Great now i want to see twilight eat all the Food in a All you can eat restaurant and now i am a 100% hook

Ouch, right in the feels, Twi.
And then so comfy in the kitchen.

Keep up the good work, I can see the effort you've put in.

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Like I said, try to find an editor. Your english is pretty good, but native readers are going to stumble while reading the errors. It pulls you out of the story. Keep trying!!

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*smiles genuinely* Thank you ... as much as it ales me to know that I made so many mistakes, I will not stop writing in the foreseeable future. I will try to improve though and I hope I can show results soon, but for now, all I can do is hope that you are patient.

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Considering you're writing in a second language it's pretty impressive how well you're doing. Plus, fanfic writing is a great way to improve your skills. Keep it up!

This was really good, can't wait of the next chapter.

Poor Twilight. That dream was touching.

Seeing his surrogate son making breakfast,

So Twilight is a tranny now? Should probably fix that, lol.

Rereading this because of the new chapter. One thing jumped out at me, Twilight would technically not be a noble. Nobles are aristocrats that have no direct right to the throne. Succession rights being what they were royalty and nobility were considered very distinct groups.

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I... I am sorry, but I can't follow you rn... *hehe* I've read my own chapters now... how do you come onto that idea? Or is it just a randome though?
Well... asside from the accuracy... did I miss something?

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“No, not really. It's just the normal gossip over nobility.”

“Which you are a part of, aren’t you?” Starlight asked mockingly, knowing exactly that this was a sore spot for the young princess.

This seemed like a missed opportunity for a little lecture. Twilight being Twilight, and not wanting to be associated with that group of pompous idiots, wouldn't just ignore that misconception.

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Well, cant do everything, but now thinking about it :D sure