Get an editor plz.

Least none of them say 'how big is he?' thing.

I am a bit confused in the anatomy of Equestria.

It's an interesting story. But the grammar hurts my eyes

Why the fuck do anthro ponies have crotch boobs?

thicc

Kind of cute, but honestly that's a word I'd rather not see outside of YouTube comments.

I wish this was better written, I've been waiting a long time for a good multi breast pony fiction.

I would've had a mental breakdown if I'm not mentally prepared, even if I see them like this in images.

Ok, now I remember why I had given up on this last chapter the last time I found it.... You REALLY need to go back and make it a new paragraph for each new speaker, it is VERY jarring to be reading a comment from Spike, then suddenly read him saying something weird, only to find out that it was actually, say, Rainbow Dash that had said it...

Doing a new paragraph, yes, even if it's a single sentence, is better for the eyes and mind to read, because it lets our brains know that someone else is talking BEFORE you say who said it.

It's sad because I really wanna enjoy this story.....but I can't even get through this chapter because my brain twists into knots trying to figure out who is saying what.

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How about now?

Okay. I'm having a hard time trying to visualize what these mare look like.

The story is in dire need of editing for spelling and grammar errors, but where you really lost me was where you kept using the not-word "thicc".

Welp...... that's a bizarre character design, oh and RIP spelling, grammar and punctuation.

Holy shit long sentences batman You can stop and start a new sentence while still describing someone, you know?

This was a funny and cute first meeting I hope Tia and Luna join in his herd.