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"... okay, I have another plan!"

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Its Halloween, and everyone is excited for the big nightmare night to come! All except for Trixie. With a Halloween party in need of preparing, and knowing full of the location of the party is being hosted, a tramautic memory from Trixie's childhood returns to haunt her. But with hopes to get her back in the Halloween spirit, the Dazzlings regale in a tale; The Legend Of Sleepy Hollow.


Please Note: Reading the previous stories or other entries are not required to understand this story.

Special Thanks goes to Scholary-Cimmerian and Bricklayer for all of their help when I needed it. Thank you guys. :pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 75 )

Nice start to the story. I got a chuckle out of the prank Aria and Sonata did to Adagio XD

And oh boy, Trixie seems to have some issues with the haunted house. I can only wonder what that's about...

Oooh, a Halloween story! :pinkiehappy:

I wonder what happened at that house that spooked Trixie? :rainbowhuh:

Sonata tapped her chin. "Maybe she saw a monster in there? Or maybe a ghost!"

"Sonata, ghosts aren't real," Vinyl said with total disbelief.

Sonata looked at Vinyl with a deadpan face. "Oh so ghosts aren't real, but yet you're talking to an immortal seapony in a teenage girl's body?"

"... fair point."

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Adagio's story is getting interesting. I'm looking forward for more! :twilightsmile:

Again, looking good here. I can't wait to see how this flashback stuff will play out... XD

Okay, I admit this story is interesting, but really I think with a few edits you probably could have done just one 3,000 word chapter.

a wonderful start!♥♥♥♥

I'm surprised of the lack of likes for this story

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I think part of it's cause it was posted during a week when everyone would be at school/work... or they're getting sick and tired of these stories. Could be either. :applejackunsure:

I do hope you'll enjoy the story though :scootangel:

Business is about to pick up

Okay, interesting. I really do love this little breather chapter, lots of cute interactions. And the switching between the past events and present events in every chapter? Sorta reminds me of the dueling 1986/2008 plotlines in Kiva which both eventually lead up to the same story.

Great update and the interactions between Adagio and Trixie are adorable! :twilightsmile:

Hmmm...Red Threadmaster. Is she a friend... or foe? :rainbowhuh:

Both of the girls immediately jumped up with devilish snares.

That should be *snarls* I think.

Good work, I like the way the chapters split between the present-day stuff and the Dazzlings' past story.

I don't trust this, Ms. Threadmaster....

Bit short for my liking, but maybe that's just me being a snob about chapter length. Still a pretty cute piece though.

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I'd make a Harry Potter joke, but... nah, too easy.

Nice work as always. You're doing especially good work with the present-day material with Trixie and the Dazzlings. I got a kick out of Aria's grumpy snarking about Adagio in this chapter XD

Short, but sweet chapter! :twilightsmile:

And so, Trixie dreamed on for the rest of the night of just being closer with Adagio, and delicious Halloween candy.

Kinky

Thanks for the mention. ^_^ It was no problem, I was happy to offer my input.

But, in all seriousness, poor poor Trixie... :pinkiesad2: No kid should ever have that happen to them.

Poor Trixie! :fluttercry:

While what Fuchsia Blush and Lavender Lace had done was bad, but I had a feeling that they didn't mean to hurt her that badly (unless if I'm wrong). Either way, they're about to face Trixie's angry Siren girlfriend! :twilightoops:

Welp now we know the truth.... Poor Trixie, even Lavender & Fuchsia did regret there, a knife to the back stiil hurts like hell...

Oh, Trixie... God above, I know those girls didn't mean any harm by it, but that was still cruel. They should have obviously seen Trixie didn't want to be there.

Hmm, very interesting... Very interesting indeed.

Nice work with this chapter. I really liked the content with Lavender and Fuchsia, I think you did a good job portraying their guilt and sincerity about regretting that prank.

Also, I think you did a pretty good job with the flashback scene here. I laughed pretty good at the ending joke :rainbowlaugh:

So Lavender and Fuchsia really felt guilty of what they've done to Trixie. Hopefully they'll get to meet with Trixie and talk things out. :fluttershysad:

I hope Trixie hears out Lavender & Fuchsia, they need this closure as much as Trixie does.

At least Burley Bones is polite to them.

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How cut off was that town if they didn't know about the war?

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Moose?

Is Burley Bones Gaston?

If the war just happened, is it too soon for a ghost?

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Burly Bones was intended to be a play on name for Brom Bones, a character from the original Legend Of Sleepy Hollow. As for the Moose line, that was intended to just be an insult. For the time frame, it was supposed to be a long time after the American Revolution. The American Revolution ended in 1783, and the original Sleepy Hollow story takes place during 1819.

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Ah

And in all that time, they never heard about the war?

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Well the story was set in a very quiet town. Maybe news like a war that happened a long time ago doesn't travel far. Or maybe they're just simple folk who know it and want to keep on moving on with their life. :applejackunsure:

Thanks so much for the credit, friend! :twilightsmile:

Everyone else said they would come over to hang out as wlel,

You mean "well"?

Octavia shrugged, looking a little guilty. Aria frowned. out of annoyance.

Replace the period with a comma.

Overall great job with the chapter, both you and Scholarly-Cimmerian! Can't wait for the next chapter! :twilightsmile:

D'awww... That little scene at the end. What I would suggest now, if you want more drama, is for Trixie and Adagio fail to get to Trixie's former friends in time, and fail to warn them.

Wait, I'm confused. Adagio say yes to getting revenging for Trixie or setup Aria for her prank to fail?

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Technically both. She's basically trying to give a false illusion that she's saying yes... but truthfully, she's actually planning on finding Lavender and Fuchsia first and intercepting the prank; basically... setting up the prank for failure, if that makes sense. That makes sense, right? :twilightblush:

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Ohhhhhhhh, gotcha now. Thx buddy

basically they are pranking the prank to stop the prank!

A nice chapter, all around. It was fun to see Lavender and Fuchsia's costumes (I got a laugh out of her exchange with Sandalwood XD) as yet another proof of the fun way that the Shattered world differs from our own XD

And also, the ending was good. Operation Payback is a go, but will it play out as envisioned? Hmm...

Huh, interesting. Loved this little chapter with Lavender and Fushica, makes a nice step away from the main drama of the overall plot.

A very nice and interesting chapter with Lavender and Fuchsia! And I love the costumes they're wearing!

R.I.P. Stan Lee. :ajsleepy:

Where to read a chapter without a flashback in it & r.i.p. Stan Lee

Stan Lee was my hero. He created Spider-Man. And Thanos disinagrate him.

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I'm ashamed to admit I'm not sure I recognized the costumes...

Okay, loving this. Always love a good flashback chapter, and it looks two myths are about to come crashing into one another...

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