We all know who the Rainbooms are. They're the seven girls at school who formed an awesome band, but more importantly, they all have magic super powers that they use to fight magic evils. But what if they used their powers for... something else?
Alright so far so good, lets see where this goes. Though im a bit disappointed that Sunset's chapter was so... lackluster. Maybe adding a bit more positions would've helped but lets see what the other ones are gonna be like. I'll give it a chance either way.
9075496 I think this chapter did just fine. It was their first time together and Sunsets powers pretty much are the most lackluster of the group (I wait in slight dread to see what Fluttershy will do with hers) so there's no real need to jazz things up. Its about two teens having their first time and the focus is just of the connect through Sunsets powers. They did pretty much what you'd expect of them. Mind you though you should still keep the advice in mind going forward but dont go crazy. After all you got six more girls to get through and its nice when there arent too many repeats in series like these.
9076118 I really didn't want to talk about future chapters, but I think that it's only fair to give everyone a heads-up about Fluttershy.
Fluttershy's chapter will not involve her using her power to talk to animals. Even though that kind of goes against the entire premise of the story, there is absolutely no way to incorporate that ability into a fic like this and do it in a way that wouldn't be fucked up and weird. However, I will say this:
Fluttershy's chapter will still involve a magical twist to it, resulting in an erotic scene that would be physically impossible to have with a normal girl in the real world.
Would anyone really need to ask this question when they've been dating for seven months?
There's nothing wrong with waiting a while to have sex, if that's what works for the two of them, but to not even have had this conversation until now?
9118120 Damn, I wish you had posted that comment just a few hours earlier, because I actually didn't think of that, and I made the exact same mistake in Rarity's chapter, which I posted just before I saw this comment. Oh well.
It's funny how Sunset Shimmer has such a crazy and adventurous backstory, while the story of how we met couldn't possibly be more ordinary. Even though I've know her since my freshman English class, I met her three years later in biology when she ended up being my lab partner for a day.
Funny, that's how I met my wife, over dissecting a frog
This was interesting to read. Although I am not quite fond of the idea of mind reading against one's will, I like the idea. Since you obviously are all for consent, judging from the later chapters, I think if you ever rewrite this (I know, unlikely, if judging by my own desires to rewrite old stories. xD), you could make it that he gave her consent for that in advance and just forgot about it. Could be just a couple of sentences to achieve that imho.
Otherwise the comedic sentences in between are spot on. Also, I like your descriptions (bar some words for private parts of men and women, but that's a personal issue I think)
Alright so far so good, lets see where this goes. Though im a bit disappointed that Sunset's chapter was so... lackluster. Maybe adding a bit more positions would've helped but lets see what the other ones are gonna be like. I'll give it a chance either way.
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This is the first erotic story I've ever written, so it only figures I wouldn't get it right on my first try.
I'll keep your advice in mind for later chapters, though.
Kudos on the Golden Earring chappy title.
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I think this chapter did just fine. It was their first time together and Sunsets powers pretty much are the most lackluster of the group (I wait in slight dread to see what Fluttershy will do with hers) so there's no real need to jazz things up. Its about two teens having their first time and the focus is just of the connect through Sunsets powers. They did pretty much what you'd expect of them. Mind you though you should still keep the advice in mind going forward but dont go crazy. After all you got six more girls to get through and its nice when there arent too many repeats in series like these.
Tracking.
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I really didn't want to talk about future chapters, but I think that it's only fair to give everyone a heads-up about Fluttershy.
Fluttershy's chapter will not involve her using her power to talk to animals. Even though that kind of goes against the entire premise of the story, there is absolutely no way to incorporate that ability into a fic like this and do it in a way that wouldn't be fucked up and weird. However, I will say this:
Fluttershy's chapter will still involve a magical twist to it, resulting in an erotic scene that would be physically impossible to have with a normal girl in the real world.
That's all I am going to say for now.
If you consider this your worst chapter, I cannot wait for the rest.
Would anyone really need to ask this question when they've been dating for seven months?
There's nothing wrong with waiting a while to have sex, if that's what works for the two of them, but to not even have had this conversation until now?
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Damn, I wish you had posted that comment just a few hours earlier, because I actually didn't think of that, and I made the exact same mistake in Rarity's chapter, which I posted just before I saw this comment. Oh well.
Funny, that's how I met my wife, over dissecting a frog
This was interesting to read. Although I am not quite fond of the idea of mind reading against one's will, I like the idea. Since you obviously are all for consent, judging from the later chapters, I think if you ever rewrite this (I know, unlikely, if judging by my own desires to rewrite old stories. xD), you could make it that he gave her consent for that in advance and just forgot about it. Could be just a couple of sentences to achieve that imho.
Otherwise the comedic sentences in between are spot on. Also, I like your descriptions (bar some words for private parts of men and women, but that's a personal issue I think)