Rarity finds herself in the company of a handsome stranger. She doesn't know where she is, and she has... wings?! The world around her seems unlike how it should be as the pair journey out in search of answers.
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Tranquil Serenity
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I always thought of it as more of a violet color. Lavender tends to be a lot lighter than the color of Rarity's mane and tail.
That said, I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
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Rarity's mane.
Lavender flowers.
To me, lavender is just a fancy way of saying purple anyways.
Also, thanks for the words of encouragement. 
Oho! We've a multi-parter on the go here. Very good!
I was secretly hoping for one. The usual comes first, haha.Accidentally repeated word.
Haha, you know, I really did imagine a silver Diamond Tiara sitting grumpily atop her head. Extra karma for that!
The participle phrase 'approaching the hyperventilating alicorn' is floating between two sentences. Is it
or
?
I don't know if it's intentional, but 'with a smirk' sounds a little too smug for this character, who has so far been very polite and considerate. Just my gut feeling on the first read-through.
I enjoyed this! And I'm certainly intrigued. As per usual, T.S., your writing reads very well, and this chapter pulled me in nicely. Looking forward to the next! I'm no sucker for the 'Romance' tag, but 'Adventure' and 'Drama' for sure! Plus, I know this story's in good hands. Your Rarity is simply divine, darling – not overdone, moderate in her mannerisms yet undeniably 'Rarity'. I know you like writing her, haha, based on your other stories. You've done her justice every time. Well done, T.S., and I wish you luck with your first multi-parter!
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Oh my! Your 'Diamond Tiara' comment made me laugh!
Corrected! Thanks!
I was admittedly a bit hesitant about choosing the word 'smirk', but I didn't want to use the word 'smile' too many times in reference to his expression, and in this case it was simply a sort of: 'Well, we had a problem and now we don't anymore! Life's funny isn't it?'
I'm also trying not to make him seem too perfect. 
Thank you so much for the compliments! It's true that I've written more stories about Rarity than the others, which is actually even a bit of a surprise to myself. I guess there's just something about her that makes her a character comfortable to write for.
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If you chose to for a good reason, that makes it intentional and acceptable in my book, haha!
It might have something to do with the fact she's best pony.You might as well add in the 'Mystery' tag to this story cause i have NO IDEA what the heck is going in here, but I'm really loving it though.
Keep up the good work my good man
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Thanks so much! 
I'm so glad you're enjoying it. 
Haha!
Definitely interested in what's going on.
My blind guess is alternate world.
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Thanks for expressing your interest.
My darker side is screaming for a determiner before 'whole concept', haha. 'The' in this case.
I really like the tone so far. I don't know why, but the dark, star-filled sky and gentle water and descriptions remind me of Skyrim, when you're exploring a shipwreck on the coastline. Good job so far when it comes to reeling us in; you've revealed nothing compromising but enough to maintain a reader's interest. I wonder how the Princess of Generosity will go down with her friends... if she meets them.
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Thank you for pointing that out. Glad you're enjoying it.
With a glint in her eye(?).
Haha, there's this nice little tone you've got going here, my man. I'm liking it, that's for sure! Short and sweet, these chapters, and entertaining as well. Nice try, Rarity, but we knew you'd struggle just as all first-time fliers do.
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts again. 
Yep. Flying right takes practice.