The Perfect Pear

by The Blue EM2

Credits

Michelle Creber-Apple Bloom
Bill Newton-Bright Mac
Felicia Day-Pear Butter
Chantal Strand-Diamond Tiara, Spoiled Rich
Madeleine Peters-Scootaloo
Sunni Westbrook-Cozy Glow
Claire Corlett-Sweetie Belle
Shannon Chan-Kent-Silver Spoon
Tabitha St. Germain-Granny Smith, Chiffon Swirl
William Shatner-Grand Pear
Ashleigh Ball-Applejack, ticket attendant
Brian Drummond-Valve Gear, band members, airport employee, Filthy Rich, conductor, the deacon, the doctor
Mark Hamill-Great Apple
Jason Deline-Bow Hothoof
Sarah Edmonson-Windy Whistles
Brian Blessed-Dark Steel

Comments

[Saberking2012]

Sorry for the long delay. Work took over and when I did have free time, I was too tired. Now that I've finally got to it, the only thing I got to say is I'm disappointed... that this doesn't get more love. The simple reason is it's well written and it's a shipping(well, canon wise) that isn't seen very often. My only question for you is this- You like trains?

[The Blue EM2]

9481399
Yup.

You wouldn't mind telling others? I tried a signal boost on Shames Self-promotion but I'm not sure that it worked at all.

[Saberking2012]

9481487 As much as I would love to, I dont think me saying anything will help since most of my followers dont even look at my blog. However, once I get like, 300 followers, I'll definitely start doing shootouts.

[The Blue EM2]

9481544
I'll try to rustle up some support for you.

[The Blue EM2]

9611289
Indeed.

[Maran]

I appreciate that despite its title, this story isn't just a copy of "The Perfect Pear" episode except with humans. My favorite change that you made is Granny Smith being the most hostile parent and Grand Pear being the most accepting. I also like how Granny Smith came around when Big Mac was born.

Mac thought for a moment. “He’s half-Apple and half-Pear, not ta mention half-Californian and half-West Virginian. This may seem a tad ironic at the moment, but how about ‘Big Mac’?”

This implies to me that the first half of Big Mac's name is in honor of his grandfather, which fascinates me. Granted, "grand" has more than one meaning, and it probably means "very good" in Grand Pear's name, since he's not large in stature. Still, I like the idea so much that I almost wish I had thought of it while writing my Apple family fanfics.

Speaking of which, I'll try to resist making too many comparisons between this story and my EG fic that reimagines this episode. But I couldn't help noticing that we both included Granny Smith's spouse and not Grand Pear's. I don't know about you, but I figured Grand's wife must have died sometime before Pear Butter eloped, because I couldn't imagine that she would also disavow her child for the rest of her life.

That said, this story's plot structure needs work. For example, there are a couple of scenes near the beginning that have no impact on the plot and are never mentioned again. The first scene was Bright Mac's concert, which drags on. It could have led to Bright and Pear bonding over their love of music, but instead the scene never goes anywhere. The second scene is when Bright met Bow, Windy, Chiffon Swirl, Rich, and Spoiled. It made me wonder why they were introduced if they weren't going to show up again. Chiffon's absence in the rest of the story was especially odd since she was Pear's best friend.

[The Blue EM2]

9639917
Thanks. I accept this is one of my weakest stories, and I'll probably re-write it from the ground up.

[FriendsForever]

9737591
okay thanks, sorry.

[The Blue EM2]

9737604
Mac says something similar in the episode.

[FriendsForever]

9737607
Yes, he did

[The Blue EM2]

9737618
So I calculated how many days approximately 20 years was.

[Twinkle_Shine]

I love this story, there was so many heartbreaking stuff here and I love it

[The Blue EM2]

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Thanks for reading.