I'm not that Desperate, just to let you know.
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Underway of a rewrite from the ground up!
Werewolves are known for its ferocity, and its urges to kill everything on its path, and was also known to isolate themselves from any interaction. However, this is untrue for Ark, the energetic, yet enigmatic Werewolf who wanted to join the King’s Guardian, a specially trained group of wolves that protects the Kingdom and its people.
Still, his life changed sooner than he thought as he found himself on the border of Equestria.
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Fun Fact :
Fenrir is a wolf from Norse Myth. Since they were wolf, so they swear using his name since Fenrir is a wolf or a hound. And also their language is norwegian since... they're norse. And because I don't speak one, Google is my best friend for a norwegian word. Feel free to correct me in this one since I just do a crash course on the wolf related myth.
The story is good keep up the good work
Apart from needing an editor, this is really good. Keep it up.
good chapter can't wait for the next update
Wow, this is a very quick update ain't it?
Oh well, gonna go to sleep now.
Point out any errors you may find eh?
See ya guys later.
Desperate Dawn
story's good so far keep up the good work
Heavy editing needed.
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I beg your pardon but what in need of editing, if I may ask politely?
Well maybe some part of the paragraph that's for sure, and true, my style of writing may differs from others as I am not a native English speaker and the lack of editors seems to be the most problem for everyone reading my story, not that I brush aside everyone saying that. Its just... I actually and honestly confused, does it the verb that needs some rework? Or simply that I put on too much unnecessary word?
I may one day get an editor or even a pre-reader to tell me whats wrong but please hold on for now and point out the mistakes I made openly or through PM.
Again, don't get me wrong, I'm just confused, do you guys having trouble understanding the story or something? Looking for an editor seems to be more and more clear. But please just point out any mistake kay? ANYTHING!
I wanted people to point put whats wrong, is that hard to ask
Well done,
A creative and interesting story. As for whats wrong, really not much. Minor issues that are easy to ignore. Some stories in this place are written in "Cave Man Speak". Yours is fairly well done. The English only really has minor sentence structure issues. Like this one.
While this isn't how someone would say this, the meaning is clear enough to not impact the story.
There are two types of translated / English as a second language stories here. 1. The painful to read, "caveman speak" , hard to even understand whats going on. and 2. Obvious that it was written by someone who doesn't speak english regularly, but with only minor issues that don't interfere with enjoying the story at all.
You fall into the second category. The minor issues here don't stop the reader from enjoying your story.
By the way, I rather like this story and am looking forward to more. I hope it comes out of hiatus soon.
The Monk
"Knowledge is power and power corrupts, so study hard and be evil." - Reykan
Just keep writing.
People forget that writing is an art, just like oil painting or playing a guitar. No one puts out a masterpiece when they first start out. It takes practice to improve. A lot of wasted paper, a lot of wasted canvas, a lot of wasted guitar pics. You don't improve unless you practice. Don't let negative feedback get you down. Do you know of the cartoonist Gary Larson from the Far Side Comics? His art teacher told him he would amount to nothing and he should just give up on art. Several publishers laughed him out of their offices because they thought his art was so bad. Fuckers a millionaire now.
Just thought I would share.
The Monk
“Puberty was a curse for those inflicted with it, and boundless amusement for others who survived the process.” -Scarheart
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). So, yes, I'll be continuing this alongside We're both twins!, you'll see more of this in the future. 
Eyy, thank you for leaving another comment like this, greatly appreciate it!
I forgot to put the Incomplete Tags when I was out editing at my workplace(Mandatory internship from school
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Putting your hearts and mind into your work sure do wonders huh?
I ship Freya and Ark.
More please?
More please!