It's just another day at Rarity and Derpy's small detective agency. They're waiting for their next big case when who should arrive but Mayor Mare! It seems she has a bit of a problem, and needs their help to solve a mystery. Can Rarity figure it all out with her usual ease and grace?
Was it even in question, Darling?
(Based in style and form on The Adventures of Sherlock Holmes)
Written as a commission for the wonderful Olden Bronie, who I hope loves reading this as much as I loved writing this.
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Absolutely fucking brilliant. As I said, i've read the entirety of the Conan Doyle stories. And seriously, this really fits in perfectly. Bravo, Pencil-sama! Bravo!
Pencil, darling!
This was a absolutely fabulous! I couldn't have imagined a better style for this story and it is simply wonderful!
ThankyouThankyouThankyou!
(I love Sherlock Holmes, too. And Columbo)
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As long as you enjoyed it, that is what matters the most. :)
Will there be more?
Called it! Also, are seqals comissionable?
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You can commission me for anything. Check out my most recent blog post! :)
Autocorrect changed Derpy to Derby a lot, so I would suggest going back and fixing that.
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Well drat. Thanks. Should be fixed any second. XD
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Is everyone a "DAAAHHHHLING" then?
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You’re welcome, I know autocorrect can be a real pain sometimes.
I'm always down for a rousing detective tale! It continually surprises me that there aren't more mysteries on the site — perhaps it's that they're harder to write than the average fic. You have to actually figure out how the plot fits together, and make the deductions seem brilliant yet plausible. For only 2000 words this did a fair amount of that. :)
One distracting dialogue tag goof though (and a couple of "Derby"s instead of "Derpy"s).
Thanks for the story!
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Will fix. The derbys were all fixed before then too :)
What, no Detective Laughstraude pine to one up?
A nice story showcasing Rarity as a detective. While the story sounds like a good mystery it would also be better if you provide a way for readers to be able to solve the case before Rarity solves it in very subtle ways.
For instance, have the beginning of the story mention the specific time and later on show the article Rarity reads of the time Mayor Mare is settling the accusations of bribery. This sets the scene for readers to deduce Mayor Mare is the client for the day.
Also, have her assistant shows signs of nervousness as she enters Rarity's office to hint at her being the culprit to readers without actually revealing it.
Loved the story. It's more of a Sherlock style, as in focusing in showing Rarity's solving skills, but enjoyable nonetheless.