Every student of the School of Friendship had to complete a capstone project before graduating. While the other students wrote songs, baked cakes, and other ordinary things, Ocellus and her friends decided to make their last project together count--they built a ship, and planned to sail it north all the way up the coast to Manehattan. But none of them were terribly good sailors, and they never could've imagined what found them on the water...
Now they've been washed ashore in a strange land, surrounded by creatures they never imagined in their wildest dreams. To survive long enough to make their way home, they might just have to make some new friends.
Writen as a Patreon reward for Vilken666. Editing by the usual starpub crew, Two Bit and Sparktail. Cover by Zutcha.
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Woohoo! A young 6 adventure story! Can’t wait to see how the story goes!
When Smolder came out talking like a pirate, I immediately pictured he was Hector Barbosa.
Hmm, very good hook in the story description.
...Proceeeeed.
Darn it, I want to see the story where Spike gets Smolder into comics. I may need to write that story.
In any case, eagerly looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
You have my full and undivided attention. Let's see where this goes!
If this is anything like the classic anime "The Story of Fifteen Boys," or the film "Castaway," then I'm gamed.
II was curious,now you have my full, undivided attention
Just sit right back and you'll hear a tale,
A tale of a fateful trip,
That started from this tropic port,
Aboard this tiny ship.
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Finally, somebody else who watched that show!
Maybe that idea I had for a Gilligan's Island crossover isn't a total bust after all...
This looks very interesting. You've earned yourself a tracker. :)
Meh, I'll bite. *follows*
39 days, 6 creatures, 1 survivor
Actually, let's hope they all survive..
Silberstring could lend her gem transformation, so everybody could be a sea pony, ocellus could transform, and then just sail to manehattan, but because they must strugle in the story, they will end up lost and get to the land the description is talking about.
It begins.
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The mate was a mighty sailing man,
The Skipper brave and sure.
Five passengers set sail that day,
For a three hour tour,
A three hour tour...
My immediate thought on seeing the cover art and description:
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Animal control? Oh f
. Not the greatest first impression.
Sounds like Atlantic City.
Hmm. Possible case of disbelief-induced deafness. The animals can't possibly be talking, ergo they aren't. Diplomacy will be tricky at best and interrupted by tranquilizer darts at worst. Still, when four out of the six castaways flat-out don't exist in this universe and almost all of them are colors not normally found in nature, that subconscious denial isn't going to hold up very well.
Or, alternatively, consensus reality is going to bite the minority opinion, and it will bite hard. I suppose we'll see what happens.
Animal control sounds about right for a human reaction.
Animal Control? Not the best start for our heroes...now I'm hoping that the next chapter just cuts to them in cages and Ocellus is like: 'How did this happen?' and we see a flashback to how it got that far.
Holy jeez... no way, did that storm actually bring the young 6 to the human world version of Manhattan? Sweet Celestia, when I thought things couldn’t get any worse...
This bit feels disconnected, like something got deleted during editing and the edges don't quite join up any more.
I could just be missing something obvious, but I honestly can't figure out what "if it had" could possibly refer to, there's no indication what "the strangest thing" is, and Sandbar talking about something being "a little small" when the standout part of the previous description is the massive buildings and nothing else is specifically pointed out seems a little bit off. From later context, I'm guessing he's actually talking about the size of the steps in the stairs at that point, but it feels like the missing bit would probably have made that clearer.
Dangit Yona. Seems like things are bound to get worse before they're gonna get better at this rate.
Huh. Interesting way of looking at things.
But seriously, this story is looking great! I've never seen a Pony-Meets-Earth story involving the Young Six before; in fact, I think you might be the first one to do this kind of thing! Keep going!
Animal Control, at least that's probably better than the local SWAT team.
It wasn't until this chapter that I noticed the Human tag.
Are they in a modern version of Lilliput? PLEASE let that be correct. I love to see the young 6 as giants compared to the people of this city. =)
Figures Yona would have no qualms about running up and asking the strange human creatures for help without a second thought.
Wherever they are, it sounds like they had boarded up for a hurricane, or at least a heavy storm of some similar caliber.
Welp, its definitely not Russia
Okay, I'm missing something. Are the student six big compared to the humans?
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Once the humans determine these creatures are sentient juveniles, it might not be too bad.
Just thought I'd put this here:
Just sit right back
And you'll hear a tale
A tale of a fateful trip,
That started from this makeshift port,
Aboard this tiny ship.
None of them were a mighty sailin' lad,
they all were brave and sure,
Six passengers set sail that day,
For a three hour tour,
A three hour tour.
The weather started getting rough,
The tiny ship was tossed.
If not for the courage of the fearless crew
Solidarity would be lost.
Solidarity would be lost.
The ship set ground on the shore
Of this uncharted desert isle
With Silver Stream,
and Gallus too.
Ocellus
And Yona,
Sandbar,
and Smolder and they are all,
Here on Silver Stream's Isle.
Little creatures? Humans? Just how big are ponies in this one?
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When Smolder had her reveal in the pirate get up, it never occurred to me it was liftef from some other source. I assumed that `pirate was just the default role any dragon takes when on the sea, with the lust for gold and all.
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Looking at this comment made me realize that I had completely forgotten about Silverstream! She's barely used, with only three mentions of her name, and only one sentence of dialogue. And that one sentence is generic enough to have come from any of the characters. Obviously one Creature from the group is going to get the short end of the stick, but it feels especially odd here because she is so chatty, and her aquatic nature would probably give her a distinct role in this scenario.
That's made even more frustrating by the fact that clearly this author has a serious knack for writing ships. I didn't even know that "jib sail" was a thing! Besides just describing the functions of the ship, there was an excellent grasp on the weather. For fantasy and adventure stories, people don't seem to realize how important that is. It can be for thematic portents and painting the scene, obviously. But often the weather is going to be either a primary obstacle, or completely sets the literal course that characters will take in the story.
It wasn't just for when they were on the ocean either. The description of storms ripping across the sunsheltered Badlands was really apt. So Starscribe seems to have a talent for it, and that will be key when the story begins revolving around them just trying to survive on a foreign landmass.
"A three hour tour. A three hour tour..."
I just needed to comment this before I forgot what the picture made me think of.
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Oh surely not too bad, no. They might be subjected to lab testing of some kind, but nothing too bad.
Okay possibilities. One, they've beached on the shores of Coney Island. Two, they're on the shores of Lilliput. Three, they've landed on a Lilliputian version of Coney Island. Four, the humans only seem small in perspective of distance, since they haven't gotten close. After all, the seagulls seem normal sized. If Ocellus were in Lilliput, then they'd be tiny. Five, if any of the Lilliputian elements factor in, then Sandbar could pass himself off as a Houyhnhnm. Six, like so many college students on spring break, somepony brought along a baggie of poison joke and they've been smoking it. Seven, none o' this here speculatin' is correct and we'll jus' have ta wait until the writer reveals where they are going with this here tale... or is that tail? Whatever.
Oh jeez, people are already shooting at them? That's crazy. I don't know why you'd shoot at a Dragon, even if it was small. No sense provoking something like that. Anyway, super excited for more. Keep up the good work!
Hopefully, Smolder has a thick hide.
Well, this should expand some minds. Though unless people manage to recognize Smolder's smoke writing, they're not going to assume they're dealing with sapients. Mind you, I get the feeling that Ocellus's fear is going to be more hindrance than help soon.
A dragon? #fakenews
I wonder if Smolder is going to get pissed and just slap their guns out of their hands and complain about the mosquitoes.
My Little Human, hahaha.
At least there's no language barrier.
Great, gunfire. Hopefully Smolder won't have caught any.
Not gonna lie, language barriers tend to be my favorite part of first encounter stories. But we don't really know what has happened yet so i'll try not to linger on that.
Also i kinda have a hard time believing that when people see a dragon their first instinct would be to shoot it. Then again she probably acted hostile to serve as a distraction. Just seems funny to me: "omg a real dragon! LETS SHOOT IT!"
Yeesh. Here's hoping dragons are bulletproof.
Hopefully dragons are just as bulletproof as they are fireproof. But I suspect even if she isn't, a bullet probably still isn't going to do terribly much damage. Guess we'll see next chapter.
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Even if bullets can't pierce a dragon's scales, they should have enough kinetic energy to deliver quite a sting, so a hit would likely incapacitate due to pain.
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Yeah, but hopefully still nothing of lasting damage and nothing Smolder couldn't just shake off and walk away with.