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Spider-Mane Noir

"I don't understand it, but I will."


Falling in love with someone only for them to leave. And then meeting their counterpart who won't give you the time of day.

How could anyone possibly relate?

Well, Flash, you'd be surprised.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 11 )

Aside from a few grammatical errors, this was a nice straight forward story. Maybe you could use more descriptions next time around? That way it's not just telling us what's going on. Should make for a more interesting setting, when you already got a good foundation. :scootangel:

Yeah, I have a bit of a tendency to fill in details in my head and assume everyone else gets the same picture as me. Its something I have to work on.
But other than that I hope you liked it!

Aww, this was nice. I love Flash-Derpy friendship fics.

I like the story idea, but I believe not even muffins can fix Flash Sentry, anyway I will do a rare thing and give you an upvote for the story idea, since this seems so fitting to me.

Well, maybe they can't, but its worth a try!:ajsmug:

Comment posted by Brony Novice deleted Jul 21st, 2019

One thing to take note of in future stories is not to use * in the text. Those are editing marks. The site italics feature works very well in place of them. You shouldn't write out a sigh either. Showing Flash Sentry sighing and giving body language with it works just as good, if not better.

Thanks for showing such a nice piece about Flash having some friends to keep him afloat.

Thanks! I'll keep that in mind.

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