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A Killer's Heart

Ever since Shadow started to live on his own, he did everything that was requested, and after 20 years, he gets a new emotion when he is contracted to take out a mechanic.

I wrote this story out of fun with two of my OCs

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ExplosionMare

ExplosionMare #1 · Nov 13th, 2018 · · ·

The pacing is a bit confusing to me. Why was he quickly going from killing her to saving her (other than he was in love)? Why was the robot trying to kill him? Why was the mare in love as well even though she knew she could’ve been killed by the dragon? Maybe if the pacing were to slow down it would help the story. Just a suggestion though.

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