Breaking Concentration

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Breaking Concentration

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In the moments between thoughts, Twilight tries to articulate her feelings but she's not sure exactly what they are.

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aceina

aceina #1 · Aug 1st, 2018 · 4 · ·

this was a cute one shot should write more where scitwi confesses

Krickis

Krickis #2 · Oct 29th, 2018 · · ·

Was just going down your stories to add some to my RiL shelf when this one in particular caught my eye out of amusement at the cover (friend of the artist), so I decided to read it now This is a really cute story. The playfulness here is really nice, and the narration matching Twilight’s scientific nature when she’s analyzing Sunset’s scars is cool. I honestly really love that there was no big confession. The confusion Twilight feels wound up being much more interesting for me, since there are tons and tons of oneshots that end with the characters confessing feelings. Makes this one feel like a small snapshot of the characters’ lives rather than their entire story, which is the best way for a oneshot to feel in my opinion.

"Ouch! Fuck!" Sunset Shimmer yelped

Sunset’s said two words in this fic so far and half of them are “fuck”. I love it

LateToTheParty

LateToTheParty #3 · Oct 29th, 2018 · · ·

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Aww, thank you! As my first fanfic with Sci-Twi and Sunset, I just started writing and let it roam where it wanted to roam. I fell in love with their dynamic together. I'm glad you liked it. If you read one of my stories, I'd really appreciate some creative criticism from you, considering your stories are top notch in my book. I really admire your ability to provoke emotion through your writing style.

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