After another failed attempt at a good deed, Starlight Glimmer is at the end of her rope. She feels like she's falling apart, and that she'll never be the pony her friends want her to be. Worse than that, she's beginning to wonder why they're all so nice to her. Are they really her friends or is she actually... a problem that they think needs fixing?
Maybe she'd be better off trying to fix herself. Alone.
Warning: Contains sads, and is meant to take place shortly after Starlight first moves to Ponyville.
Done as a commission for interrobang_, who wanted some good old fashioned emotional angst.
Chapters (1)
Star Kite
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But why.
Just like you said in your A/N, we've all been here. Very well done.
One note though, once Starlight got back to her room, her name was written as Twilight and it confused me for a sec.
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OH! thanks, I'll fix that!
Depression is a horrible beast. Been there, felt that. This is very compelling and heart-wrenching. Very well done.
I noticed a few tiny errors, and if you’ll forgive my impertinence:
I think you mean “dagger?”
“She,” probably?
“On the,” I think? Lousy autocorrect.
“Come”
not bad...then ending thoughfelt empty, like nothing was fully settled
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Thanks, fixed.
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If it felt empty, then I've hit my mark. Thank you.
Wow that was... very nice! Any chance for more chapters
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Not unless I'm commissioned for more, heh. As of now, I doubt it. It was intended to end feeling like there's no closure.
This was a very heart breaking story, pencil. I've been in Starlight's shoes and I know how terrible she feels. I liked the statement you made about ones thoughts being a bully and I believe that to be true. Many of us tend to treat ourselves terribly. But ones mistakes should not define them. There is so much more to see if we will only look inside.
Intressting story I hope you will do a sequal as I see alot of potential in this story keep up the good work
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That is nice though, kind of like how everyone has their own way to get through it. everyone can write their own ending in their brain. . . brains. . . sounds delicous
Anonpencil is getting that bread lately. 🥖
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I'm tryin' man! 10 commissions in 11 days!
Thanks for the great fap Anonpencil, you're such a dear.
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Hahahahaha anytime! you weirdo ...says the weirdo. ;)
That looks more like early Twilight style: Starlight is extremely robust in achieving what she intends with magic, the problem usually lies in the fact that her thing is not something that should successfully be done in the first place.
That was cold.
Has Twilight locked the door behind her?
To whom?
Also this. Is "star light, star bright" a some kind of common saying, or it's just a coincidence?
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It's a children's rhyme for when you wish on a star.
"Star light, star bright
first star I see tonight,
I wish I may, I wish I might,
Have the wish I wish tonight."
Meh.
So Okay It's Average.
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Thank you!
I realized that I should definitely have asked google first before bothering you
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It's okay! I always liked that little rhyme, it's nice to use it for a story. :)
Fuck me, this is..
This is some powerful shit right here.
Y u do dis to me
It's emotional self-harm. A trial suicide, if you will--you kill off that social self, then hungrily consume every piece of evidence that no one cares that you did so.
Mmmm delicious. I love seeing Shitlight be sad, this is going right into the spank bank
It's sad seeing best pony so sad. She needs a hug. Twilight get out there and do it.
You know, Applejack is being really hypocritical here considering who her other friends are and the list of similar stuff they have done. CoughRainbowDashCough. CoughPinkiePieCough . CoughTwilightSparkleCough
Remember that time Twilight put a spell on those pests and they ended up eating her house/barn/whatever?
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Hmmm....
This is really good. But in my opinion, it would be better if you took it further....you know, have her go to Manehattan or something, have Twilight gather her friends and go after her. Have AJ apologise for overreacting (especially given the fact her barn was destroyed multiple times by her friends and herself and she didn't really do much, and yet here she came down hard on Starlight over a shed...which is much smaller than her barn), and have them convince her that she does deserve friendship and that she should come home where she belongs.
(All that is probably gonna be two chapters worth of writing!)
Anyway, that's what I would do. But of course, its your story.
Yeah. NO. This failed miserably on every level. Mostly because Applejack is acting like this doesn't happen a lot in Ponyville.
Is she entitled to be mad? Yes. But this is nothing but her being a bitch to Starlight as nothing more than pay back for season 5's premier.
And that goes against her character. She didn't do the same to Twilight in season 1, and to other ponies who did the same.