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Tranquil Serenity

I am a one-shot writer who loves Slice of Life tales and hearing from readers who enjoy my stories. Click on my blogs for an MLP poem.


Zecora gives Rarity a rare and beautiful plant, but unbeknownst to the zebra and unicorn at the time, perhaps the gift may soon prove to be far more trouble than it's worth.

It's certainly a good thing Twilight's there to help though!

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Comments ( 11 )

The Zebra smiled. "In Everfree are many plants. I happened upon this one by chance."

Ye-heh-es. When I saw this, I knew Zecora would be written well – it's a pet peeve of mine when authors try too hard to make it rhyme (i.e., having the words in question mirror each other in terms of not only sound but also spelling). Then there are also those who care too little about giving Zecora decent, inoffensive yet functional dialogue. So you got this spot on, my man.

Rarity promptly closed the door behind her, preventing anymore of the chill night air from seeping in.

Any more – not anymore, the adverb. (This just jumped out at me; I promise I did not go looking.)

She stepped over an overgrown vine on her way... She just stepped over a what?!?


Well done again, T.S., I really enjoyed this. Your tone game with these SoLs is solid. Your writing style is mellow and very palatable, which complements the story content. And also, seeing that you've given yourself a little more room to develop a one-shot, the overall experience becomes... stronger? It has more going for it, anyway, and feels closer to a show episode on account of the extra words. Great job! Keep 'em coming!

Thank you SO much! Submitting a new story can be a bit nerve wracking, so I'm very grateful for such a positive and detailed review. Quite happy you enjoyed this one! :pinkiehappy:

Yeah, man, this one was nice.

I may also have over-commented on your other seven stories, but hey-ho. Lol.

Comments are good. Over-commenting is good. It's all good! :raritywink:

Good grief, for a moment I thought Rarity had accidentally been gifted with Audrey 2. I was wondering how she was going to handle the duet where she'd have to take Seymore's part. Cute. Thumbs up! :twilightsmile:

Well this was interesting. Though it was kind of obvious that Opal would shred the paper. I'm surprised that Opal didn't eat the vine piece by mistake as retribution for that

I also find the the two plants introduced here interesting.

Glad you found it interesting. :pinkiesmile:

Well-done. A simple, but exciting tale.

Thank you! This one is special to me, but admittedly doesn't seem to get much attention these days. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :pinkiesmile:

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