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DrakeyC


Writer, reviewer, creator of Filly Fantasy VI, occasional PMV maker, and uploader of mildly amusing image macros to Derpibooru. https://www.patreon.com/drakeyc

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It's not easy living far out in the west end of the city and working downtown, but Sunset manages. The drive to and from work with her girlfriend, though, can be an exercise in patience. Between her bad days that she has, the bad days Twilight has, and just life in general, being trapped in a car together for half an hour can put a strain on them both.

It's easy to lose sight of things and tunnel vision on the road ahead. Sometimes it helps to take a step back and see things from the other side of the aisle.

Entry for Sunset Shipping Contest - Journeys. Took Fifth Place.

Prereaders: GaraTheAuthor, RTStephens, and SamRose

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Comments ( 28 )

[a]first part of the fic over three days shows Twilight on a bad day, Sunset on a bad day, and one day where they're both just tired. Dialogue in all three is meant to parallel and provide continuity

For these segments, Sunset's mind is mostly focused on the driving and she's only half paying attention to Twilight. This comes up later with how she remembers these times

[c]Sadly, I've had longer...

[d]so have I, though as the caller

[e]Proper name?

[f]yes

[g]out of the car, enjoying the morning together, their dialogue is much lighter and casual

[h]As the passenger, Sunset pays more attention to the sights of the city and the conversation, she feels more relaxed. The car's movements are irrelevant now

passage of time is irrelevant, which day this is is irrelevant, Sunset is enjoying herself in the mornings and not dragging herself through the week one afternoon at a time

[j]just lots of fun fluff here to contrast the start of the fic and more easily establish their home life outside the driving is very comfortable

[k]I want this part in particular to be perfect, since it's the denouement of everything

??? What happened?

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:facehoof: I forgot to get rid of the formating for GDoc comments.

I've had a bit of a long day.

Cute! Just fyi you left some outline notes at the end.

So what type of Sunlight story is this? Just Sci-Sunlight I assume?

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It's an AU, so it's a bit of both Twis.

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Shouldn't there be a category for that in the Sunlight folder? Right?

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I just see SFW and NSFW.

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No i mean like AU's in the Sunlight group by Cyrosite. There aren't any at all.

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Ah, I actually didn't know about that group. Thank you :twilightsmile:

That was really good, though the arguments were realistic enough that it was also really stressful to read. I HATE talks like that.

Also your description of the city reminds me alot of where I used to live, in Ohio.

And yeah, silly things like always being the one to drive or something definitely can become a big deal in a relationship if you don't talk about it. Good point.

So yeah, really enjoyed this and felt very true to life.

This was pretty good. Good luck on the contest.

this story was really good and enjoyable

but it has one major huge flaw

scitwi did not hack and fry zeypher breezes computer

Good story. I really enjoyed it and I have been having a few of those rides myself so it hit close to home. Very realistic. I liked it. Also, good luck in the contest.

“Of course it is, they cast Megan Williams as Firefly. It’s the most perfect casting choice the PCU has made since Mark Caroli as Tirek. She can do no wrong.”

I want to both slap you silly for that Megan and Firefly reference, but then want to give a high five for Tirek having his original voice actor from G1 back.

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You're half-correct - Victor Caroli was his G1 actor, Mark Acheson was his G4. :raritywink:

Okay, I like this a lot, but I have to ask - how is this Alternate Universe exactly? It really doesn't seem in any way removed from being a possible future for the EG universe?

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It could be, yes, but I did not write it with that intent.

Fantastic work with portraying an established, adorable relationship with a few bumps in the road. It'll be a lot easier next year, once that degree gets headhunters salivating.

Thank you for this, and for making me feel extremely doubtful about my chances in this contest.

I've read it when it was released, but now I say it was a story I really liked, and hoping you'll be placed ;)

I really felt Sunset's frustration. You captured it really, really well.

And I just loved the interactions between Twilight and Sunset. The ending was just heart warming.

Fantastic job. :twilightsmile:

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This is SO GOOD.

When I open a story with a Romance tag, this is what I want to see! This is fucking perfection!

“I told him I had a girlfriend. He said ‘lesbians are just chicks who haven’t felt the Breeze yet’.”

As if I didn't hate him already! Marvelous.

SunLight isn't usually my thing, but I love the concept of this, the dialogue was great, and there were some very sweet moments, so it's easy to see why the judges liked it. Congratulations on placing! :twilightsmile:

Wow I really liked this. It was quite amusing and also so romantic at the same time! <3

This was really cute!

Just wanted to say this is one of my top ten favourites. I think I have re-read it some ten times now. Thank you.

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