Prologue
The bite of winter. The gentle rays of a half moon. The soft splashing of water. These were the few things one would expect if they went to the bridge over Canter Creek. Had they been present two weeks ago, they would've seen a broken girl standing on the guardrail just a breath away from taking her own life. If someone were to come now, they would be greeted with a similar scene. A teen girl stood on the guardrail, her red trench coat billowing in the wind as she looked out over the near-frozen water. Her dark pink hare hung loosely around her shoulders as she held herself steady with a hanging wire.
So this is what she saw that night, Pinkie thought, reaching for something in her coat pocket with her free hand. It's so peaceful here.
As she thought that, she pulled a small box out of her pocket and flicked it. A thin paper tube poked out of a hole in the top. She grabbed it with her teeth and pulled what at first glance looked like a cigarette until Pinkie pocketed the box and bit off the tip in her mouth. As she pulled the candy replica away from her teeth she let out a slow breath out of reflex just before spitting out the bit of paper wrapping in her mouth. For a moment, she let the bittersweet taste of green apples distract her from her troubles as she peeled away enough of the wrapper around her piece of candy to pull it out completely without letting go of her makeshift handhold. While she wasn't as willing to go back to old vices as Rarity was, Pinkie was willing to relive them in other ways.
I guess if I had to choose, this would be a nice thing to see before I died, she thought, placing her now naked candy cigarette in her mouth.
Yet again her mind drifted towards that night at Sugarcube Café. The destroyed look on Sunset's face as she dropped her journal and left. It was at that moment that she felt something wasn't right. That this wasn't the kind of thing the old Sunset would do. She should've said something. She should've done something. Why didn't she do something?
"I'm so spineless," she muttered lips pulled into a rueful smile as she stared down into the frozen abyss below. "If I wasn't such a coward, Flutters and I could've stopped her. She never would've had to pick a last anything."
Her smile slowly shifted into a grimace as anger took the place of her grief.
"Why did this have to happen!? Everything was going great for her! Why did they have to start this whole thing!? Why?.....Why!?........... WHY!?"
With a furious snarl, she threw her candy as far as she could.
"WHY DID EVERYTHING HAVE TO GO SO WRONG?!"
Feeling her grip on her emotions start to slip, she took a few deep breaths to regain some semblance of control of herself. It worked, mostly, as with a slightly shaking hand she pulled out her box of candy cigarettes to replace her previous one. As she did she glanced down at the water below her.
It would be so easy, she thought as she repeated the steps to get her fake vice out of its box. All it would take is just one step. One step and it would all be over. No more pain. No more heartache. I can see why she tried.
As she put the newly prepped piece of candy in her mouth she stared up at the half-moon above her, a look of resolve on her face.
"I'm going to make this right. I don't know how, but I'm going to fix this. Even if it takes me a million years, I'm gonna fix this."
She stared out over the water towards the shining city lights in the distance, a determined smile spread across her face.
"You hear me?!" she cried. "I, Pinkamena Diane Pie, swear that I'm gonna fix this or die trying! Cross my heart! Hope to fly! Stick a cupcake in my eye!"
A big smile spread across her face as for the first time in days she felt a weight fall off of her shoulders. Things were going to get better. They had to! No matter what it took Pinkie was going to make it happen. The happiness inside her continued to grow as the thought of a better tomorrow entered her head only to turn into frozen terror a second later. With a loud snap, the cable she was using as a handhold broke away from the bridge. Her heart felt like it was in a vice as her lack of balance tipped her towards the waters below her. Desperate, she tried to pitch herself back towards the bridge's main platform, but it was too late. Time seemed to slow as she fell off the railing to her doom, her fear stopping any screams from leaving her. Out of reflex she took a futile grasp at the railing, only to come just short. As she saw the key to her survival rise further out of reach, countless memories flew to the forefront of her mind. It was funny, they say that when you were going to die your whole life flashes in front of you. But these weren't just any memories to Pinkie. The sleep overs. The time they spent in the cafeteria. Having drinks at Sugarcube Café. They were the memories of Sunset before Anon-a-Miss. Before she took away Sunset's smile. When they were still friends. And now, she was about to experience what would've happened to her if someone hadn't stopped her. If she "had it her way" as she put it the day before.
In a matter of seconds, her thoughts disappeared as she made contact with the water below her. The pain was beyond imagination, as though she had been hit by a truck with frozen knives welded to its front. Then she began to sink and the knives turned into fangs as she felt the cold water tear into her. Shock kept her from resisting as she continued to sink, her head soon falling beneath the surface. The cold was agonizing, almost as much as the lack of air as she continued to sink. As death came for her and the world turned dark, a single thought flickered in her head like a dying ember.
S...un.....se....t.
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You just had to make me feel sad with the first chapter.
Yay! A sequel!
*After reading the first chapter*
...oh snap!
I'm glad this story happened so soon
Some might question your choice of tags...
When accidentally falling to your death I figure it’s best to own it in case anyone is watching.
It’s a nightmare that some of the girls will have I think pinkie Rainbow and applejack are going to be hit the hardest.
...Dude
Well, that's one way of kicking off a story.
Jesus Christ.... I wanted a sequel..... But at the expense of Pinkie wasn't what I had in mind....
Damm.. that's one way to start a sequel. Can't Whait for more!
What a hell of a way to open the story. Yeah, even without the author's note, I probably would have assumed you wouldn't kill Pinkie off. You would have had a death, suicide, or tragedy tag for starters or if you were playing coy. I'm glad there is more to this, but even if Pinkie had killed herself... as horrible as this is going to make me sound, I probably wouldn't have gotten out my torch and pitchfork. Don't get me wrong, it's sad if Pinkie dies, but Pinkie isn't a character I am going to get all bent out of shape for. I don't hate anypony/one, there are just other characters I prefer more. This is a prologue for shit's sake.
Good start, very ballsy. Doubly so if you are going to lie and kill her off. You would probably have a lot of angry people if you did that! Personally, I don't think you will. You wouldn't have cared enough to write an author's note if you weren't being a dick.
I'm on to you!
Well that's one dark way to start a sequel.
Although, I do have to wonder later on of what happened in the revealing aftermath from the last story when Rainbow, Applejack, Pinkie, and Rarity found out it was the CMC who created the account and framing Sunset and almost committed suicide. They're lives may possibly getting worse and worse in my opinion.
Well, Pinkie promised to "fix this or die trying", so really there were only two outcomes. Shame.
DON'T YOU DARE KILL PINKIE OFF LIKE THIS!
Pinkie what have I told you about breaking the fourth wall in the comment section.
grabs pinkie and pulls her into a bear hug then.
The tag is for comedy! There's nothing comedic about Pinkie nearly drowning! Pinkiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiie!
Welp, that's one way to start a new story...
Than again, Pinky did say "fix or die" so I'mma gonna go with coma, and that help them fix. After all their is no way in hell Sunset takes this "attempt" well.
Well that or dream/vision but I'm thinking coma.
Well that's one way to open a story. The death of someone that's going to be thought of as a suicide.
After reading the description I hope you have someone keep a close eye on the human CMC. They sound like they are close to breaking and they all sound like they need counciling as do the rest of the Rainbooms.
I guess Pinkie does have a chance of fixing things rarity, Apple Jack not s0 much small chance....Dash...hehehe..hahah..BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
..................Screw her.
Don't want her to die or anything, but getting a second chance forget her, she blew it.
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Only if you laugh like this. Then its funny.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hqVXi_UVkTs
I know Pinkie's gonna be okay in the end since there's no death or tragedy tag, but I still gotta get it off my chest.
PINKIE PIE!!! NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!
I feel much better now.
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She kinda looks pissed, I would start running if I was you.
I'm already eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
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I agree a coma does sound fitting.
Also:
Diane. The "e" is silent.
Tear.
Though I cane see why you went with what you did. Tear and Tear look the same, but are indeed completely different words.
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!
the dramatic irony of all this being the fact that there isn't a lot pinkie could do to get this instantaneous forgiveness/ fixing everything she expected.
That is all.
That is some serious Shakespearean Final Destination stuff right there.
WELL THAT'S A WAY TO START A STORY, JESUS CHRIST!!
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Yeah. What is this? Infinity War?
Huh. Same setting as the original prologue, however.
Sunset wanted to end her life and survived.
Pinkie wanted to fix her life and died.
Very ironic. Glumshanks is that ironic.
I tend to stay away from ironic, sir. On account of nobody knows what it means.
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Twilight? I don't feel so good.
I don't get it. (Pinkie's bizzare death) When people fall into the water they are either die to fast from a hard impact or stay conscious enough to start swimming.
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She stayed conscious, but mostly dazed from the impact and sudden drop in temperature. Plus, her coat was dragging her down.
Well that's one hell of an opener!
after finishing this whole story I think I found Sunsets perfect theme song:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5gyANphz_Kk
this has been one wild ride for sure so thanks for putting this out there for us all to read.
You know it's gonna be one heck of a ride when a story starts with something like this!
🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 That is so funny!