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Jack Crusher is a just another duelist entering an academy with some of the best around. Little does a lot of others at the academy know about his 4 time world championship career, and what an inspiration he is to others. Little does he know that his past is coming back for him, and everyone he's surrounded by. Sooner or later, many ugly truths about Jack will come out to face Jack that he has to deal with, and for the sake of the Academy, he has to do what he can to fight them off. (BTW, many other ponies will appear in this story that aren't mentioned, there aren't link rules nor monsters in this story, and i tired to be funny so the cover art is the best I could find)."

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“Don’t look at me like that. You act like I don’t study.” Pinkie Pie replies, looking back at the arena.

Pinkie Pie? I thought they were looking at Twilight.

Overall a little hard to read with very fast pacing.

oookkkayyy I got to ask what the hell happen in this. It feel like it just dropped in the middle of the story with no background and with how the enemies just lost so easily there felt like there was no tension at all. I mean man Spikes whole team had some Tier 3 or 4 decks. Even Jack's deck and and his team felt meh, but I guess that does follow the show where it is all main character powers lol. It just honestly felt super weird to be frank. Not to badly written even tho I think the duel could have been spaced out more to make it easier to follow and the LP could have been written in a way to make them easier to follow.

9170242
Forgive me. My writing is a little edgy right now. I'm just getting back into it. Thanks for the like though.

9170941
I'm sorry if it was confusing. I'm still working on my writing. I'll take your feedback into consideration. Since you brought up the life points, how do you think i should set it up? I'm just asking for an opinion since I looked back on the story and completely understand what you mean. Any suggestions? I'm always open to ideas.

9171260
Well I think something as simple as

Opponent A: 4000
Opponent B: 4000

Would work so it would be much clearer to see how many LP the duelist have.

9171272
That'll work perfectly. Thank you for your opinion. I'll make sure to change that.

mentioned, there aren't link rules nor monsters in this story,

How can you duel without monster cards?

Any tournament illegal card is now legal, and you can have 3 copies of any card in your deck. Have fun everyone."

Well time to wait for the pony who runs 3 of each peice of exodia and plenty of draw cards(pot of greed/graceful charity etc)

9209152
No Link Rules or Link monsters. Sorry, I should've been more clear about that.

9209664
The Exodia deck with 3 pieces of each would be interesting, but what if you run out of cards for drawing and you have pieces of Exodia, but not the right ones? For example, I use pot of greed twice, graceful charity 3 times, and a pot of Avarice, but I have 2 left legs, 2 right arms, and the head. who knows what could be next for my opponent. Just a bad possibility of an OTK. It's a great idea though.

Welp, there goes the exodia deck, but then again those deck are easy to beat even in normal format
Also after seeing a synchro deck i remember something, a friend of mine has a stardust dragon deck that 9/10 wins if you go second, basically by playing it on your first turn and using its effects and 3 attacks to win, shame i can't remember the deck list

9270021
if you ever remember, please tell me. You both will get credit for putting that deck in the story. But if i was able to place it in the story, who would have it?

9274335
Dont worry, I'll ask next time i see him
Might also get his seal of oricalcos as well, that was always a good fight, and you say no link, can pendulum decks be in? If yes i might try to get my old deck in, i played early into pendulum but decided to switch to Pokemon cards instead

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Not a big fan of Pendulum decks, but sure. Give me the recipe and how you duel with it. this is gonna have to be a deck of a villain. Not the main ones, the main 6, or Jack Crusher. I already have those decks figured out and placed together. i'll be more than happy to place one of my readers decks into the story.

9274723
Send it to my email if that is more comfortable for you
williamsdim6@gmail.com

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