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Speedy Silverstreak

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HYPED!!!! This story is gonna be a good one I can tell. That sfm was good too btw! I can’t wait to read more!

I applaud your work. Very nice as far as I can tell. It's good how your working with the material given in the video can't wait to read more. Glad I could be some form of inspiration.

There are a few differences with the universe yours takes place in and mine, however, this is your take and I like it so keep it up. It kinda also gave me a couple ideas to try out. Hope to see more.

I tried to be as accurate as possible with what I had. Glad you enjpyed it

Really well done. I don't usually go for darker toned fics, but you have my attention on this fic. Keep it up.

Sorry for the late reply. I was very busy these last few months. Anyway, great continuation, however there are a few hiccups in this chapter. For one, it seems bit too rushed now. Developing a short plan and later into a plane fight. Don't feel pressured to try and complete the story, go in a pace that's comfortable for you and when you feel a lot more focused and at ease. There are also a few gaps that need some form of answering, like how did Cadence know that Silver and his crew were coming and what flight they'd use. Also, the flight they were on, you may need to say if they were on a private plane or a public plane, the cabin going into chaos would also be a good touch in the fighting process. People screaming and ducking, something to spice up the environment. These small details can make a large impact and difference. How you describe fight scenes also needs a bit of polishing. However, despite all that, it is still pretty awesome and I'm looking forward to more.

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