Clockwork

by 71NYL-5CR4TCH

The 35th perspective

Flattery.

Flattery is such an amazing power.

The power to change a decision, to change a perspective, to change a mind.

All by the correct articulation of a few simple syllables, or actions.

And it here it gives me a new perspective.

A 35th perspective on her.

Somehow the same as all the rest, somehow completely different

She looks different now. Radiant. Glowing. Blushing...

Completely adorable.

So I draw her again, carefully capturing each shimmer in the eye, each line of her smile.

And it is beautiful.

A beautifully flawed 35th perspective.

I will never be able to completely capture her true beauty.

Perhaps because her beauty is in her movement.

Perhaps it is in her voice.

I can loose sight of what makes the world in the gaps. All I have here are sights.

But she is everything.

Once again, I levitate the pencil down.

This time, I didn't bother to draw her library. Just her. Sitting and sheepishly smiling next to me.

Her violet eyes are half closed, like the radiant moon I have stared at for many nights.

Her cheeks burn pink, even through her fur, like a rose in a field of lavender.

And she is so beautiful.

There is nothing else now. No room, no others.

There is simply myself and her.

I keep waiting, waiting for her to speak...

but I remember where I am.

What I am.

What I can do

It occurs to me that I could do anything right now.

I could leave forever, and never come back, but that is the last thing I would ever want to do.

I could think of things to say to her, things to do, which might help me recapture this smile.

But that seems far too artificial.

Or...

I could kiss her.

What I want to do most in the world right now.

No fear of rejection, or disgust, or even disapproval...

But it doesn't feel right.

Because there is no way she could do what I want her to do most in the world.

Simply...

Kiss me back.

Author's Note:

Extremely short chapter, but I wanted it to be to capture all the emotions in this gap, and allow readers to really stew on it. Do not fret! More, longer chapters will come soon!

Comments

[Lady Grey]

Fabulous! I got an update right away. Sir, you will spoil me. I really love the thought here. I'm also of the first belief that you haven't really seen some one until you've seen them move. Still pictures can never quite capture a person's being.

[Skeeter The Lurker]

Oooo. That was gooooood.

~Skeeter The Lurker

[Sarge1995]

This is...excellent...really, it is. Keep up this great work! The writing style is just addictive, I couldn't take my eyes away from the page.

[DarkParable]

I was unable to repress a very unmanly d'awwww... Bravo sir, bravo.

[Doctor.whooves]

Well most people see it as linear but it's actually more like a big ball of wibbly wobbly timey wimey....stuff

[Doctor.whooves]

This fic is deffinetly gonna get read

[Axan Zenith]

A great concept with an interesting execution, but I can't help but think that the tone is broken a little at time by...well;

"These are...really really good!"

Wat.

"You...you think so?"

"Absolutely!"

Stuff like that. And while the Inception reference was funny, I think the bit at the end of that chapter would have been more effective as an authors note, so you can seperate the authors humour from the narrators. Given, this is just my two bits, but I like to think of Clockwork as collected and aloof, and pop culture references kind of mar that a bit.

That aside, good story overall. You have my attention, good sir.

[DualSoul1423]

So amazing! I need MOAR.

[Fire-Storm]

Please sir can i have some more?

[GordonFreebrony]

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More? MORE? You want MORE? I'll give you more alright!
*bam*
*bam*
How's that for more?

Now that that is out of the way, AUTHOR! I demand more from you
*whipcrack*
I demand you finish this story!

(Oh, and I know what his cutiemark represents. It's not the rectangles, but the space between. The 'gap' if you will. He can find paths where no other pony can. That is his cutie mark. His special talent is the gaps themselves. A place one can wiggle into, free from the world)

[starhunter34]

Really, really nice story!

[Aiyonbeam]

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Or maybe, just maybe, it's a pause symbol.

[SwimmingDalek98]

For some reason, whenever I see a character like this, I think of their voice actor being Benedict Cumberpatch. They are wise, logical, to the point, but different from a Spock. A cold, calculative-ness that screams Cumberpatch. A fav from me!

[GordonFreebrony]

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...
I said it more eloquently. It means the same thing so to speak. Ever wondered why the pause symbol looks the way it does? My explanation is why.

[EliteRoyalGuards85]

MORE!!!!!!!

[Dorkking]

I like this story. It has a different way of thinking to it.

[Nexodas]

I'll definitely be following this. Love the concept. The only real flaw I could find was the very common mix up of lose and loose. Lose has one o and loose is the opposite of tight my friend.

Looking forward to more! Until then!

[truthaura]

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i never thought of that....

[Timstro59]

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you just blew my mind. almost literally.

[GordonFreebrony]

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Not certain if I should take that dirty,
or take that as a compliment...

[GordonFreebrony]

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*whisper* By the way, I bullshitted the pause button thing....
It's a pause button because the two lines mean a 'double defense' against 'time.' It's from when armies would attack a fortification. Normally they can get through one wall, but when there are more than one, it becomes harder, thus pausing the onrush of enemy soldiers.

My original explanation was something different, but yours is probably right. And yet still I made you stop and think. MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Achievement Unlocked:
Evil Genius

YES!!!!!!! Another achiev!

[Timstro59]

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I mean my mind almost literally exploded.

[GordonFreebrony]

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Didn't your parent's ever tell you not to play with high explosives?

[Timstro59]

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I got a crate of c4 last christmas.

[GordonFreebrony]

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Careful, kid, you'll blow your eye (and head) out!

Gah, I just made a CC reference. I'm awful.

[Aiyonbeam]

I can loose sight of what makes the world in the gaps. All I have here are sights.

*lose.

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...What have I created?

[GordonFreebrony]

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eh..............

HIM!
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[Sergiovan]

You should free this concept for everyone to use. It is such a shame seeing this brilliant idea and genius fic rot here... Maybe pass the fic to someone willing to continue it, or start it all over?

Maybe?

[Harvey Birdman]

it has taken me about twenty minutes to read all the chanpter that are out at the moment, and I am only dissapointed because there are no more at this point in time.

This story is amazing, definately my second favorite fic. First being Univirseity Days. I think I spelt that wrong, but hey, sue me, I've been up for almost thirty hours.

Amazing job on this little fic, can't wait for updates.

I wish you the best of luck on all your future endevors.
Much love - Harvey Birdman.

[Leonzilla]

This chapter was so beautiful.
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Flattery is such an amazing power.
The power to change a decision, to change a perspective, to change a mind.
All by the correct articulation of a few simple syllables, or actions.

And this quote...So clever.

[Ephraim Blue]

Sad. That's it. Just, sad.

[The Watcher 509]

To quote Eggman

"Oh, that is good. It is very good indeed!"