Kinda feel like this could had used more distinct characters, and referring to them with descriptors instead of names, and maybe have bit less of them. Might just me being distracted, but I kinda lost who is who and looks like what in my head towards the end of the chapter. Like too many characters that I only really know in name, and need to go back to reread prievius chapters to remember how they looked. Probably not gonna be a problem if reading this in one sitting tho.

Anyhow nice job.