The Fetish Sirens

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Seratina

Seratina #1 · Aug 27th, 2018 · 1 · ·

The fetishes are right up my alley, but the writing is terribly stiff and has absolutely no substance... Just saying "It's my fetish" for why someone would want to lick dirty feet isn't kinky at all. Something more like "The salty and bitter flavor tastes terrible to me, and that turns me on. I know it's wrong and deep down this is absolutely disgusting, but this gives me the best kinds of shivers." Or something similar would've taken this from a C level trash erotica to a really kinky and very VERY convincing and breathtaking fappable art piece.

The Dark Wolf

The Dark Wolf #2 · Aug 27th, 2018 · 1 · ·

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That settles it. This is definitely my last story. Including new chapters.

I guess it's my fault for not warning you my writing is rusty and was never good to begin with.

Also regarding the foot licking thing: That's not even one of my fetishes. It's someone else's who reads my stories. Most of the other ones in the story are mine, though.

Every instinct I had told me not to write this, but I got a little too confident. At least my friend was satisfied with it. If I change my mind and write again I'd recommend you don't read anything else with my name on it.

Seratina

Seratina #3 · Aug 28th, 2018 · · ·

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Tbh I just used the foot licking as an example of the main issue. The problem is prevalent throughout the whole work. The idea is there, but could be easily improved with some proof reading and a few moments to flesh out certain scenes with more description.

The Dark Wolf