This is the story about how a human male is able to find a way to open a portal into the colorful world of Equestria. Where in finding a certain Derpy Hooves to claim as his own, he must also claim all the drama that comes with her. NSFW
There is a lot of spelling mistakes and the story has quite a bit of dialogue that feels like it could be cut down. This could be a troll fic, but I don't know that for sure. Anyway, I didn't really like it all that much and couldn't take it seriously. Have a good day though.
9350941 I appreciate the feedback! I went through and tried to fix a lot of spelling errors (Way more than I thought there was), hopefully the next chapters will be a little better. This is my first time writting a story so I'm not to familier with how the dialogue is suppose to be but hopefully after some more writting and being able to find a good editor, I will be able to write alot less amature in the near future.
First impressions: This guy is a dangerous psychopath who needs to be put down. The second person omniscient perspective makes this more bothersome than it would otherwise be, as well as being a rather strange perspective in the first place.
There is a lot of spelling mistakes and the story has quite a bit of dialogue that feels like it could be cut down. This could be a troll fic, but I don't know that for sure. Anyway, I didn't really like it all that much and couldn't take it seriously. Have a good day though.
9350941
I appreciate the feedback! I went through and tried to fix a lot of spelling errors (Way more than I thought there was), hopefully the next chapters will be a little better. This is my first time writting a story so I'm not to familier with how the dialogue is suppose to be but hopefully after some more writting and being able to find a good editor, I will be able to write alot less amature in the near future.
Klaatu...barada...nrraggahh!
First impressions: This guy is a dangerous psychopath who needs to be put down. The second person omniscient perspective makes this more bothersome than it would otherwise be, as well as being a rather strange perspective in the first place.
this fic is horrible, but hilarious.
I got a sick enjoyment out of this fic that I find hard to explain.