I became the gold samurai ranger and is in Equestria with all the power rangers zords,battle disks,the black box and his weapons the megablade, the Barracuda Blade, and the special battle disk weapons.the Equestria I'm in has it's own power rangers as well but with my and their enemies I'm sure they'll be happy with one more ranger around.
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Pacing, grammar. They exist. I shouldn't have to go through 1,000 or 400 words of bad spelling for a Power Rangers story. My suggestion, you should have gotten a proofreader before you even thought of posting this.
There's more than just Applejack's accent that you need help on.
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Like what parts of the story
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Well, for one thing, as I said before, the pacing and I must stress this. No chapter should be 400 words long. In a story like this, each chapter should be 2 to 3,000 words at a minimum.
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Ok I will think about it in the next chapter
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You need to think about a lot of things, really. My advice, take this story down and get someone to help you iron out every one of the flaws. It's not just pacing, it's grammar and things like not letting us into the character's shoes so to speak.
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Or make a different but better story right.
I get what you mean by get into the characters shoes. you mean try to get people to feel a connection to the character right, Bricklayer.
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Which I'm not getting. He's unrelatable, does everything just a little too well.
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in power rangers samurai, The original gold samurai ranger can sing, play the guitar and is the best cook in the team, can use a fishing pole as a bow,outrun and loose 2 other rangers while dragging a cooler with wheels and fishing poles on/in it behind him, programmed the crabzord, the lightzord, and the black box by himself. He even taught himself how to be a power ranger. One of his first techniques you see the rest of the rangers thought was impossible in fact the only problem I would say he had was not getting places on time, literally losing his morphor while fishing, his golden ego, and no proper training that I remember. The Crabzord had its own megazord with 4 different modes. The black box gave the ranger using it a super mode and let them control all the zords by themself.A friend of mine made a fictional character that could probably defeat your and my strongest fictional character in a 2v1 fight, he never wrote a story for him though.sorry for the rant by the way.
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And yet you still haven't addressed the problem of this Gold Samurai being able to do everything extremely well because he can.
its good and I like it so far just need to pace it out a bit
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Good start. Grammar could be better, such as morphor actually being morpher, though I'm more than open to help beta-read for ya.
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Is this dead?