Lone Wolf: Bear Claw's Story

by Phoenix Heart 27

Entry #002

[10-27- 24 A.L.]

Dear Journal,
I am aware that it has been a few months since I've written. My only excuse is that I...actually lost you sometime in July. However you should be happy in that I have now thought of a name for you now! Hello to you, Jamie. Anyways, time to update you on all things that have gone on in the past 5 months.

Well to start, yesterday was my niece's 5th birthday and I honestly can't tell you how much of a headache I had this morning after that. I mean, don't get me wrong, I love Catnip. Love that little filly to pieces (and that proves true in how much I spoil her, much to Swan’s chagrin), yet the filly knows how to party--kindergartener style. Which means a lot of screaming, running, messes, and one birthday girl who is currently passed out in her room curled up with all her birthday presents. Hence the headache. I suppose it was worth it. Plus….don't tell anypony, but my crush was at the party. One of my niece's friend's is my crush’s little brother. So needless to say things got a little awkward on my end due to me trying to not make a fool of myself. I didn't make a fool of myself if that's what you were worried about, but still...I tried to keep composed. It worked until I almost literally stuck my hoof in my mouth and said something incredibly embarrassing. Oh how I wish there were a device that could erase part of a pony’s memory so that I could make everypony forget what I said and did.

Okay, so that was just yesterday. Today I….*sigh* I wish today didn't happen. Because I went to school and I was told we have to do a report on the different cultures of Equus. I was given the Native Plains Ponies of post-settlement Equestria. While I was excited at first, some jerk in my class so rudely said to me that there's nothing exciting about and I quote: “dirty, thieving savages living in mud tents who kill innocent ponies over pieces of land”.With that being said I….may or may not have lost my temper and I…”allegedly” got into a fight. You can of course see that this caused problems with my family because my mom is the one they called up to the school instead of Swan, my legal guardian. So mom came and shortly afterwards (and with a phone call from me) Swan as well. Words were exchanged and I was yelled at by both my mom and sister. When I explained myself however, is what made mom get defensive and Swan had to explain the situation to my teacher while I calmed mom down. It didn't go as well as we planned and in the end, I got grounded for a week for fighting. Crap! I gotta go. Swan saw my light on and just yelled at me to chill out and go to bed.

Yours Truly,
-Bear Claw (age 12 and ½)

Comments

[Artist]

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You’re welcome

[Starlight Nova]

And what format is Silent in?

[Phoenix Heart 27]

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I knew someone was gonna question that at some point! Simply put: Diary/Journal format. Each "entry" is another part of the story told from first-person p.o.v. This story and Silent follow that formatting.

[Golden Fang Ryu Shenron]

Love that little filly to pieces (and that proves true in how much I spoil her, much to Swan’s chagrin), yet the filly knows how to party--kindergartener style. Which means a lot of screaming, running, messes, and one birthday girl who is currently passed out in her room curled up with all her birthday presents.

Typical five year old!!!

I suppose it was worth it. Plus….don't tell anypony, but my crush was at the party. One of my niece's friend's is my crush’s little brother. So needless to say things got a little awkward on my end due to me trying to not make a fool of myself. I didn't make a fool of myself if that's what you were worried about, but still...I tried to keep composed. It worked until I almost literally stuck my hoof in my mouth and said something incredibly embarrassing. Oh how I wish there were a device that could erase part of a pony’s memory so that I could make everypony forget what I said and did.

Oooooooh, BC has a cruuuush~!!!

While I was excited at first, some jerk in my class so rudely said to me that there's nothing exciting about and I quote: “dirty, thieving savages living in mud tents who kill innocent ponies over pieces of land”.

Jakass.

Well, BC's off to a great start. Can't wait to see more.

[Golden Fang Ryu Shenron]

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Eeyup, I'm back once again baby!!! I can't wait to see more!

[Phoenix Heart 27]

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Firstly, idek how I didn't see this comment (|____>0<____|)! Secondly....yeah this is gonna get into some more explanation soon enough.
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Was wondering what happened to ya! we

[Golden Fang Ryu Shenron]

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Kinda been checkin' out others' stories here and there......and dealing with outside life...but now, I'm back!

[Phoenix Heart 27]

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No worries! It's cool dude.

[EverfreePony]

Should this be any other story in a non-diary format, it’d be a little annoying in regards of how the characters are introduced. However since this is supposed to be the diary of a twelve-year-old, the introductory page is spot on and you got plus points both for realism and characters. Furthermore, if one compares the two entries, he can find that our protagonist apparently grew a little wiser in the half year, focusing on the more important stuff

I’m curious about the native names presented there. Do they have any special meaning to them?

[Phoenix Heart 27]

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Well simply put the native italics are the rather literal translations of the words “bear claw” and “swan” in Ojibwa (Chippewa). I used those because they were the easiest ones I could remember (as I’ve known the language since I was a little one). As far as realism is concerned, despite me being an adult, I can recall being a 12 year old. However the perspective of a 12 year old colt was a bit of a challenge. A welcome challenge I admit though.

[EverfreePony]

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I see, that’s really awesome. As for the challenge, a story that’d be too easy to write is usually not a good one, so I think you did well. Anyway, I’m looking forward to the next chapter!

[Phoenix Heart 27]

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Yes. As far as the next chapter that.....might be a few months. Main reason: Kinda trying to update some of my works that are listed as “incomplete” or “on hiatus”. That takes time and creativity.

[EverfreePony]

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So many ideas, so little time, right? I know that very well, so I think I can wait

[Phoenix Heart 27]

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Of course. Trust me though, the wait will be worth it.