My take on Blackspoilers Cursed 6 series. The 5th Street Fleur De Lis' go to the Empire and expand their large media empire. And shoot things along the way
Sorry for the late reply. I was very busy these last few months. Anyway, great continuation, however there are a few hiccups in this chapter. For one, it seems bit too rushed now. Developing a short plan and later into a plane fight. Don't feel pressured to try and complete the story, go in a pace that's comfortable for you and when you feel a lot more focused and at ease. There are also a few gaps that need some form of answering, like how did Cadence know that Silver and his crew were coming and what flight they'd use. Also, the flight they were on, you may need to say if they were on a private plane or a public plane, the cabin going into chaos would also be a good touch in the fighting process. People screaming and ducking, something to spice up the environment. These small details can make a large impact and difference. How you describe fight scenes also needs a bit of polishing. However, despite all that, it is still pretty awesome and I'm looking forward to more.
Hope to see more soon. Keep it up.
Sorry for the late reply. I was very busy these last few months. Anyway, great continuation, however there are a few hiccups in this chapter. For one, it seems bit too rushed now. Developing a short plan and later into a plane fight. Don't feel pressured to try and complete the story, go in a pace that's comfortable for you and when you feel a lot more focused and at ease. There are also a few gaps that need some form of answering, like how did Cadence know that Silver and his crew were coming and what flight they'd use. Also, the flight they were on, you may need to say if they were on a private plane or a public plane, the cabin going into chaos would also be a good touch in the fighting process. People screaming and ducking, something to spice up the environment. These small details can make a large impact and difference. How you describe fight scenes also needs a bit of polishing. However, despite all that, it is still pretty awesome and I'm looking forward to more.
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