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Granny Smith founded a humble farming village; it was her son, Bright Mac, and his best friend, Burnt Oak, who seized their chance and turned it into a thriving town. Now Burnt Oak tells the three Apple siblings the truth about their father's legacy.
Written as part of National Pony Writing Month 2018.
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Good to hear! Thanks, and glad you liked it.
But dang was this a good story. I would love to have an episode like this, good show.
9295675
High praise indeed! Thank you for saying so!
A great story. I have one question though: At the end, I'm not sure if "you three" are the 3 Apple Siblings, or the CMC. He seems to refer to Big Mac and Applejack like they are not present.
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Thanks! Oh, those three are meant to be the Apple siblings. I've gone back and made that more explicit in the ending, and earlier when Big Mac is introduced.
Always a pleasure to read a story that reminds us that people don't have to be perfect to be good.
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I was honestly a little nervous applying that to the Apple parents, considering the show does err towards the perfect in their starring episode (they don't really seem to have any major flaws, for instance). However, it is an important lesson worth depicting, so I thought I'd try it.
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My folks are about as close to perfect as one can expect to get, and I'm very blessed for that, but they definitely have flaws. I think it's important for people to know that perfection is worth chasing (because excellence is possible), but also that perfection itself is unattainable in this world. It makes us gentler with others and with ourselves. Using the Apples was a gamble, but I think the fact that they are such self-evidently good people just makes the point more poignant. It was the right risk to take.
Fantastic work. Everyone has flaws. It's what you do when you find yourself facing them that makes the difference. The voicing was quite good as well; this flows like a monologue should, with digressions and asides as would naturally arise. Thank you for it.
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Exactly. I don't remember who said it, but I remember the following quotation: "Perfectionism is the enemy of improvement." It's a similar theme to the one I used in Unworthy of the Sun, though obviously this is a more down-to-earth variant (or at least as down-to-earth as it can be with killer timberwolves and exploding gemstones).
I'm glad you enjoyed it, especially the voicing. Although I will admit Burnt Oak's voice sounded more like Sam Elliott's in my head, for some bizarre reason.
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I'd be surprised if it didn't. He's basically a ponification of the narrator of The Big Lebowski.
I love this and stories like this one, there's no big adventure, just a srory of people living their lives, making mistakes, and learning from them. thanks
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Honestly, that's what makes Friendship is Magic so good; sure, you can have big epic adventures, but often it's more compelling to see ponies just getting on with their everyday lives, solving everyday problems, and facing their everyday flaws while doing so.
Thanks for the comment! I'm glad you liked my story.
Can you do a story of the story told by them? By the way, touching story
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You mean the little nod at the end? I didn't really have one in mind; that part was mostly to imply Burnt Oak and the Apple siblings were starting to consider spending more time with each other, which led to the idea of a back-and-forth between them.
Also, thank you very much.
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oh, ok. And thx