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LoonyMoony


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Under the glow of a Hearths Warmming fire two creatures sat. An odd picture they were, one old and sat up on an armchair, the other not but a young lavender filly, sprawled out on the floor. But stories don’t care who tells them, and that night many a story was told. This one, in particular, would stand out as important to the would be princess, at least later in her life. And as such I will tell it here. A recount of the only, and mercifully brief, human/ equestrian war that history would see fit to curse us with. And all the lessons we learned from it. As told from the perspective of an aging scholar and a curious young unicorn.

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Comment posted by AlbertusKolt deleted Dec 17th, 2018

You should continue this story its very interesting

That was wonderful.

Cool story bro.

I don't usually comment, but well done!

Comment posted by LoonyMoony deleted Dec 24th, 2018

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Thanks! It feels nice to have made something that brought people happiness! Now as for your suggestion, how do you think I should continue it? I had considered the idea but in its current form the story wraps itself up pretty well. At least I think. So how do you suggest I expand it? Perhaps by telling other stories in the book? What would you do?

Thanks for the comment and merry Christmas!

Nice story, but I'm really fucking tired of people calling Celestia and Luna gods. Sure, they raise the sun and moon, but they kind of have to, ya know? For them to survive? they can't really use that power to threaten anyone.

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It could be argued that alicorns are nothing more than overpowered (supercharged, ect) ponies with so much magic it oozes from them (wavy mane/tail) like radiation from an unshielded nuclear pile and the only "real" god-like being is Discord. Still, it's a point of view. Place one of them on a metaphorical pedestal so high while cajoling everyone else to do the same and they might as well be gods.

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Yeah, I guess so. It just doesn't feel right, you know? As humans, we're taught never to kneel. Not before anyone. But ponies are, well, herbivores.

Fantastic! Really enjoyed it, the only part I found a bit strange is the fact you described the 'wartime' environment, as 'wasted'.

The most notable difference was the grass, or the lack thereof. It was all gone. Buried, burned, or outright disintegrated, the once pleasant fields of ponyville had been turned into a muddy wasteland.

Since humans and ponies are unmistakably somewhere in the Medieval age, battles usually don't stick to one area for too long. Yes, there obviously will be an environmental impact, but not to the extent of what you're describing.
But, yeah. Really enjoyed it, I honestly hope there will be a sequel.

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Thanks for the comment! And I'm really glad you enjoyed it! It does mean a lot to be able to look at this community and know that I was able to leave a piece of myself behind, so truly I'm happy you read it.

And as for the wartime thing, you hit the nail on the head there. I actually debated between myself on whether or not I should set the battle in this kind of environment, and in the end I went with this one only because I rationalized that MAYBE unicorns could cause that kind of damage. Plus I think it paints a really cool 'WW1 no man's land' kinda feeling. But in the end the problems you pointed out still remain, it almost seems too modern? Or maybe just too human. It is a bit off.

Regardless, it's fun to discuss and I'm glad you pointed it out!

On an semi related note If you're looking for anything else to read I suggest 'diaries of a madman' or 'your human and you'. DoaM Is the longest story in this site, so that's amazing, and YHaY is actually what inspired me to write this if you like human in equestria fics I really think you'll enjoy those bad boys.

Anyway thanks again and I hope you have a wonderful day! :twilightsmile:

-Loonymoony

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