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giganticbuttmachine


Yeah.

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A chain of events makes Rainbow Dash end up in the middle of nowhere, and the only help is offered by a strange green earth pony that is named Swift Cloud for some reason. As the two try to find Ponyville again, both ponies learn things about themselves, each other, and what home really is.

That story that won't get out of your head until you write it down. First time writing stuff, so don't expect anything professional.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 11 )

Yeah, pretty good for a first fic! In a few places you used lower case 'I's, but nothing that wouldn't get cleared up on another read through. Best of luck! :twilightsmile:

Many thanks! I always seem to do the lowercase i thing, I should fix that

This looks to be pretty darn likable.

The meeting came off quite well, I thought. Is the dual POV going to continue through the rest of the story? (Not that I mind; I actually like it better than some of the standard third-person omniscient constructions I've seen.)

1042979 Probably, mostly because it's fun to build a character purely from offhanded thoughts. Also the mental spaz outs.

I have to point out that, given what an avid reader this guy is supposed to be, I'd be really surprised that in all the books he's gone through, the subjects of friends and loneliness should have come up at least a few times. So Cloud should at least have an academic understanding of the terms even if he has no personal experience.

1053925 A valid point. Shoot, not sure how to fix that

Chapter 8, almost 10.000 words... and it's only the BEGINNING of the adventure... Awesome! :rainbowkiss:

It appears this thing hasn't updated in weeks. Pity, because I enjoyed it. Moar plz?

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