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Rayna Q.


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Under unfortunate circumstances Applejack has been transferred to a high class High School only to meet Rainbow Dash, a student whom AJ slowly starts to have feelings over. The catch being she already has a girlfriend, hard family issues and a serious past with Gilda. Twists and turns of confessions and secrets filled with drinking games and injuries might convince this jock of who she truly loves. Will AJ have it in her to survive this twisted love triangle, this jock who has more to her then her cover shows, or the past relationship that threatens her very life? It's a mix of Appledash, Pinkiedash and Raritwi full of fun and mischief you can't resist. (Description by: CosmosoGurl)

Chapters (8)
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Comments ( 78 )

So, I found the story a little confusing in places, you probably could have used a beta.

That being said, don't feel too bad if you get a few thumbs down. The story isn't that bad, and some people will thumbs down shipping stories or humanized stories just because.

If you have any questions about the site, feel free to PM me. :ajsmug: I noticed you're new, and it can be confusing.

Hmm, I haven't read it, but it caught my eye.:duck:
I will stick around for all the chapters to see how it turns out, and give you my response on the story. Don't mind some criticism, if I give any, I just like to see people get better.:ajsmug:

From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha

Dat ending....

I AM GOING TO READ EVERY SINGLE WORD OF EVERY UPCOMING CHAPTER!!!!

I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::heart::rainbowlaugh: Is too common and so is :applejackunsure::heart::rainbowlaugh: But BOTH IN 1 FIC!

My mind is officially blown, my friend.

No kidding!

Holy sweet Celestia! Dat ending :derpyderp1:

MOAR. Now, that ok?

What the fuck did i just....i dont even.....what...i...
I feel dirty :twilightoops:

YOU!!! :twilightangry2: I read this a long time ago on fanfiction and gave long reviews. You went into oblivion after the third chapter without even a single note as to why!

Finish this!!!! :flutterrage: I'm not giving you a thumbs up or any thing until you do!!

1027689 :applecry: oh the shame!!!! Well I have the fourth up....actually in a few min I will be posting the fourth to this place too!!! And I post half chapters once they are done to my DA (post there faster) so you can read them really fast there!!! (AppleDash-Crazy at Deviantart.com)

This was a great chapter. You're pushing T rating, but i think its still fine. :twilightsmile: anyway, keep the story comin!

With the adult humor, knighty would probably say it's past teen rating.

This story. tis grand yo. :pinkiehappy:

Dude, you gotta put updates as fast as you can. I read all of it, and waiting for a new chapter is unbearable.

...Why do those hot toned tomboys always wear Converse?

Mrrraaauww...

1047659 because conerse are cool....and they are cool....and I am not original :twilightsheepish:

1036090 Hey, sometimes a little tough love is needed. :ajsmug:

Wow, reading "New Friends" looks like I will have to break my claim to not comment. This chapter really is a league beyond the others.

Things I loved (there is a ton):

- The pace is absolutely amazing here and probably the strongest thing about "New Friends". There's a build up to the climax of this chapter, and a great paid off (which is not too much or too little considering where things are for the two in the story).

- It was cool getting to see Rainbow's home and learning a bit more about where she came from. She is more influential than I thought. It will be interesting to see how or if this plays on A.J's more humble beginnings.

- The conflict is really present. It was great how the reader got a glimpse in Rainbow's struggling with how she sees A.J. The love triangle dilemma is really played well here. Also I lol'd at A.J fighting with her growing feelings for R.D.

- I loooveed how A.J final gets a couple over Rainbow and the latter's reaction to it.

- Twi and Rarity's little feud over the drawing was hilarious.

- Finally the little things, like the others coming in to wake A.J and Rarity combing her hair. Pinkie teaching the butler how to make balloon animals.

Other than that this could have fit into two chapters there is nothing that needs tweaking.

Other comments:

- Seems that A.J might avoid R.D for a while after that night. She might want to hide that hickey from the others, lol.

- Heh, A.J having high up friends has it's advantages

- Wow Futtershy, she's feeding A.J, complimenting her, begging for her to be on her team and spilling her childhood friend's secrets to her. Not to forget that Rainbow try to hook the two up as a joke. One wonders if Fluttershy doesn't feel a thing for A.J, lol.

Have more chapters like this and "New Girl" might be the best Appledash story I've ever read (and believe me I've read tons). Keep it up and please don't take too long for the next one. Please feed your readers. :fluttershysad:

Glad to see this story posted here as well, I really love it. Looking forward to the next update <3

Is there going to be anymore?

Can't wait for more!!!! :rainbowwild::heart::ajsmug:

I think the rating's fine. Maybe pushing it a little bit, but since T stands for teen...I doubt it's anything we haven't heard before...:applejackunsure:

I know on DA you said you weren't dead...but that was over a month ago...still alive right?:applejackconfused::rainbowhuh:

Comment posted by Drifting Heart deleted Jan 26th, 2013

Hey. Number 1: I love this fanfic much much more than I should. You make me want to give up writing because you express the characters thoughts and feelings in a way I could only ever dream of doing. In a good way. Huge fan right here!
Number 2: I get that you're busy and everything but you're taking to a guy who has a long term health condition, can't even go to school 5 days a week and is in the build up to the final exams yet still manages to find the time to write 5k+ words in a week. Ok so it's probably just 5k words of utter sh*t but still, my message still stands as: Hurry up I'm addicted to your fanfic!

I read this entire fanfiction in a day, this is probably better than any other fanfiction i have ever read, please! I NEED MOAR!!! :flutterrage:

c'mon make twilight and pinkie get together. they got better chemistry then pinkiedash does.

This one is SOOOOOOO AWESOME. more please.

Ok so this was a little more 'detailed' than I expected BUT… it's awesome. I get you may have other things or story's to write but based of the other comments (witch I read for the fun of it)(don't judge me) you should work ALOT MORE OFFTEN on this one. It's (like I said before) 20% more awesome than I expected.

Come you left us with a cliffhanger.:raritydespair: please please please Put in another chapter:applecry: this book is awesome.


I mean I COMPLETELY understand you right it and right it. Then you just move on. I do that all the time. I've never finished a book in my life. Like if I can really work with a idea I will create a awesome book out of it maybe stretch or merge 2 ideas together but then I get a different idea work on that or just move on.

BUT YOU CAN'T GIVE UP OR MOVE ON WITH THIS IDEA IT IS FREAKING AWESOME!!!!!! :yay:

Comment posted by Drifting Heart deleted Jun 4th, 2013

Please I need more! The plot is amazing! :raritystarry: PLEASE CONTINUE!!:heart:

This is an amazing fanfic. It is so hard to find good appledash fics these days. I hope you choose to update soon. :)

2719212Sorry about the wait, finallllly updated!!!

Wait.....WHAT? AN UPDATE!
OH YES YES YES :pinkiehappy:
And such a good update! I embrace the wall of text as one of my own kind!

Yay! A update! Took you long enough!!!:flutterrage: Well anyway more please i can't wait for more!!!:facehoof::applecry:

This was great. Lots of spelling errors, but great nonetheless.

Yaaaaay! I had faith in you ;)

Wait, this actually updated? HOLY @- :applejackconfused:

I was going to read this, then i saw two certain tags....

Only joking, im bored with nothing to read.

Oh.my.Celestia. This is great!

This story is very funny and witty, and I love the way Dashie acts all "yeah, I don't give a flying feather". She sounds pretty sexy too....
Anyway, I was gonna say, even if you don't have a beta or spellcheck or grammar whatsitsface, you could at least try to use punctuation and correct grammar, etc? It's rather off putting, but it's not that hard, and it puts a major setback on your story.
I am, however, very curious as to what happens next. Especially since your "beta" works now. Overall, the plot is gripping.

Sooo you missed out chapter 7 and 8. Or did you just want to make it read 69

3117066 yep! over at my deviantart I post in half chapters so that people can read it faster, so right now over there I will be posting chapter 11 in a week and over here I will be posting chapter 7 in two or so weeks.

3117208 lol! well not exactly, I post half chapters on my deviantart account so that they can read it faster. So over here I will be posting chapter 6 in two weeks and over there I will be posting chapter 11...Chapter 11 is technically just the first half of chapter 6

MY ABSOLUTE FAVORITE FIC I HAVE EVER READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!!!!:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

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