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Tranquil Serenity


I am a proud one-shot writer who loves Slice of Life tales and hearing from readers who enjoy my stories. Click on my blogs for an MLP poem.

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The Mane 6, Spike, Zecora, and Maud Pie all meet for a private poetry recital in Twilight's hollowed tree home. Together they share their thoughts on many things, mostly in the form of rhyme.

Contains nine original poems, as well as some heartwarming and humorous interactions between friends. Smiles abound.

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Comments ( 21 )

These were brilliant! I loved them! Keep writing!

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Aww! Thank you so much! :twilightsmile:

Well written-and thank you for writing this.

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I'm glad you thought so, and thank you for reading it. :raritywink:

The Poetic Six enjoyed this story, which has been written with glory.:ajsmug:

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9280714
Haha! :twilightsmile: Thank you for the encouragement. :raritywink:

A fun read. It takes confidence to write poetry from so many viewpoints.

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Or perhaps just a love of rhyming. :derpytongue2: Thank you for the comment! :twilightsmile:

Aww, this was wonderful. Also, of course, Pinkie Pie would write a mostly free verse poem. The content of the poem in question was surprisingly deep for her though. Are you sure Gummy didn't write it? "sigh" I just love a good poem.

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Haha! :twilightsmile: The point was for it to be unexpected. Pinkie Pie does lot's of random and surprising things, so what would be more surprising than something you wouldn't expect her to write? :raritywink: Thanks for the read by the way. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :pinkiehappy:

"Even I was in it!" Spike chimed, smiling happily.

LOL! And it seems I've thrown caution to the winds with this order, have clicked 'quote' many times and shall now proceed to try and remember why.

Twilight stood up from her seat and took her place standing in front of the rows of chairs. She cleared her throat, holding some papers aloft with her magic. "My poem is entitled; Books." That declaration earned a snicker from more than a few members. Twilight rolled her eyes in response and continued.

Funny, hehe. But! Aha ha, see, watch me poop on the party by pointing this out. You've (mis)used that there semicolon again.

'My poem is entitled "Books".'

would do fine, as would any variation, really. Just a punctuation thing, isn't it.

" 'Fabulous' is something that many strive to be But those that succeed, are few and far between It is an ideal that requires more than one key It is something that can, and can't be easily seen

Ayyy, I really liked this poem. (I do spy a little comma where it shouldn't be. You're blocking your subject's way to its predicator:

But those that succeed are...

Some may say 'Rarity, don't be absurd!' 'You attribute such meaning to this single word?' To that I say; Yes! Yes, yes I do! And now that you've heard it... I hope you will too."

I really liked this poem.

"Super official?" Pinkie repeated, obviously not having heard correctly.

Good ol' Pinkie.

"Alright. Thank you, Rarity," said Twilight in a more formal tone. "Rainbow! Your next."

I hate to be the one pointing out your/you're confusion. I feel obliged to say again that I am not actively looking for any of this, haha. It simply jumps out at me as I read.

Flowers spread their petals, stretching after their slumber. Dew drops slip hurriedly from their leaves. Warmth envelopes the sky giving all below a gold aura. The birds sing of their sorrows... but only few comprehend."

Aww, I love how you handled this poem and everypony's reaction to it. ('Envelope' is a noun; 'envelops' is the verb you're looking for.)

"Whose next, Twilight?" Rainbow asked, trying to move things along.

Who's/whose confusion.

We take them for granite The slate, the basalt, the quartz.... They are what makes up this planet And there are many sorts

The puns though. I liked the 'set in stone' afterwards too!

"I feel so loved," Maud said, her tone invariable.

"This is a touching embrace, but please do not squish my face," Zecora requested.

Double lol!

Aww, man, this story was so sweet. This could easily be an episode and an enjoyable one at that. I loved this and appreciate the effort that clearly went into it. Just the one story left for me to read now!

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Thanks for pointing out your own LOL moments and drawing my attention to a few oopsies. :pinkiesmile: I appreciate it, and I'm glad you enjoyed this one too! :twilightsmile:

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You've got this neat little formula going that gets me every time. You write the show characters very competently and stick to show-like plots and storytelling, which is harder to pull off than people think and certainly engaging for the reader.

On an old account or two, I used to try little things like these but couldn't pull them off as you do. My stuff was a little too hard and not warm or mellow enough (reflective of personality much). Even now, when I've improved considerably, I don't attempt anything of the sort, knowing I don't have this 'feel' you need for SoLs. I could try, but I'm focused on different genres and writing styles at the moment (with success, thank god!).

I mean, that's what draws me in so well when it comes to your stuff. It isn't edgy or overbearing; it isn't threatening you as a writer (yes, this happens), saying, 'Look how great I am.' They're just nice, quiet, simple yet effective little pieces of work that put a smile on your face, and who wouldn't want to read something like that?

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LOL! (My two least favourite ponies amirite.)

Np, man, as I said, really looking forward to your future works!

That was a fun read. L like each and every poem written.

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Aww. :twilightsmile: Thank you for your kind words. :pinkiehappy:

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i have but one gripe with this story
where in the wide world of equestria were the limericks and haikus?
you got freeform, one of the least known forms of poetry, so how and/or why did you miss these?

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Well, Limericks and haikus are pretty short, and I wanted them to each have a poem that was of a slightly more substantial length for one. :applejackunsure: Thanks for reading, this one doesn't get much attention these days. :raritywink:

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shame, those are my two favorite types of poem

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