Midnight Glow is a Lantern Keeper, a holy pony tasked with the job of guiding lost souls to the afterlife. After a successful exorcism of Carousel Boutique, Midnight is called back to Ponyville to help Twilight Sparkle, as the ghost that had haunted Rarity seems to have moved to her castle.
Unbeknownst to Midnight, what looks to be a run-of-the-mill haunting holds a dark secret underneath. A horror that goes far beyond anypony's comprehension.
Inspired by H.P Lovecraft's Cthulhu mythos, as well as the Tide Sages and Order of the Silver Hand from World of Warcraft.
Special thanks to my friend, Gree the Writer, for proof reading and editing this fic! Please check out his youtube channel here: http://bit.ly/GreeTheWriter
Now with an audio reading: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fKU1diTlrwk&t=141s
I hope there's a sequel...
This could be the start of something great.
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I was originally planning to do a sequel to my other horror fic, "The Deep", but this formed more ideas and felt less like a direct ponyfication of "At the Mountains of Madness". Should the opportunity arise, I'll happily write more Lovecraftian horror, though don't expect much in the way of concrete answers as to what Midnight Glow saw.
That would just spoil the fun ;).
Jesus, this was good! Also, if anyone cares about my two Cents, if i saw something like that, i'd react the exact same way. Worshiping an ancient monstrosity and living or dying and being forgotten, it's really not a Hard choice to make.
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Thank you for the praise! No one can resist the allure of the old gods ;).
Hi there! I loved this story, I'm not much of a Lovecraft fan but this was amazing! I did a reading of this story on my YouTube channel, I'll leave a link below if you would like to check it out.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fKU1diTlrwk&t=141s
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Thank you so much! I'll add this to the story's description =D.
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I followed you here. :V
*glances over* Oh hey, Mare in White is listed as a related story. Neat!
I like this story, it does a good job of portraying an exorcism gone wrong, and the Lovecraftian twist was certainly unexpected. (I listened to his reading so I didn't see the description)
Edit: interesting, I have two related stories: the Ghost story and the Lovecraftian one... I'm surprised I hadn't seen this one.
I have to say, I really enjoyed reading this. The atmosphere was gripping and rich, complimented both by your descriptions and work with pacing, and, I have to admit, I definitely wasn’t expecting this to turn into a Lovecraftian tale, mostly because I didn’t check the long description or the comments below this one. The tidbits of lore about Lantern Keepers seem also pretty good, and I’d like to see more stories about Midnight’s adventures prior to this one.
Your grammar and spelling are rather solid, though I have noticed quite a few errors and some rough spots, though nothing really recurring. Watch out for missing capitalisation of proper nouns (such as Ponyville and Crystal Empire), the occasional sentence fragment, and punctuation inconsistencies—em dashes are used in most of this story, but I’ve noticed a few spots where you switched to en dashes or hyphens. Also, there are a few tense shifts in the scene where Twilight welcomes Midnight at the platform. It’s all just minor errors, but a keen eye will notice them.
Furthermore, there are two things that stood out to me story-wise and momentarily broke my immersion. The first was Midnight disregarding Taffy’s warnings, which felt both reckless and also rather disrespectful towards her. Second was the creaking floorboard by the gargoyle statue. The idea of a wooden floor in the castle seemed a bit odd to me, but I shrugged it off as your version of it. However, it kind of clashes with this part:
I apologise, I know I’m nitpicky, but I cannot really help it
All in all, this was a very good horror story. Thank you for this read!
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Thank you so much for the constructive feedback! Some of these are habbits I'm trying to break, and in my mind the Lanturn Keeper is over-confident in his abilities. This tale was a big experiment for me, as I'm not used to writing in first person present tense. I'm glad you enjoyed the story =3,
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You are welcome, I'm glad I could help at least a tiny bit. And you did really well writing in this POV and tense, both seemed really natural despite your inexperience