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TheAnimerican


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The map has called for Twilight Sparkle to solve another friendship problem. Fortunately, it is in Ponyville. Unfortunately, however, the problem is between Applejack and Rarity. Twilight thought, as the Princess of Friendship, she has heard everything and can handle anything to solve a friendship problem... She was wrong...

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Credit for cover goes to Critchleyb.

I rated this "T" for teen as there are sexual references.

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Comments ( 7 )

Hmm, not sure what to think of this one. I guess if nothing else, it's good that you're aware of some things to work on for your future writing. The story wasn't bad, per se, but between the book, the conflict, and the ending bit, it felt a little forced.

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Yeah, book is a red herring. Dead one at that, I wish that people would stop advertising that thing...

Honestly the beginning with the Fifty Shades of Grey bit was kinda pointless to the main point of the story. I honestly thought that will go somewhere.

Applejack. You're being ridiculous! If you want to give your virginity to your future husband, that's okay. Actuality, it's more then okay, it's rather heartwarming.

But this was a silly little freak accident, it doesn't count. You're making mountains out of molehills.

I... don’t get the ending.

very forced, those last three lines seemed to be the idea that spawned the "story"
... and I'm afraid 3x 100% OOC doesn't make this anywhere close to 100% good.

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