Simultaneously able to type 94 wpm and still take five years to finish a story. If you're feeling generous, throw a ko-fi at me.
No one said a relationship would be easy. Wallflower Blush may be going out with the most popular girl in school, but that won't stop her from taking missteps and making mistakes. Some of these memories are so embarrassing she'd rather forget them.
But when it comes to relationships, all memories are worth keeping.
Written for the Journeys: Sunset Shipping Contest.
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You're parents have to be horrible if they forget you're not home and lock you out. In any case, nice story
Can I just say, I love your version of Pinkie? The right feel but without being over the top.
Also, I notice that people tend to have Pinkie as ace or pan. Not much middle ground.
And yeah, very sweet story overall. I liked it.
I also like that Trixie remembers Wallflower.
On an overthinking things note, Wallflower obviously still has magic affecting her. Either residual traces of the memory stone or she’s got a ‘talent-like’ ability like the others have and enough natural magic to use it without a geode or ponying up.
Drag her off for a talk, then be the one to run off without letting her have her say. Any incompatibilities seem to be on Wallflower's part here. Like pretty much everything about her being socially invisible is also her fault, she practically tries not to be noticed or interesting. Even total shut-ins and people with social anxiety can manage that (many times they don't even want to and still somehow manage to draw attention). So too, is her own insecurity.
Nicely done. You really went for it with Wallflower as an unreliable narrator in her POV scenes. She’s angry and upset at herself, and as a result she lashes out and anything and everything close to her. And hates herself even more afterwards. Maybe I relate to her a little too much? Anyway, you nailed the central conflict there: it’s not that she’s being unreasonable or even whether she knows she’s being unreasonable, it’s that she has to admit it. So, well done!
Wallflower is way too self-absorbed to be sympathized with.
I didn’t know this ship was here. Sign me up, Captain!
That was pretty much the perfect way to end this. Wallflower reminds me a lot of people I know with social anxiety and things like that. Desperately wanting to be accepted, but so crippled with her own lack of self-esteem, that she ends up driving people away. It's shown early on, where she dissects every one of Sunset's statements to the point of absurdity, finding everything little things that's wrong. Could Sunset have phrased some of that better? Probably, but ultimately, it wasn't her fault. Wallflower was more in the wrong here, but she's still sympathetic enough that I feel sorry for her.
Wait..... stupid Wallflower. She broke up with Sunset Shimmer, not the other way around.
Man I feel bad for Sunset needing to deal with all of that. Wallflower's lucky that Sunset has the patience of a saint.
Wallflower was a total idiot, but I have been in very similar boats, so gonna not throw anything near this nice glass house over here.
honestly i could not like wall flower in this and uh you way over exaggerated people forgetting her a large part of that was her using the memory stone yes she blended in and did not put her self out so people did not notice her
but it was not this bad with out the memory stone to the point people would forget her standing next to them
and yea as i said she was unlikable here sunset did not do anything wrong and why did rarity go along with the make sunset jealous plan that was rather out of character for her
So the question is, does she only drink coffee once, or does she have Limestone locked away somewhere to dissolve bit-by-bit. Also, Maud, that is super dark, no matter how much of a bitch your sister is.
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Marble knows that look, Maud. She knows she is next!
When I first saw the story in my feed, I was annoyed since you'd used the image I had planned on for my entry.
Now? Now I sit humbled by a far better crafted Sunflower story. Even in a world of friendship-powered magic rainbow lasers, that kind of social anxiety isn't resolved in one go. Wallflower has a history of self-doubt and crippling insecurity, and it makes sense that she'd lash out like this. Great work all around. Thank you for it, and best of luck in the contest.
I know Limestone can be rough, but let's not be hasty!
Okay, I love your Trixie here. So accurate.
You did a nice job of depicting how Wallflower fades into the background. When I was writing Wallflower I let that aspect be minimised because it was outside the school setting, but I like that you have Rarity being entirely true to the show in not having noticed Wallflower be at any of these parties. An interesting question this raises, of course, is why Wallflower bothers to keep going to those parties if she doesn't enjoy herself?
The conflict feels a little forced, perhaps, but I'll look forward to seeing how it's followed up.
Yowch. Harsh. Yet believable. Wallflower could definitely end up this way.
I really like the way Sunset keeps expecting to see Wallflower standing there. That's a very nice touch.
Ha, excellent line.
I like where this is going :)
Cool! Nice touch. Trixie is still a self-centred so-and-so, but she's got that nice streak we saw in FF.
My headcanon is that Fuchsia Blush is Wallflower's little sister, who's rather better at getting attention than Wallflower, which is part of why she ended up how she did.
I love the "dialogue" between Octavia and Vinyl! That's delightful.
And yay, I had been hoping someone would submit an entry for Wallflower as the princess. Was it Rarity?
That was a nice sweet conclusion to the story
And yet my favourite part of it was actually Sunset's text conversation with Pinkie. That just made me giggle. Good job
This has become one of my big ships, and I love it. Flowers always flourish when the sun is out after all.
That was pretty surprising. And Pinkie in this chapter was hilarious. :D
This was really, really sweet.
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Yes, and they acknowledge that in the very next paragraph.
Nice story; dunno why Twilight wasn't included, though. I mean I know the narrative mentions seven people, but I can't be sure if Twilight is one of them, or if they're referring to someone else (like Maud, who was there too, apparently).
Here in chapter one, I really like how you're handling the characterization. One of the peculiar things about writing fanfiction is that you don't have to spend thousands of words devleoping character, because we're usually already familiar with the characters, but even still, I think you're doing a good job of it.
Wallflower's reflections on her life, made using plant-related metaphors and experiences, are all made smoothly in a way that feels in line with her personality, the dialogue flows well, and her anxieties over the relationship are understandable, even if exaggerated from an outsider's perspective.
So far, bravo.