Epilogue
Rainbow Dash greedily gulped down a much-deserved chocolate shake at the soda shop.
At the table with her was Truth Seeker, Far Out, Red, and Scourge standing close by. Also in the soda shop was Truth Seeker's mother, closely watching Dash and keeping a closer eye on her daughter. Two other notable guests were the princesses, listening intently to Dash's side of the story from the start.
Apparently Truth Seeker's mother had just come back from her vacation, and saw Starcrash's ship escape the base, along with half the city, and immediately assumed her daughter had something to do with it. Her hunch had been right, finding her daughter and her little gang closest to the action.
Sweet Seeker didn't drag Dash back immediately to the soda shop, but instead took her and the entire Star Society to her home while she figured out what to do with Dash and how to appropriately deal with her daughter technically aiding a traitor. It was only the next morning they went to the soda shop after the guards had cleared out, only to find both the princesses there as well, also wanting to know why they had sensed such strange magic from the area of Las Pegasus, a base they didn't know about was on fire, and them having physically seen Starcrash's ship escape back into space. Not to mention the general's apparent "activities".
After downing half her shake, Dash sat it down on the table, wiping her mouth with a sigh. "And that's pretty much it. Truth Seeker's mom took us to her house, and we came here the next day."
"Is there any detail, no matter how minute, you left out?" Luna asked.
Dash pondered a moment. "Well, I did kind of just leave the general next to that hole. What happened to him?"
"That's my cue!" Far out exclaimed, digging out a newspaper and slamming it on the counter. On the front page was a very bruised and humiliated Stalwart Watcher. Though still wearing his uniform, it had been completely stripped of its medals and ribbons, and his cap was missing. Two soldiers were escorting him to the local courthouse as he held one hoof up in front of his face in shame.
She read the headline allowed."General Stalwart cashiered for Major crimes?"
"Yes," Celestia intoned. "Some of his officers came to me, personally, about all his...projects. I assure you, he won't be in command of anything for a very, very long time."
"That's a relief," Truth Seeker sighed.
"Also," Dash continued, looking over to Far Out. "Where were you and Scourge when Truth Seeker came inside the base?"
Far Out seemed ready to come up with some grand tale before Scourge spoke up. "The bright light from the spell made him panic and I had to chase after him."
"I'm more interested in this visitor from the heavens," Luna mentioned. "What can you tell me about them?"
"Well," Dash answered, "Not much that I already told you. She was really powerful. Even stronger with that book. She didn't seem to understand a word I said, but she got the general gist if you tried hard enough."
The cosmic sisters looked to each other.
"This is unprecedented, sister."
Celestia nodded. "I know. We've had visitors from other planes, but this 'Starcrash' seemed to be from the deep heavens."
The sun princess smiled. "In any case, I thank you, Rainbow Dash. Again Equestria is in your debt."
Dash rubbed her head, grinning. "I mean, I did most of the cool stuff, but I couldn't have helped Starcrash without these guys," she said, motioning to the Star Society.
Celestia chuckled. "Yes, about that. All of you were willing to sacrifice so much just to help this alien home. We don't know where Starcrash went, but I can't guarantee she won't one day come back, or even bring others. To that end..."
She looked to Truth Seeker. "I would like to make the 'Star Society' the official ambassadors of our world, if such another visitor returns. I cannot think of a group more suitable."
Truth Seeker nearly jumped out of her chair. "I-wh-ho-I would-"
Red had to hold the pegasus down in her seat. "Um, yeah. I think we're good."
"I'm also in," Scourge added.
Far Out slammed the table with gusto. "Yeah, man! Wait, what are we voting on?"
Celestia looked to Sweet Seeker. "And of course, if that is okay with you, Ms. Seeker."
Ms. Seeker rubbed her chin. "My daughter and her friends broke in a military base. She hid a fugitive. She was arrested. She broke out of a prison. She helped burn down that prison. Then she broke into another military base, and that one also burned down. "
She sighed. "All to save an innocent stranger and bring down that horrible general. So after my daughter is done being grounded forever," she said, staring at Truth Seeker with a harsh frown that slowly faded into a proud smile, "I think she'd be happy to take up your offer, Your Majesty."
Celestia beamed. "Wonderful to hear! Rainbow Dash, when you can, please relate this story to Twilight Sparkle."
"Right, if I can ever finish from all the questions she'll ask."
The princess softly laughed, turning to leave with her sister. "Of course, that'll be its own adventure. Goodbye for now, Dash. Luna and I need to talk about your story in private."
Celestia and Luna gracefully walked out of the soda shop. Lifting off into the air, they disappeared from sight.
After they were gone, Ms. Seeker turned to Dash. "Oh, one more thing. What happened to that pony you threw in the bathroom?"
"Uhh..."
A crash suddenly came from the back of the soda shop, and they all turned to see the bathroom door fly open. Out flopped Classified, his legs just barely free from his restraints and his lips chapped from thirst.
The suited pegasus landed on his side, looking up to everyone assembled at the counter.
He pointed to Dash's shake.
"You gonna drink that?"
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After a month hiatus, I've come back and finished it off! Final word count: just over 30k.
Story-wise, I'm really happy with how this turned out, since while it's shorter than my actual longest story, Hybrids, I feel like the ending was much less crammed in. Of course, I could be wrong about that, and if I am, let me know.
I'll probably submit this to EqD after more editing, but for now I can just sit back and be happy that it's done.
Will there be a part two? Just curious.
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Not at current, but anything can happen.
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Yeah will Dash go into space?
Absolutely wonderful. Need anything more be said?
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Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. Was there any part of the story that stood out to you?
This was a very solid, enjoyable story. It was a lot of fun and I like that you managed to tell it without having Starcrash be able to communicate with Rainbow. Kudos!
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Thanks! I've always felt there's something kind of lost when a character that can't talk, learns how to. The reader always builds up what they should talk like in their heads, and it's usually better than anything the author comes up with.
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I don't have a sequel planned right this moment, but it's always a possibility. Though, just spitballing, a sequel would probably Starcrash returning instead of crashing with more beings like her.
Well it was fun overall.
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Thanks!
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Could there be a possibility that Dash might end up as a specimen for them to study for a bit since Starcrash's race might be curious about Rainbow's species.
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That's probably not the direction I'd take the story. I should mention Starcrash is a human, but her origins beyond that are deliberately obscure.
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How about save Rainbow's life when she gets severely injured when she's protecting Starcrash from something and has emergency surgery done on her on the human ship to save her life which is probably a good way to return the favor after Rainbow helped Starcrash.
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You have a lot of ideas; I think you should write your own sequel. It could be like your own headcanon, or a "what-if?" fanfic if I ever eventually get around to writing the actual sequel.
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Ok maybe a crossover too with Sonic The Hedgehog. Yeah I'm a huge Sonic nut especially, when Rainbow and Sonic meet since they are so much alike.
A delightful adventure from start to finish. It was especially nice to see some of the general's own ponies split off as he went truly off the rails. That said, you may want to give those last chapters another proofreading pass. You have typos and omitted words scattered throughout, and one case of a pony with hands.
In any case, thank you for an out-of-this-world read.
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Thanks for staying with the story from the beginning, and I'm glad you liked it!
Also yeah, I'm a terrible editor by myself, and I'll do as much as I can and definitely get another person to help me get this thing ready to shoot at EqD after a while.
It was a safe assumption.
My first thought was "in Equestria, even the crime headlines are puns" but you know that a real world headline writer would be all over that.
I don't know if this is a good idea, but it feels like a Celestia idea.
Fun story.
This was a great story! Though I would definitely would love at least see another chapter for StarCrash when she leaves and what her thoughts were... Because even though it’s a mystery I think it would be pretty nice.
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My plan was from the start that Starcrash would always remain "mute". Though if you look back at some of the scenes from her perspective, you might notice the narrator suddenly starts calling the ponies 'horses'.
And thanks for reading! Glad you liked the story.
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That’s fine! This story is great and I don’t really think it needs a sequel. But if you do one maybe have a different M6 character this time?
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In the original outline, it was Twilight Sparkle that came across The Visitor, and if I wrote a sequel, that's probably who I'd go for.
Other stuff in the very first draft that got changed:
- Twilight Sparkle was the one who found the alien.
- The pony general was a griffon general. The whole adventure would take place outside Equestria.
- Starcrash was originally male, non-magical, and heavily implied to be from NASA.
Pretty much none of the rough draft plot remains, with the only "scene" still being around is Twilight Sparkle (now Rainbow Dash) saluting the alien as they got ready to leave.
Far Out was also originally planned to be the only supporting character, but he got split into the Star Society when I realized I was going to need more characters to do stuff that it wouldn't make sense for Far Out to do.
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That’s a interesting changed and it was also better since this story worked better with Rainbow Dash and not Twilight. Because there is always like other bigs stories like Arrow 18 where it’s about both Twilight & Rainbow Dash meet a Alien who can’t speak expect Twilight learns bits of the human language till the middle of the tale...
You did a great job and wish you luck on your next new tale.
this story reminded me pretty heavily of a movie called Planet 51. Was that perhaps an inspiration for this?
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It was in fact originally a lot more like it, which meant there were a lot of details I had to change to avoid it just being a carbon copy. The biggest similarity off the top of my head was that Starcrash was originally a male, non-magical astronaut implied to be from NASA, which was one of the first things I had to change. Starcrash also originally talked, but I thought it would work better if she just communicated with gestures.
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Yeah, that would be a typo, thanks for catching it.
As for RD not attempting to contact Twilight, it's mostly because she doesn't think to and partly pride. Also because there wouldn't be a story if she did.
This was a very good story. It had overtones of several different Sci-Fi stories, as has been pointed out in other comments, but the one I kept thinking of, for the general flow of the story, was "Starman". Was there any influence from that show?
And "StarCrash", I couldn't get "StarScream" to leave me alone. Personally I blame "Death Battle" for that one...
Have a thumbs up, I'd give you more if I could.
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Glad you liked the story! I can't specifically cite Starman as an influence, though, since I've never watched it.
This was honestly a nice refreshing read! Managed to get through this in about 2 hours—give or take—and I have to say that it was a real fun ride! Thanks for writing this!
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Thanks! This story's a personal favorite of mine. Was there anything in particular that stood out?
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Starcrash being able to use magic was a nice little twist that went a long way in the end.
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'Astronaut being able to use magic' was kind of the core I built the character of Starcrash around, so I'm glad that novelty paid off. There's something compelling about a starfarer who's also an arcane warrior.
I honestly can't believe I didn't find this story sooner. This was really great! Have an upvote and a favorite.
Oh, and I'm sure you've probably heard this before, but I have to ask.
Any chance of a sequel?
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Possibly; I've got a few ideas for a sequel in the larval stage, but right now they still need time to cook.
I tend to favor more techy sci-fi. I was skeptical of Starcrash's magic based tech at first, but now I think it's actually pretty cool. I had initially assumed (when I first read the description) that this was just going to be ET but with ponies. Oh how wrong I was, and I'm glad.
I also loved the characters and interactions, especially with the guards. I always enjoy making up character voices in my head when I read. Far Out in particular was fun because the first voice that came to mind was, I forget his name, but remember that guy in Zootopia, from the naturalists club? Yeah in my head Far Out sounded pretty much exactly like him :P
Overall it's not the most amazing fic I've ever read, but I did enjoy it a hecc of a lot more than I thought I would. Nice job! :)
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Thanks for the review! It actually made me realize I need to edit the description for it a bit, to make it more explicit this isn't an ET sort of deal.
In fact, this whole fic basically started with me kind of explicitly rejecting that paradigm; Starcrash isn't just a human with sufficiently advanced technology, she's literally a hi-tech mage of some kind, and the idea of an actually magical space explorer was something I really wanted to explore, and that want created the character of Starcrash and the fic built around her. She was actually originally male and heavily implied to be from NASA, but over time she became female, because I wanted to play into her being this kind of lithe scout. I also thought her origins being unclear played better to the story, so she went from being from a space agency to being from who-knows-where, and the only definite thing about her is that she's human.
I'm a very, very strong believer that with strong characterization, you can get away with basically anything in a fic that you otherwise couldn't, so glad to see my practice of every character having a distinct 'voice' came across. I'm glad you liked Far Out; he was kind of the second character that was formed in the planning stage of this fic, after Starcrash herself. He was actually originally the only character that made up the Star Society, but as I was writing the fic I realized I'd have to split him into several people, hence the creation of Singe, Red, and Truth Seeker.
It was my intention to not make anything mind-blowing, just write a very solid story around an interesting premise. Based on your comment and others, it looks like I succeeded!
Hopefully he won't be in command of anything ever again.
Fun, although if they burned down the whole prison what happened to the guards they locked in cells?
I'm glad you didn't make Starcrash NASA. There's already too many Twilight Zone episodes where actually the aliens were astronauts from NASA all along.
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Yep, I figured it served the story better that Starcrash's origins remain obscure. She's human, she's magical, and that's all we really know.
There’s way to many “Earth Human” stories in FimFic when this one is like... I think the only original human story that’s never from earth.
I do hope that this story brings new stories like this because I like this take on humans much better