Spike, Cheerilee, and Braeburn turn evil and try to destroy Ponyville, all having nothing to do with the others and all having the exact same plan, after deciding to team up, and being defeated at the same time, They end up forming Team Rocket and falling under the command of Queen Chrysalis. they proceed to fail every step of the way on their rise to power.
Alternate Universe Tag, Wingless Spike
Crossover tag, Should I add one?
>Cheerilee, Braeburn, and Spike turn evil
>Spike is tired of being mistreated
>Braeburn wanted to invent stuff, blew up half of Appaloosa, isn't welcome in Ponyville by his own family
>Cheerilee is salty cause she can't get into the School of Friendship
>Teams up to destroy Ponyville
>Names themselves Team Rocket
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My side they hurt with laughter
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oh, thank you, nice to know someone finds this funny.
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Have you seen the sun and moon team rocket with beware? Implement the bear in some form
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I plan to after a few chapters.
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Awesome =w=
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funny, I got some messages of team rocket being added to some favorites, but I have the same likes and more disikes
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That is funny
So...periods. Let's talk about periods. Also, maybe the use of apostrophes.
This story has the wrong like to dislike ratio
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try looking through the comments, it's either you, someone telling me the story makes so sense, or someone telling me
off for Period/comma use, your the only one who's comment was a compliment.
Remember Twi: You teached Spike. Mabe you rubbed off on him.
Well, it was nice knowing you three...
Yup.
Maybe, but an stupid idea that works isn't stupid.
She will either create the best device ever or ruin everything, right?
It's worth a try.
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Wait did you like or dislike the story?
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The story-idea itself is good.
That's why I'm following it.
But I will be honest with you: (Skip remaining comment, if you don't like critique)
Your writing style is not very good.
Far too often you seem to have trouble wich uppercase-lowercase, punctuation and usage of quotation marks.
Also, your writing is rather plain. For instance, basically always telling instead of showing things. If you don't understand what I mean have a look here.
In general I always recommend to read the whole Writing Guide, because it is very good. In your case I suggest especially the chapters "Punctuation" and "Style".
I suspect this are the reasons for the current rating of the story.
This... is a comedy masterpiece why are so many dislikes
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I have been told that it makes no sense.
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entrily because you seemed to enjoy the story I updated it.
Thank you it’s amazing
I guess that summarises the story.
Heh.
Don't worry about that. No one could hate Fluttershy.
Good story!
I enjoyed reading it.
Also, tooth brushes are important!
Hopefully they never get the idea to work with Beyblades...
Fair question.
Or, you could simply break open the door?
No? Okay then...
That si actually realistic, considering their track record...
Yeah! She is acting like she is the princess or something!
Good chapter!
I enjoyed reading it.
Damn. Twilights a jerk.
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That's it! That's the story!
I was about to warn him to never say something like that, but it seems I were too late...
Well, this could have gone worse...
In fact, all things considered that went pretty well.
Aren't they still in Canterlot? I don't think Rarity would be that fast...
Edit: nevermind, it's (kinda) explained later.
Does that make things better or worse for them?
Both of them have a point...
Yay update!
On suggestion though: try to reword the first paragraph. I mean this block of text is a single sentence. Try to split it up into smaller parts.