the school twice.

She was still here.

That was staying strong, wasn't it?

. . . be yourself . . .

With everyone already hating her and claiming she'd gone back to her old ways, it would be so easy to actually do it. No one would dare treat her this way if she really did become the old Sunset Shimmer.

She could blackmail, bribe, and cajole her way to the top. She could tear down anyone who so much as looked at her the wrong way. She could make everyone back the fuck off and never be bumped or shoved or tripped again. She could make other students so afraid they'd lock themselves in lockers instead of facing her.

She could end all of this.

All she'd have to do was become someone else. Someone she didn't like. Someone she never wanted to be again.

And that she would not do.

. . . and find your family.

Sunset had been alone her entire life. She couldn't remember her parents, and her other relatives had only ever acknowledged her because the Princess expected them to. When Celestia had found Sunset living on the street --begging and stealing her way from day to day; never getting quite enough to keep hunger a bay for long-- she assumed that Sunset's relatives didn't know what had become of her.

Celestia thought that once they were informed they'd naturally shower Sunset in the love and affection she'd been denied. Sunset had never told Celestia the truth because she'd been afraid of disappointing her. She had thought that judgement that applied to her family must also apply to her. If they didn't measure up to Celestia's standards, then neither did she.

If there were one thing Sunset could change about her past it wouldn't be running away to another world, it wouldn't be stealing an Element of Harmony in an act Sunset was reasonably sure was treason, it would be the fact that she never told Celestia the truth: Sunset's surviving blood relatives weren't her family; Celestia was.

She knew that now. She'd finally learned a lesson that Celestia never set out to teach: family wasn't the people who were stuck with you, it was the people who accepted you and made you feel at home.

That's why she was heading to the cafe.

Twilight knew Sunset didn't have any blood relatives she'd ever want to see again --it was one of the things they'd talked about through the journal-- but Twilight also knew that Sunset did have people who mattered to her. Leaving it open ended was to remind Sunset that it was up to her who those people were.

Sunset could have found family by walking through the portal and finding Twilight. Maybe she would at some point. But the thing about family was: even when they screwed up, they were still worth fighting for.

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All of the girls were looking mopey when she came in.

Then they saw her at the door and they were angry.

Rainbow Dash said, "Hey, get out!" while Applejack went with "Yer not welcome here, Sunset!"

It took some fast talking, but she managed to convince them to at least read the journal. She knew that logically it shouldn't make a difference, but she wasn't appealing to their logic.

Sure, if they thought she was lying then they didn't have any reason to believe what she'd written the journal would be any more true than what she said, but that was entirely beside the point.

She hoped that by sharing what she had been feeling, as it had been happening, she'd remind the how they had felt about her. Also, the fact that this was a way to communicate without talking was important. You didn't get in a shouting match with a book. You either read it or you didn't.

Yes, one could shout about what they read, but they weren't shouting over the words, and the book didn't have to ignore the shouting or shout back. The words that had yet to be read were already in it.

It was a huge gamble, but if the girls felt about Sunset the way she felt about them, then all she had to do was bring that to the forefront, make that the thing at the front of their minds instead of the anger, and they'd give her the benefit of the doubt.

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Fluttershy had been the one to accept the journal, so she was the one holding it. The others tried to crowd around and read on their own, but it was awkward and distracting, so finally she decided to read a page out loud. Based on the timing of the previous entry, it was probably going to be about the sleepover at Rarity's house, which was right before everything went so wrong.

"Dear Twilight," she read, "I'm at my second slumber party with the girls --I hope you don't mind me not counting the ones when you were here, I didn't feel like I was really part of those-- and I feel so much closer to them."

Fluttershy felt a pang of guilt at Sunset's aside. Sunset had supported the Rainbooms every step of the way and basically been their personal cheerleader, while they'd done little more than tolerate her existence back then.

But she also felt anger. They had been right to be hesitant, it told her. When they let her into their hearts she turned on them the moment she could lash out at them.

Ignoring both feelings, Fluttershy kept reading the journal entry, "I haven't felt so loved in," Fluttershy had to skip over some words that had been written then scribbled out, and the result wasn't really a complete sentence. She said, "ever," but had paused so long with the scribbles and the grammar that the 'ever' felt all alone.

So she tried again:

"I haven't felt so loved in . . . ever."

It still didn't sound particularly good, but it sounded better than before.

Apparently the difficulty she'd had reading it had stopped her from thinking about it, because once she was done it hit her:

Two sleepovers was all it took for Sunset to feel more loved than she ever had before. That was it. That was heartbreaking.

The sleepover at Rarity's had been a lot of fun, sure, but it wasn't all that remarkable. If people weren't laughing at her for what she did during it, with the silly dress up and the terrible singing, she probably wouldn't remember much about it. If that was the most loved Sunset had ever felt, then the rest of her life must have been . . .

Fluttershy moved to the next line:

"I feel like I finally have a family again."

And two days later they left her-- they left her crying on floor.

That hurt. That hurt so much. Fluttershy wasn't thinking about whether to believe Sunset anymore. She was just angry with herself and the others. How could they? How could they have done that? And the things she'd said to Sunset . . .

"Without all of you giving me love and support I'd be-- well, you know what I'd be."

And they'd taken that love and support away from her.

Fluttershy had reached her emotional limit. She read the rest mechanically:

"Anyway, I have to get to sleep, but I wanted to let you know how I feel. If it weren't for you, I wouldn't be here. You didn't just save me (and stop me); you're the one who encouraged the girls and me to become friends. I love you all so much, and if it weren't for you, Twilight, I'd never have gotten to know any of you well enough for that.

"Your friend, Sunset Shimmer."

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Rainbow was angry enough to punch someone, but the person she was angry with was herself.

How could she have been so stupid. If the pictures had come from Fluttershy's phone, or Applejack's phone, she wouldn't have believed it. She had learned that lesson already.

How long had she spent too angry to even try talking to Applejack about something that had come from Applejack's phone.

She was so very pissed off at having made the Exact Same Mistake twice. Never again.

Fluttershy asked the natural question:

"If . . . if you're not Anon-a-Miss, who is?"

Sunset didn't have an answer. She held her head in her hands and looked at the table as she said, "That's what I've been trying to figure out."

Whoever it was would pay. Maybe it wasn't fair to want to punish someone else when she was mostly angry with herself, but she didn't care. They'd pay.

"AJ," Sunset said, "who knew your nickname?"

"Only you all and my family," Applejack said, "but I know they wouldn't do that and I trust you five--" Applejack stopped short; Rainbow didn't notice.

While Applejack said something else, Rainbow tried to think of how someone could have found out and didn't manage to come up with any answers. She offered, "Maybe someone overheard it," but she wasn't convinced. She had to be-- wait.

She finally processed that last thing Applejack had said. Applejack had corrected herself:

'I trust you five-- --you four.'

That hit Rainbow like a body check. How could she not see they'd been wrong?

Sunset moved on to the pictures, and things went downhill further.

"I had my phone with me from the end of the slumber party until well after they were posted," Sunset said.

"And we were the only people at the party!" Rarity said. She wasn't trying to be helpful.

⁂

Diamond Tiara watched with interest as the scene unfolded. Not the Rainbooms, that was a side show. (Who cared if Rainbow Dash were defending Sunset Shimmer now?) No. The show was the Canterlot Movie Club.

As Rainbow Dash and Applejack yelled in each other's faces, the developments between Scootaloo and Apple Bloom were too precious to miss. Of course she was recording it for posterity too.

She wasn't recording it to send to Anon-a-Miss, there was nothing to expose here, she just wanted to be able to relive this in the future. Cell phone video was no substitute for the real thing, though, and so while it was going on she opened up her senses and drank in every detail.

⁂

Sunset was being meek again, like she had between the Fall Formal and the Battle of the Bands. It wasn't right. It wasn't the real Sunset Shimmer. That just made Rainbow Dash more angry with three of her best friends.

Applejack was stubbornly insisting that Sunset was obviously to blame and Rainbow was being stupid for believing her. Rarity was arguing for Sunset's guilt with dramatic flare. Pinkie didn't say a single word.

Fluttershy was being timid, which was to be expected, but she was on the right side.

Rainbow gave it one last try:

"It doesn't mean anything that it came from her phone; this is just like the texts!"

"Yeah," Applejack said, "it is. Because she's splitting us up again and yer falling' for it again! The difference is: Ah Ain't!"

"This is going nowhere," Rainbow said. Applejack had a response, but Rainbow didn't bother to listen. She said to Sunset and Fluttershy, "Let's get out of here."

The other two got up, and Rainbow turned to leave.

Then Pinkie said her name. It was the first time she'd spoken since Sunset came in. Rainbow didn't bother to turn around.

"We all made a mistake, Pinks," she said. "I'm done with that."

Then she left with Sunset and Fluttershy.

Author's Note:

[added]
I have some notes on how this related to the source material, and where it comes from, and such.

Rainbow and Applejack yelling at Sunset and Applejack's revision from "you five" to "you four" are straight from the original comic (the Equestria Girls Holiday Special.)

The five to four switch, which I think is the harshest thing in the chapter, is why this story exists. At the same time Applejack is saying that, Rainbow is looking for explanations of the form "Not Sunset's Fault."

My reading of that part of the comic is thus: Rainbow is on Sunset's side; Applejack is still against her. Fluttershy is probably on Sunset's side; Rarity is probably against her. Pinkie Pie's position is impossible to work out.

That's not the only way to interpret it, of course. This story owes a huge debt to keroko (the author of Home or Hearth?) who disagrees with that interpretation.

That gives a nice segue into giving all due credit to keroko.

Most people, or at least most of the ones who talk about it, think the comic is a story that would have worked better pre-Rainbow Rocks. I myself am such a person. This is so prevalent that, when people are talking about it at all, they tend to focus on what the story lost by being set after Rainbow Rocks to the exclusion of what it gained.

Without karoko it's entirely possible that no one would be talking about the importance of the journal in the conclusion of the story or how everything hinges on the letters that Sunset wrote to Twilight in the journal.

Another thing that tends to get overlooked, which karoko made me really think about, is the fact that Sunset does convince the five to listen to her (at a time when they were trying to shout her out of the building, no less) and does get at least some of them to believe she's innocent.

How many she convinces of her innocence is the point karoko and I disagree on, but that she convinced any of them is huge, as is getting them to listen so she could even attempt to convince them. Without karoko making me think about these things, I wouldn't have given them the thought they deserve. They'd be random bits of trivia instead of things I could build a story on.

[/added]

So, why this, why now?

Today is the fourth anniversary of the Equestria Girls: Holiday Special, which is where the Anon-a-Miss concept comes from.

This idea was pretty much fully formed back in September, and I'd almost certainly been mulling over parts of it before that. I wasn't actually planning on writing it when I had so many other things in need of updates, but a deadline can be a powerful motivator, and I need all the help I can get to write things through my depression.

This was the idea that was in my head, to the point that I wouldn't have been able to write anything else right now, and setting a deadline of publishing the story on the anniversary is what allowed me to get anything written.

(It's also the reason it's not well proofread. If you spot errors, which I'm sure there are plenty of, please message me.)

That's why this. That's why now.

Comments

[diablo4000]

apple Jack going to be kicking her own ass for a long time once the truth is out, and hating herself more for helping destroy their friendship for good, along with Rarity.

[WhitewolfStormrunner]

9353931 Indeed.

[Drago Cadenza]

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And don't forget Pinkie as well.

[The Blue EM2]

Happy 4th birthday, Anon-a-Miss. Here's to the 5th.

[Eternal Sunset]

Interesting story, also I disagree with the idea that the story would be better if it’s set before Rainbow Rocks because of several things: Twilight being friends with Sunset, Sunset’s confidence and the journal itself. Without being friends with Princess Twilight, Sunset would have no need to use the journal to keep in touch with her. Not to mention that before Rainbow Rocks, Sunset wasn’t as confident as she is now. Without her confidence, Sunset wouldn’t have been able to deal with everyone’s increase hostility. Then there is the Rainbooms themselves, in Rainbow Rocks, they didn’t fully trust Sunset. If Anon-A-Miss happened before Rainbow Rocks, then the Rainbooms would have no reason to listen to Sunset and join the student body in driving her out or worse, suicide.

And then there’s the reason for Anon-A-Miss, the Crusaders started Anon-A-Miss because they were jealous that their sisters were spending more time with Sunset than them. We all saw in Rainbow Rocks how Sunset was barely included in any or their activities, so I doubt they would be spending more time with her than them.

Anyway, interesting idea and your author’s note really got me thinking. Keep up the good work.

[Wilddog88]

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The problems with anon-a-miss being before Rainbow Rocks just doesn't make sense.

And there are multiple reasons why here I'll list them.

1 sunset is hated and despised for the she demon at fall formal( anon-a-miss started when some of the students forgave her after the sirens.)

2 sunset was an unemotional zombie. You can tell she was just going through the normal motions.

3 she got very emotional at the accusations which is the opposite of an emotional void.

4 not enough time has passed by.

5 no friendship to be broken or nearly.

6 the biggest piece of evidence is the journal to equestria is shown in the comic.

7 cranky is the detention teacher and who do we see in the same room in friendship games? Glida, Lightning Dust, Snips and Snails and the Cmcs.

And Daydream Summer is a powered up from for sunset. That hasn't appeared because they don't need it right now because the bond is strong.

9 people flinch when there is yelling involving people who don't fully trust. And both Sunset and the Rainbooms are doing that in friendship games. And to even prove it farther Sci-twi does it in legend of the everfree.

And to have friendship you need to have honesty, kindness and Trust.

[chris the cynic]

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For what it's worth, here's why I think the general story would work better before Rainbow Rocks:

The human five turn on Sunset because they think she was only pretending to be their friend. The longer Sunset has been their friend, the more absurd this idea becomes. If she's been with them for a short time then it's believable that she was just pretending, if she's been with them long enough for them to from a band, write some songs for it, and save the world, it's not as credible.

Sunset is shown being completely isolated without the five. That makes sense before Rainbow Rocks. The five were the only people putting up with her then, take them away and she's on her own. Simple as that. After Rainbow Rocks the whole school warmed up to her. Her being alone doesn't mean "One group (with only five people in it) bought into Anon-a-Miss" but instead "Everyone turned on Sunset" which less realistic.

I think the Sunset in the comic is more in line with the timid Sunset from the beginning of Rainbow Rocks than the confident one from the end. Take the second time she's left crying on the floor: when she's knocked down she looks afraid, and all it takes to set her crying is some dirty looks and someone saying that "Maybe it was Anon-a-Miss" who did it.

The CMC's motive makes more sense if it's not long after the Fall Formal. Before the formal, Rarity, Applejack, and Rainbow Dash were friendless. That means they probably had a lot of time for Sweetie Belle, Apple Bloom, and Rainbow Dash respectively. After the formal they have five friends each, which means a lot less time for the younger sisters (honorary in Scootaloo's case.)

The time the older siblings spent with the CMC would have dropped off dramatically, and it would have coincided with them becoming friends with Sunset. From there it's a lot easier for the CMC to blame Sunset than it is to blame the the others. She was a bully then a literal demon. By contrast, three of the five are the very people the CMC want to spend time with.

Setting it after Rainbow Rocks means that that's been going on long enough for them to have gotten used to it, and another thing eating up their sister's time is more recent than Sunset. They'd be far more likely to identify the band as the reason their sisters are spending less time with them than they would be to identify their sisters being friends with Sunset as the culprit. Break up the band, and they get more time. Don't even need to hurt anyone because everyone was happy before the band existed.

Well, in theory they wouldn't need to hurt anyone, in practice breaking up the band wouldn't be without collateral.

Before Rainbow Rocks everyone, CMC included, has Sunset becoming a monster at the Fall Formal as their most recent major memory of Sunset. That makes it a lot easier for things to go wrong for Sunset. After Rainbow Rocks the most recent major memory of Sunset is Sunset saving them. That should make it more difficult for the CMC to justify slimeing Sunset, and it should make everyone less likely to assume the worst of Sunset.

There's also a ton of little details, like how Sunset is acts like she's never been to a sleepover (and explicitly states that the ones in the comic are her first and second sleepovers with the five.)

⁂

All of that said, it's definitely the case that the story couldn't end the same way without the journal. It was Twilight writing "find your family" that sent to Sunset to try to convince the five again. It was what she'd written to Twilight that she used to do it. The ending, as written, is completely dependent upon the journal.

It's everything before the ending that I think works better before Rainbow Rocks.

Oh, and thanks for commenting. I really appreciate it.

[Eternal Sunset]

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You make some interesting points, however another thing I picked up from your explanation is that the whole comic is very flawed and doesn't make any sense. And like you said, the journal is the key in all of this. That and being friends with Twilight. So without the journal, everything falls apart, Sunset will be completely and utter alone with no one to support her. And then there's the aftermath, the Dazzlings will swoop right in and absorb all that negative energy and there will be no one to stop them, Sunset will probably leave CHS or like I stated commit suicide to escape the pain.

[GIGA-XISBASS]

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If I recall from what I've heard, it was SUPPOSED to take place before Rainbow Rocks, release date and everything but something happened and it got delayed til some time before Friendship Games aired and reworked to fit then despite how the events by that point don't make sense on a timeline scale.

[Nighlocktheawesome00]

You may be a cynic, my friend, but you write one hell of a story. And that's the truth. I might contact you if I ever need advice.

[The Blue EM2]

9354820
Well said.

[Csquared08]

This is an interesting start.

9354820
👍

[chris the cynic]

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Yeah, the most reasonable charitable explanation I've heard was that it was a case of getting the details of the journal mixed up and not catching the error until it was too late.

If you don't remember the exact circumstances of Sunset using the journal to contact Twilight in Rainbow Rocks (it's gathering dust, she doesn't know if it still works, she thinks Celestia has the other copy) then it's not too unreasonable to suppose that Sunset and Twilight might have been using the journal to keep in touch between the movies. Then you get a pre-Rainbow Rocks story in which the journal plays a pivotal role, and when the mistake is noticed it's easier to swap Twilight's scenes into the Castle of Friendship than it is to rebuild the entire story from the ground up.

It's still a major mistake (if something provides the foundation for your plot; look it up to check) but it's better than, "They didn't give a damn. Not a single one."

[Apricot Heart]

When will the story be finished

[Apricot Heart]

9875177
When will the next chapter be done

[Apricot Heart]

9875177
When will the story be finished

[Apricot Heart]

When will the story be finish

[RikoAteMyTaco]

Are you gonna update or...?

[chris the cynic]

10104203
Yes. My depression is basically the worst it's ever been, which is the reason none of my fics have been updated recently, but I haven't abandoned this. I've actually got 971 words of the next chapter written already.

[RikoAteMyTaco]

10105234
Oh okay, you take care of yourself first. Sorry for being pushy.

[neverknew166]

When will you update next?

[Nightmare Paladin]

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His depression is really bad currently so he isn’t updating but he will be when it gets better as he already has most of the next chapter written