Fluttershy is awoken one night and finds a mysterious intruder in her home. With the help of Twilight and Rainbow Dash she will uncover who this mysterious pony is and what they're intentions were. But along the way Fluttershy begins to experience new feelings for Twilight. Maybe even romantic ones. But is it possible Twilight could feel the same way about her?
PS: This is my first fic so go easy on me :)
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is this whole thing a sett up and rainbow is acting wingmare
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You'll have to wait and see :D.
You have my attention. Also, I have a guess of who it is in my mind but i'm not going to say anything just in case I might be right. Have a moustache my friend.
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Ahhhhhhhhhhhh, I'm very excited to see how this turns out! Take all the time you need to work on this and it's sweet to see the result of your first story on here! I always love seeing stories pop up that involve Twi & Fluttershy, and given the concept that you've created so far, I'm really excited to see how this turns out!!! Really sweet to see how you lay everything out and how everything happens. It's very fun and ahhhh the little cute moments between Twi & Fluttershy, looking forward to those! Really fun mystery going on in here and it's gonna be interesting to see how that turns out and how it all comes together! Keep being amazing!! Loving this a lot so far ahhhhh
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Thanks so much! I really appreciate the feedback and kind words :D.
D'awwww yessssssssss, both the cuteness and the clues being put out for the mystery continue. Really sweet to see how this develops once again. One thing that I really love is your ability to portray Fluttershy & Twilight. Their dialogue seems authentic and the way that they interact with one another is precious as also with that very natural which you've done a great job with portraying. The little moment of Fluttershy comforting Twi is one of my favorite things that I love when Twi & Shy are together, great job with that. It really feels like something they would do and say. Ahhhhhh. But yesssss, loving this lots. Keep it up! Lots of cuteness and important stuff unraveling.
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Thank you so much!! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.
Woooo, you really got the productivity and creativity going with these quick updates!! Love that a lot and hope you're going at a pace that is manageable for you to delivery quality at the same time with these quick updates. As with that, it's great to see your productivity with this story as for me just loving what's going on in here with the TwiShy and you just getting that attitude of "writing and not stopping," is a great way to improve. You really start to get into the groove and get more familiar with how to work with these characters. Ahhhhh, and then we have this. Everything about this melts my heart. The dream scenario is well executed to give that shock and fear that Fluttershy has. THEN AWWWW, WHEN SHE GOES TO WAKE UP TWI, I ALREADY KNOW THAT FLUFF WILL ENSUE. AGAIN, AS I'VE BEEN SAYING. I really love how natural their interactions together are and how you've conveyed Twi's caring nature towards Fluttershy, that's definitely something that I always love seeing and it's a gem when seeing it in the show.
Ooooo, and the little conversation that they have about being best friends is a little fun bit you added within there. It adds lots of depth and reasoning that I love lots. With how Fluttershy can be more relaxed around Twi and can be who she is with how caring towards Fluttershy Twi is. AHHHHHHHHHHH LOTS OF FLUFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF. YOU'RE DOING WONDERS. Love thissssssss. keep doing great things, making me smile with these updates and the cuteness aw!
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. I'll try to keep the updates coming as often as I can.
Thank you
I am calling it now... Cloaked unicorn was Twilight
Am I entertained? ....hmmm... Yes, yes I am.. Do I wish for this to continue? .. Hmmm.. Yes, yes I do... Bring forth the cuteness and fluff!
"But why is she? Does she feel the same way about me? No it couldn't be that, Could it?"
The 'c' in could doesn't need to be capitalized.
After talking with Rainbow Fluttershy felt more determined than ever.
There should be a comma between Rainbow and Fluttershy.
Hope this helps.
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Thank you.
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You're welcome my good friend.
Yes.. This fluff pleases me...
good story so far
im thinking its her brother