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Xenont

JuSt a DEmOn RoAmInG thE WeB :)

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This story is a sequel to Recovering

Gilda tries to take it out on Rainbow again. But with six friends on her side, Gilda would need to bring in company to make it a fair fight. Right?

Thanks to Waspinator331 who suggested I write this!😀
Chapters (2)
Complete Published: Oct 15th, 2018 Download
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Acoustic Pulse
Acoustic Pulse #1 · Oct 15th, 2018 · · · Is this even a fair fight? - The last chapter ·
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My only complaint is that the structure is very poor. You need a new paragraph each time someone speaks.

Also, the way the dialog was written was hella wack. It has to be like this:

"Crash, you can bring your whole squad. I'll box them all," Gilda threatened confidently.

Otherwise, it just looks weird.
Go back through it for typos, I saw a few. I know writing stories on a mobile device is weird, but if I can do it properly, so can you.

The story itself is good, I can see this being an episode. I'll still give it an A for effort.

Waspinator331
Waspinator331 #5 · Oct 15th, 2018 · · · Is this even a fair fight? - The last chapter ·
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Shouldn’t I get at least a little bit of credit considering that I’m the one who gave you this idea?

Waspinator331
Waspinator331 #6 · Oct 15th, 2018 · · · Is this even a fair fight? - The last chapter ·
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"Don't you worry Rainbow, we'll make sure that Gilda doesn't touch ya." Applejack said as she slung her hand around Rainbow. "Noe come on! Let's go face this 'Gilda'."

It should be 'now' not 'noe'

Xenont
Xenont #7 · Oct 15th, 2018 · · · Is this even a fair fight? - The last chapter ·
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9232097
Oh yeah. I actually did but I forgot to save after editing, sorry!!!:twilightsheepish:. Thanks for pointing it out though.

Here you go, done.

Vaguely Demented
Vaguely Demented #8 · Oct 15th, 2018 · · · Is this even a fair fight? - The last chapter ·
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There is something wrong with me in that as soon as I saw “this time would be different”, the first response that came to mind was “It’s not different at all is it Steve?”

Windlife
Windlife #10 · Oct 15th, 2018 · · · Is this even a fair fight? - The last chapter ·
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very love story i need read last one so im confustion but you are very good and i gave it 1 like!

Sunset Awesomness17
Sunset Awesomness17 #17 · Mar 10th, 2019 · · · Standing together - Not the only chapter ·
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Can I make a different ending to this?! Also HOW DO YOU WRITE STORIES?! I have been wanting to start typing up my own stories (I HAVE REALLY COOL IDEAS FOR SUNSET) but I just don't know how to even start. Mind telling me how?

ScisetShimmerEvan
ScisetShimmerEvan #18 · Oct 19th, 2021 · · · Standing together - Not the only chapter ·
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Well, things were back to normal again, at least just for the six of them. Rainbow, however, was still struggling with Gilda everyday after school since the recovery of her left arm.

Oh boy. 😬

"Augh! Put me down now!!!" She screamed as Twilight twirled her around, sending Gilda flying across the air. "Twilight! I can't believe you are listening to her!" Gilda shouted. "I thought you were nice and gentle!?"

She isn't, she has many hidden secrets that are great to know. :ajsmug:

ScisetShimmerEvan
ScisetShimmerEvan #19 · Oct 19th, 2021 · · · Is this even a fair fight? - The last chapter ·
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Fluttershy yelped as she scrambled to hide behind Twilight. "No. No. No" She whispered. "I don't want to do this either...."

Jostling had to say that didn't you rainbow. :facehoof:

"Hey!" The girls heard someone shout. "Did you guys really think I wad scared?" The group turned around and saw Gilda, along with two thugs that look all ready to beat them up. "Meet my boys, they work for me." Gilda said. "I warned you about their powers, did I?" Gilda said to them. "Ba careful."

Should of guessed she'd bring back up this time.

The boys, knowing that the birds would not leave them alone, fled form the alley, leaving only Gilad to face the group of seven. "Cowards!" Gilda shouted, her voice loud with a tinge of terror. How am I gonna face them on my own? She turned back around to face Rarity and Sunset. But instead, she saw a group of girls, their arms crossed as they stared her down.

Your busted now Gilda. 😠

Sunset was brought back to reality as she gasped, backing away from Gilda. "I know you think that bullying others would help out your situation, but it won't!" She said. "You think picking on others would give you a scary image and others would not pick on you anymore. It does help, but it's not the right way. You are just distancing yourself from others, paying for people to talk to you, paying them to stand by your side."

Yep, it's just sad.

Waspinator331
Waspinator331 #21 · Jul 6th, 2023 · · · Is this even a fair fight? - The last chapter ·
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"And you're rambling again." Sunset said, removing her hand. "Look Dash, everything will br just fine, okay? Trust me." Sunset lightly punched Rainbow on the shoulder. "We won't let her hurt you, would we girls?" She said as the others joined them.

It’s “be” not “br”

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