Ponyville has stopped communicating with the other cities, and rumours that a battle has broken out within the town. To add, Celestia hasn't received word from Twilight in months. Unfortunately, she, her sister and the Captain of the Royal Guard, Shining Armor, are too weighed down by duties to head to Ponyville.
The only pony left for the job, Princess Cadence, is ordered by Celestia to find out why Twilight has stopped writing to Celestia, but plans change when she finds out what's really going on, as well as unexpected companions.
Chapters (8)
This story is being done differently to my others. Instead of waiting until it's complete before I publish it, I'm publishing it incomplete so that I can get some feedback as I write.
I like the idea and your writing is good. However, we need some back story because half the time I'm wondering what caused all this.
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That's mostly because I'll be covering it in the successor chapters.
1006378 <Pedantry mode activated!> Successor chapters, my brother.
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Ah, thanks.
Well fuck
1006745 So awesome! The first violent fanfic I've read. Really cool.
This is badass. Cant wait for more.
This could be interesting.
Princess Cadence and Spike and the Apples are caught in the middle of a holy war.
Like many of my fictions I will be writing, this will be made into a comic at some point. Because I work visually more than literary.
not bad dude
Damn, how many factions are in the war?
One warning, don't make so many factions you can't keep track of them.
Again epicly badass.
Could you make a post describing the known factions and their leaders.
1023117 Actually, that'll be happening during the story itself.
Oh yeah, now there's only two factions: Ponyville Alliance and the "Celestians" (forgot what they're really called).
This is shaping up to be a good story!
1118648 Celestial Temple. But I like that name... Celestians...
Anyways, thanks
This is awesome. I've told you in real life and I'm telling you online.
Must see the conclusion!
Woo. I sense an epic battle coming
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Oh, I forgot to mention. There are several OCs used by others in Chapter 4.
Voidgale Donovan (and Twister Alberstar, who was mentioned only) are my own characters.
Genome is my brother Stormbadger's.
Firebomb belongs to a friend on deviantART, SnipingSpy.
I... uh... kinda used them without permission... eheh... I'm sure it's fine. I didn't kill Firebomb, and Storm was ok with my mutation of Genome anyway.
oh man cant wait for the next chapter
Nice
I'm expecting someone, hopefully Spike, to fuck someone up next chapter
Holy shit! Awesome.
Hopefully, we see badass Spike next chapter.
Firstly, I'm sorry to dissapoint those that wanted Spike to, and I paraphrase, 'mess somepony up'. In hindsight, I should've added a scene where Spike fights someone, but it's not as important as the other scenes.
Secondly, I hope you enjoyed the story.
Somepony forgot to turn off the italics...
Good story, though. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
Italics are fixed now.
You're welcome, mate. Great story.
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I'm not disappointed
1148497 Oh good. That's what my aim was
To be honest though, Spike didn't need a fight scene. As he was trying to stay out of all the fractions and get everypony back together. I mean that's not to say he wasn't capable of fighting. ( this makes me want a western as spike as the Hero gunman!) It's just to me this feels right.
Love this story though..
1184411 I had much the same thought on the matter. Much of my stories are built on an evolutionary process, that is I have a skeleton of a timeline and let my mind create what I think feels right.
Also, western hero Spike... You've given me an idea.