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Nighlocktheawesome00


I love Deadliest Warrior and Sunset is my favorite character... Oh, and I think Celestia is a weak leader, cause she is.

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After being banned from coming to the wedding, Twilight leaves Equestria and becomes a member of the Storm King's army. This allows Twilight to become close friends with Tempest as Twilight swiftly rises to the rank of 2nd Commander and is renamed Sparkle Shadow.

Chapters (6)
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Actually if the ratings are disabled I'm not favoriting it learn to take some fucking negative feedback.

Hmmmm... You have my attention, but why no like system active?

Oh boy. Equestria’s in major trouble now. The Storm King’s now gonna have two of the most powerful unicorns in all of Equestria on his side and with Equestria’s true line of defense now gone, this is definitely gonna be one tough bed they made that they’ll have to lie on.

"There goes Equestria's last line of defense," the sea serpent said.

Only line of defense.

just from the premise alone im going to track this now to see where it goes

9114357 Wow.

Just... wow.

Okay, what's wrong with Favoriting it because; oh, I don't; because the story itself is GOOD, and it's worth continuing to read?!

And I believe that posting comments is ALSO a good way to give feedback.

Wow, some people.

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I know right. What's the point of having them? Why have them, when you can just comment? Fanfiction.net doesn't do that. If they don't like it, they at least leave a review why they hate it.

9114698 My thoughts exactly.

Great start on this, btw, and I am eager for more.

I am especially anxious to see what happens when everyone finds out just how badly they bucked up!

One thing, though: were the CMCs flower-fillies at Cadance's wedding?
Or were they not there when all this went down?

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Actually, they still performed their duties as flower fillies, but are saved from Changelings when Ash and Bao make their dramatic battle entrance, which is this:

Ash Magma:*does the Mighty Eagle Battle Cry before burning up some Changelings*

Bao: No, Ash, it's like this!*does Bomb's Battle Cry and cuts down many other Changelings.

9114797 :twilightsmile:
Anyway, keep up the good work, and I'm looking forward to Chapter 2.

(I swear, I can't spell OR type worth squat lately........)

hope to more of this soon.

good job! you get +5 platinum stars!:pinkiehappy:

DNC

Looks like it’s going to be a good one. But I must say it is a little odd. How does twilight go from Canterlot to Ponyville then the borderlands all before the wedding? And how do the CMC get there too?:rainbowhuh:

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i have a question it said that a serpent, fluttershys animals, AND the cmc all saw her cross the boarder, where is this boarder since by your own comment they still should be in canterlot being the flower fillies but its just kinda confusing that it would all be so close

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Twilight teleports. Duh. As for the CMC, let's just chalk it up to them being unpredictable and leave it at that.

I... will withhold my opinion until I've seen more story. Don't quite know what to make of it just yet.

An army of dwarves and an angry, but lovely, panda.

Please go con.

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Actually the Dwarves left the mountain when their forge was beginning to lose its power.

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Actually, the dwarves left the mountain long before Canterlot's creation.

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Oh, that's a good point.

Silly of me. At least Cadance, Ash and Bao will use the weapons propperly.

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Not to mention the two friends are still debating over which of their battle cries are better.

Wow, I'm not going to lie, I wasn't expecting this to be written as well as it is. Saying that, this was bloody well written.
I really enjoyed the prologue and cannot wait for more!

So when is the story going to be about what the description tells us? So far it seems to be a bunch of OC's. Hardly a single tagged character has had the spotlight for an entire chapter yet.

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Gotta get the backstory first, or else it'll be as bad as the garbage that is a the DCEU.

Oh God, this battle just got worse!

Can’t wait for the next one

haven't they realized someone's missing?

Can't wait to see the next chapter. :heart:

I'm wondering if now is the good time to set up a betting table.

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