Let me offer some presentation advice for your story page...

Separate the summary/initial description and put that first. Warnings, Author Notes and any non-story background is best placed after, as some people don't care to do more than glance to see if the story might interest them.

You have to keep in mind that the Short Description and main page description are your initial impression on potential readers. Poor format and basic errors, like you have, suggest the story itself will be full of the same.

Take time to study how your favorite authors construct sentences, paragraphs, concepts and scenes. Pay attention to grammatical arrangement and, if you never learned much in such regard, at least review some parts of FiMfiction's own Writing Guide. I have used it myself and it will help you avoid most errors and improve your writing.

Above all, speaking from personal experience, keep at it. If you keep going, and genuinely try to improve, experience will build up your skill quite a lot over time.

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Thank you so much for the helpful advice! I tried to sharpen the description up a little bit and hope it is a lot better than before, I also got rid of/fixed the authors notes, and will be reading over the writting guide over the holiday.

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Great googly moogly, that looks a lot better already. I know what kind of story you're trying to present much more easily now.

Just remember, through perseverance and experience, skill will come to you.

Really like where the story is going also wondering what he's going to do with her husband

Personally I hope he kills him or something like that.

Being dominant is all about ordering and rewarding
I like how this is going
Jejeje that stallion will not remain as such for much longer

I've had this on my read it later for a while now and I'm upset that I waited so long to read it as it is just my kind of story. I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter.