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Cackling Moron


"Fluff" in the same way what collects under the sofa is fluff.

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This story is a sequel to Scary Monsters


Following on from his jailbreak the local human finds himself in something of a rut, and decides that this is due to his nagging feeling that the previous matter had not been resolved to his satisfaction.

He decides the best way of rectifying this is to break into at least two castles, get locked up again and disappoint just about every single entity he happens to encounter.

Often while naked.

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Comments ( 16 )

I don't know why I like this nutter, but I do. He should build a still, swipe some potatoes, and show the ponies what proper booze is.

This and the story before are really good. I would love to keep reading more if you think something up.

There's this sort of quiet melancholy over the story (and the last) that I like a lot, though I'm having trouble putting it into words. It's good though, I like it.

See, a comedic tragedy is possible.

See, you fucked up again, you’ve made the same mistake as last time...

You left us wanting more.

Now I wanna see Jack punch the dragons. All of them.

This is what happens when you cave in to demands.

An origin story would be interesting. Curious about why is he acting like a clown.

I love this. I want to see some epic dragon fights!

This was so much better than I thought it'd be.

Now I wanna see him fight Ember.
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And likely wind up in a dragon prison.

Dude, I'm going to read everything you write on Jack. MOAR

BEST PART: anytime twilight is interacting with jack. also starlight asking twilight if they banged and everypony in town assuming.

WORST PART: kinda the rest. story is kinda all over the place.

what do you want to tell the reader? a story about a man and his misadventures in horse land while being an ass? that sounds awesome. but the whole sequence with rarity, twilight talking to celestia, and eggs kinda just showing up... i didn't feel like it was from the same story.

the whole scene where jack drags the royal guard just to boop celestia should have felt epic. it just felt disjointed.

please continue your story how you see fit, i'll still read it. i did giggle when twi asked about that hydra.

This and the last one are absolutely wonderful, great work!

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Nah, he whips her good, and dragons being dragons he's made viceroy.

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Why do I keep seeing you everywhere?

I like that this turned out as it did. Some minor issues with the beginning of the previous story left me a bit off put. Though with this it seemed quite well executed and made me interested in a sprawling adventure where he finds, fights, and inevitably befriends dragons only to come back to Ponyville and start up a bar with proper dragon inspired brews... But maybe that's just me, lol.

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