It's the second chapter and you're already making a fool out of BlueBlood just couldn't help yourself

I want to visit ponyville with out being seen so this should be useful as I laid down of the bed and concentrated ion my shadow I separated from my body and became a shadowy version of my self as I leaped through the window and made my way to town

On

And this story is amazing! i myself am a really lazy and a shitty writer.

I made my way p to her tower where I saw here in her room teaching twilight lesson's on magic but I saw celestia tense up when I entered the room but she looked around and saw nothing. Celestia was wearing a white dress as she was pointing to a board behind her while her rainbow mane blow in the nonexistent wind and floated in the air.

"Up" and "her" not "here"
Sorry for commenting so much

Gracias por las imágenes de referencia son muy útiles

should I or should I not put on the ring

He has literally no reason to put on the ring. I’m sure some villain who can doom souls to eternal torment or something (ie, most of the villains) would doubtless put him in a position where wearing the ring to save souls from damnation would be reasonable, but otherwise he has no reason to. At all.

On another note, you have a love-hate relationship with punctuation and spelling.

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You're right he has no reason to put the ring on especially now that he will be considered a threat. They consider dark magic to be evil and forbidden.

This story is moving a mile a minute

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I would put it on for the meme. Also so I can just prank death with out him killing me.

Love this story so far, can't wait to read the rest.
P.S. I've noticed that this chapter has little, to almost no punctuation. It's a bit hard to follow along, especially if you have it read out for you.
Keep up the good work.

The near lack of punctuation in this chapter makes it incredibly annoying to read. And this is supposedly the edited version? Hope it gets better in the coming chapters.

Edit: Checked the later chapters and it pretty much looks the same..... I can't bring myself to read through this at this point, shame really......