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I am here to prove that even someone that has dyslexia can write stories. All feedback is appreciate​, and always have a smile.

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Starlight always had strong feelings for Sunburst but could never tell him in person. She writes down those feelings in a letter never to be read. So what happens when Trixies sends Sunburst one of those letters? Starlight does everything in her power to get it back. Before he reads it that is what.

Edited 10/10/19

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This is a funny idea :derpytongue2: I liked the bit at the end where Twilight received the love letter haha.

As for feedback, the actual execution of the story could use some work. Two things you should work on are making dialogue read smoothly and sticking to one tense when narrating.

Cheers :trollestia:

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I thought I did a good job, and thanks for the feed back

Okay, that ending was actually really good.

At least it wasn't a lust note.

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I agree. This had a great idea but the execution could use some work. Try getting an editor to review before publishing. Otherwise, looking forward to your next story.

Dreadnought

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Two Years and I barely got an editor to look at another story.

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I've edited stories from time to time. Thanks to the military, my time of late is relatively short, but I could look over a one-shot if you're interested.

Dreadnought

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:rainbowhuh: what is invisi?

Comment posted by PearlCrescendo deleted Oct 16th, 2018

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I believe he was referring to Trixie.

Oh that ending makes me smile

where's romance tag?
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