Chapter 5 - The Battle of the Sky
Twilight stood at the boarder between the Chaos realm and the realm of Fire. During her time with Laughter and Sorrow she had learned many things about. The first she learned was that the void was in a sense what many saw as Tartarus. The void was divided into six realms that each of the Elements controlled. Honesty and Deception controlled the Realm of Earth, an endless desert that was covered in barren sand and stone mountains. Generosity and Greed controlled the Realm of Crystal, a world of ice and snow that underneath was a labyrinth that was made of crystal. After navigating the maze one would enter the Realm of Chaos which was controlled by Laughter and Sorrow. Now she was entering the the realm controlled by Kindness and Cruelty, the Realm of Fire. The Realm of Fire was a realm where fire engulfed everything, the land was volcanic and the rivers were that of lava.
Twilight took a deep breath and stepped into the realm, the moment she the air boiled and she was blasted with heat. The smell of sulfur and smoke filled her nose and her throat and lungs burned. Twilight coughed and covered her face as she began to move forward.
As she walked she felt the heat of the fire through here shoes. Twilight snapped her fingers and he clothes quickly changed. She now wore a light sleeveless shirt that was cut at her waist, light skirt and heavy boots that went to her knee, around her mouth and nose was a oxygen mask and on her back was a tank.
Twilight sighed at the relief she had given herself.
"Shame you have to wear that to survive in this place." A harsh voice said. Twilight quickly turned to see a figure made of the lava. The figure wore feminine armor though it covered vary little and appeared to be extremely erotic.
"Give her some time Cruelty." A motherly voice said as a figure made of light descended from the sky. She wore light female warrior armor that was slime and covering.
Twilight bowed. "Forgive me if I have offended Cruelty, I have come to train under you and Kindness." Twilight said.
Kindness nodded. "The power I and my sister wield are great but the greater the power the more dangerous it is."
"We control Fire and Light Twilight." Cruelty said calmly before turning to gaze at Twilight. "Tell me what do you see in fire?" She asked.
"Twilight thought for a moment. "I don't know." She replied. "Dragons see fire as power and most other races especially Pony fear it as a destroyer."
Cruelty face palmed. "Dear me, that's what is seen in Fire? Power and destruction? What kind of Power? The one to dominate others or the one to submit your claim over the power of your flames? What kind of Destruction? Flames that dancing wildly, uncontrollable and all consuming?"
Kindness sighed. "Fire and Light are not something one can wield without knowing what they symbolizes for wielders like us. Fire is not good nor evil and most certainly not power. It is Balance, balance between order and chaos, civilization and devastation. When do you think culture, art, sovereignty and foolish arguments comes from, Twilight?" She asked
"Does it start when language is spoken? When nations are founded? When divines are born? No, it is when the mortal species and fire comes to an agreement." Kindness said.
"The agreement was as such, mortals can wield the fire's flames to build their civilizations and form their culture around its light. In return, Fire will be respected as the maker of their civilization and when the time is right, be its destroyer" Cruelty said.
"Its destroyer?" Twilight asked confused.
"Fire was one of the major elements that created your world, by destroying the First Realm of this world" Cruelty explained
"First Realm? What was the First Realm?" Twilight asked.
Kindness sighed. "The best description of what the First Realm was is that of a barren world. No life, no color and no soul. Then we came. The four keepers of the earth, Honesty, Deception, Generosity and Greed broke the ground apart and remade it, Laughter and Sorrow used their power to heal the soil while Magic and Necromancy supporting those healing waves. It was then that my sister and I used fire to burn the dead lands to ensure new life can grow from the ashes of the dead. Fire did not help the mortal races, it just set the stage for their growth. Fire sees both you and civilization as a creation of its creation."
"So why does it help us keep us safe and why does it let you command it?" Twilight asked as her confusion deepened.
"Just because fire doesn't care for your survival, doesn't mean it wants you gone." Cruelty replied with a smile. "You must respect its part in the making of your world and in return, it doesn't outright destroy you with natural means. Understand your role and if you are worthy, it will allow you to use its power for what you desire. Your lives are not eternal neither are your civilizations, but it will help you if you respect it. Fire is not fair but not cruel, it's Balance. Balance yourself and not be driven in one direction but all direction and only then will Fire finds you worthy of wielding its power"
"So Twilight, Fire is not power or simply destruction nor shall it ever be. It is Balance, balance between order and chaos, civilization and devastation. Remember that, respect the fire and find your balance and in no time, you'll be able to wield its flame."
Twilight nodded. "I understand." She said calmly.
"Now, our power is divided up into two groups." Kindness said with a smile. "The first is Cruelties."
"I use my power in combat, it must be controlled but also given freedom." Cruelty said.
"The other is mine, I use mine to heal and nurture like that of the sun." Kindness said. "These two paths are called the paths of the Divine Flame and Hell Fire."
"You will be learning from me first." Cruelty said with a smile. "However, if your to learn the power we have your going to need to remove your boots and that mask."
Twilight hesitated for a moment before nodding and removing it.
"Now we begin." Cruelty said.
Time dilation for Equus: 4 months, 08 days
Total duration for Changeling War: 1 year 1 months, 27 days
Rainbow Dash stood watch at the gates of Cloudsdale a ruffling of wings drew her from watching the sky to a Griffon who was approaching. Rainbow snapped into a salute as she saw it was King Raven Claw who was approaching her.
"Your Majesty." She said.
"Oh, please Commander you don't have to salute." King Raven Claw said as he waved her off.
As the king landed Rainbow returned to watching the sky, however the King examined the armor she wore and weapon she held. The armors design was ancient covering her well from head to hoof. It was a dull gray with gold trilling and a blue lightning bolt at its chest. At her side hung an ancient sword that was a sky blue.
"If I'm not mistaken that is the sword and armor of Commander Hurricane Dash, the great leader of the Pegasus Empire Romane Legion. It was forged from Skysteel."
Rainbow nodded with out turning to the King. "It's traditional that it's passed down to the next in line for the right to the position. Unlike in most militaries, the tittle of Commander is placed only on those who prove their right to be commander. My family has held the tittle since Hurricane earned it. When my father passed away it was given to me." Rainbow sighed before continuing. "I was raised from birth to be the commander of the Pegasus military but when the time came I-I couldn't do it."
Rainbow looked out to Ponyville as a tear began to fall from her eyes. "I flew as fast as I could determined to abandon my families responsibility. I ended up in Ponyville where I became the head of a weather patrol. I played the simple but brash Pegasus hoping to become a nobody. I idolized the Wonderbolts so I had an excuse for my actions and want to be fast. But when Twilight died I..." Rainbow sighed.
"You returned and chalanged for the tittle of Commander." The King said as he looked out to the small town. "You returned to claim your title and your by right but why?" The king asked.
Rainbow sighed. "I was placed in charge of the weather for the thousandth Summer Sun Celebration, that's where I met Twilight. Then I became the Element of Loyalty and every day was a adventure. Twilight was amazing, leading us, helping us, I mean ya she stumbled a bit but in the end she never let us down. When she died I-I almost tried to join her, I wanted to join her. I had failed, as a friend, as someone who should have been there and as the Element of Loyalty. At least so I thought, I felt that this was my fault."
"Rainbow it's not your fault." King Raven Claw said.
Rainbow acted as if she hadn't even heard the king as she continued. "As the Element of Loyalty I am meant to stand and face my duty but instead when the responsibilities were to great I ran. I ran when I should have taken my place as Commander, I ran so many times as a Element and as a supposed friend. I felt that this was my punishment for abandoning my Element and my duty."
The King stared at the Pegasus in shock.
"I returned because I can't run anymore. I returned to take my place as a reminder of who I can never be again, a coward."
Suddenly a green beam of energy shot past them and exploded behind them. Rainbow growled and drew a flare gun fired, a bright red ball flew from the gun alerting the guards.
As the flare fired every Pegasus looked up before running into their homes, Armor was quickly equipped and weapons drawn. Despite the peace of Equestria, Cloudsdale had kept to tradition meaning most that lived in the city were trained in combat. As a result in a matter of minutes Thousands of Pegasus were armed and ready for combat and at the battlements of Cloudsdale. Griffons quickly appeared as well bolstering the already significant force that was there.
Rainbow rose into the air and turned to the troops, her armor shining in the light of the sun. "Pegasus, Griffons, Today we fight not just for the princesses or our homes, today we fight for all those who have fallen in this war. We fight for the fallen! These Changelings think we will just stand aside and let them claim our land,they think of us as cattle to be slaughtered and eaten not even given a second thought. Let's show then the Might of the Pegasus!" As she finished she drew her sword and the army roared and charged the changelings, at the lead flew Commander Rainbow Dash and King Raven Claw.
Chrysalis flew toward the floating clouds. "Once we are there don't fire. We will take them by surprise." Chrysalis said.
They swarm flew nearer and nearer, Chrysalis smiled. 'Finally something is going right.' She thought before a powerful beam fired and exploded.
Chrysalis stopped and turned to the swarm. "Who fired that." She growled.
Slowly a changeling was pushed to the front and the queen glared at him. "So it was you?" She asked as she glared at the ling.
The ling began to tremble in fear as Chrysalis smiled and charged her horn. Several others looked on in terror as she unleashed her magic and several hundred were eviscerated.
"You will do as I tell you what to and if you don't fallow my instructions to the letter then I will KILL YOU IS THAT CLEAR?" She roared in anger.
The swarm shuddered in fear.
Chrysalis turned back to the city to see an army charging at the lead was the Element of Loyalty and the King of the Griffons. She growled and turned to the swarm. "Well, Go kill them!" She screamed and the swarm charged fear of her wrath driving them to obey. Chrysalis then turned back to the charging army and launched forward and drew her sword.
King Raven dodged the Changeling Queen before drawing his sword. The Queen flew at him again and there blades clashed sparks flying of them. "Why Chrysalis, why attack, why kill?" King Raven Claw asked.
Chrysalis laughed. "Why else Power! The more Love I have the more power I have and once I absorb the power of Equestria I will be a goddess!" She roared as sh laughed maniacally.
"You have gone mad." Raven Claw said as she pushed her back.
Chrysalis hissed. "That's what the other Queens said, before I killed them." She smiled and charged the King again. "Now, DIE!" She screamed.
As the Griffon King and Changeling Queen battled Rainbow flew among the swarm slicing any changeling who neared her. Around her thousands of Pegasus and griffons fought.
"Watch the left!" She commanded drawing several warriors to the left side of the battle which had slowly turned against them as the left and right flanks began to push back the center opened up and changelings pored in. Rainbow growled and charged them hacking and slashing them as she fought her armor began to crackle with electricity as it drew in her Pegasus magic. Suddenly she thrust her arm out lightning arcing out and striking the swarm. The groups that were bunched together were wiped out as the lightning arced from Changeling to Changeling. The lightning arced off her wings which she used to strike any who neared. Those around her watched in awe as she slaughtered them charging into the frays of combat lightning surrounding her as if she were an angle of death.
Suddenly a large group charged, Rainbow glared at them the lightning arcing from her eyes turning them white, she calmly spread her wings wide and with a single beat the wind shot forward and tore them apart, another beat and the winds began to change. They swirled around her as rain began to appear forming the familiar form of a hurricane. In the center floated Rainbow her eyes now glowing with the light of twin sun she reached out her hand toward the changelings and the wind lashed out as well, arrows forming from there forms arcing with lightning. With a single gestured from Rainbow they fired upon the changelings scattering them.
"Why are you just floating there?" Rainbow asked her voice distorted as she turned to the troops. "Press the attack I will cover you." She ordered.
The troop turned to the Changelings and smiled before charging. "For Twilight!" They roared.
The sword flew from the Griffon Kings claw and plummeted to the earth below. "I enjoyed this griffon, but now you die." The queen smiled.
"You know you're far to over confident." The King said as he grabbed the blade and smiled as he extended his talons and raked them across the Queens chest. "Third rule of combat, never underestimate your opponent!" He roared and ripped the blade out of the injured Queens hand before slashing at the Queens face. The tip of the talon caught the eye patch the Queen wore and the socket it protected.
Chrysalis screamed as the talon dug deep into her face ripping the whole right side out. She then morphed her hands into blades and swung at the king who blocked the blade and slashed. Chrysalis blocked the strike and turned delivering a spin kick that connected with the Kings head dazing him. Chrysalis thrust her hand forward intent to kill the king by striking him through the heart but it was caught and she was thrown to the ground. As she landed a dead tree broke her fall while piercing her abdomen. She gasped in pain as she slowly rose.
The King landed before her and grabbed her throat and pulled her to her feet before extending his talons. "What I do here I do for Twilight." He growled as he thrust his talons through her chest. Suddenly a Changeling slammed into him knocking him away from the gasping Queen. The Changeling picked her up and flew away the Queen in its arms.
Several griffons quick landed and stood guard and Rainbow landed and approached the King. Are you alright Your Majesty?" She asked.
The king slowly rose to his knees and growled before slamming his fist into the ground. "DAMN IT!" he roared an anger. "I almost had her." He growled.
Rainbow knelt down and placed a hand on his shoulder. "Next time we will, Chrysalis is weakened. The only way for her to win is a direct attack on the capital."
"Which means the next attack will be Canterlot." The king said as he rose to his feet with a smile.
Rainbow nodded. "Celestia and Luna have ordered the remaining Elements as well as all field commanders and leaders back to defend the capital."
"Then ready the vanguards, we leave for Canterlot within the hour." The king said. "well tear this bitch apart when she shows he face.
Time dilation for the Void: 1999 years, 11 months, 30 days
Total duration Equestrian time that Twilight has been in Void: 1 year 1 months, 27 days
Twilight stood at the center of a volcano before her stood Cruelty and behind stood Kindness, as she was a healer she would not be participating in this battle.
The two combatants watched each other before charging at the same moment. As they neared they coated their hands with magma and when their fists met an explosion surrounded them. The two shot up Twilight's mane and wings on fire, as she flew at Cruelty summoning small fire balls and launching them at her. Cruelty deflected them as lava solidified into a handle and fire exploded from it forming a blade, Cruelty charged and swung at Twilight who had summoned several blades of light and launched them at her. Cruelty dodged them and slashed the blade across Twilight's chest. Twilight growled and summoned a Halberd made of light and blocked the next strike as the slash began to heal. Twilight then flipped backwards and thrust her hand into the ground. Crimson flames erupted from the ground and launched at Cruelty searing her as several wolf like constructs leaped from the flames and charged the Lava beings.
"Hell hounds." Cruelty growled as she engaged the beasts and Twilight began to create seven constructs and fire them at her.
Cruelty caught the first one with her blade thinking it a fireball bit the blade as quickly absorbed by the black hole the ball left.
"Impressive isn't it?" Twilight asked a smirk on her face. "Miniature suns that when they hit something they create a small black hole."
Twilight then launched them at Cruelty who dodged them while also battling the Hounds. She then turned and charged Twilight who threw a fireball at her. Cruelty jumped over it and thrust her blade down only for it to dissolve around Twilight as she turned to Lava and melted into a puddle before leaping up and thrusting the Halberd into Cruelty's chest. Cruelty gasped and the blade fell from her hands.
"Well done Twilight." She gasped as she fell to the ground unconscious.
Twilight lay her out and placed her hands over the wound as a white light emitted from them. Slowly the wound sealed shut as Kindness approached.
"You have done well my student." She said happily. "Tomorrow you will be leaving for the Realm of Magic. It is there you will learn under Magic and Necromancy. They will instruct you in the ancient ways and in magic long forgotten."
"Thank you for your lessons Masters." Twilight said with a bow.
"Rest well Twilight, tomorrow will be a long journey." Kindness said.
So here it is the long over due chapter and wow, I had fun writing this chapter! So announcement time. I wont be updating that often for a while due to work and a few other factors. It will only be for a few weeks but it does warrant a notice. On the other hand this break has given me time to reset my brain and I now have tons of amazing ideas for not only this story but also my other ones. So I hope you all enjoyed the chapter and I will see you in the next one.
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I like this chapter on to the next battle
Chrysalis is getting frustrated.
Chrysalis losing the battle & getting weaker in every major fight she's in, while Twilight is getting stronger by the second.
More more more god yes more
cant wait for the battle of canterlot
celestia and luna will give the changelings hell
Can’t wait to see Twily rip them all apart
just imagine the battle for cloudsdale with this song playing
I'm sorry... "what are you will floating there"?? did you mean "why are you just floating there?" or something to that effect?
you're. once again the difference between your and you're: your is denoting something "you" own, you're is the contraction of "you" and "are".
I enjoy the premise greatly, looking forward to Canterlot
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I have that song.
It's perhaps a bit late, but this is a really long introduction. I am hoping that the intent was to be an introduction, at least, because not much is really happening so far.
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neat
Getting there
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I fixed the error, also thanks for finding a better way to put that sentence in.
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I was wondering when someone would comment on this. This is actually arc 1 of this story, its not an introduction but it is laying the ground work and building the characters. This arc is the "Fall of the Hive" arc and will be the first in the story. I plan to expand on the story later on. My plan at the moment is to complete this arc, finish the chapter for another story and a little more and then return to my Assassin's Creed story.
*Celebrates and dances about*
Another awesome chapter with delicious fights on both the Equestria we know it and Twilight training her hardest. Where oh where is Chyrsallis’ trump card? No self respecting leader would try and attack a fort! That’s what sieges are for... My biggest concern is when Twilight returns. It seems Chyrssalis can’t hold her ground and with 2500 years under Twilight’s belt (I’m guessing unless she gets more) she hardly stands a chance. Chyrssalis better have something in the works unless she is going to be a fine mist! I’ll hold the funeral for her in advance. Still loving the work and all the detail you’re putting into this. Take a well deserved break knowing full well you did a WHOLE lot!
Minuteponies. Ready for combat in a minute.
Maxim 27: Don't be afraid to be the first to resort to violence.
It's kind of ominous that when this part of the chapter started this song Started on spotify. And it was awesome.
The second time I see this exact description and it's the second time it gives me mental images like this one https://i.ytimg.com/vi/5zjVyLN0opg/maxresdefault.jpg
Wait (can’t believe it took me this long to think of this) the elemental siblings (cool right?) are opposites of each other, so wouldn’t the opposite of Magic be Science? After all, necromancy is a branch of magic.
Also I love this whole paragraph:
and rainbow is thor?
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or storm from x-men
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Think Thor from Norwegian Mythology not from comics. I hate Marvel and DC.
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they aren’t really opposites more like the evil side of what they are. kindness is being nice to another. cruelty is being mean to another. if that makes sense.
At this rate Chrysalis is kind of a failure as a intended conqueror so far each time she attacks she gets driven back and winds up with a debilitating injury in the process.
At this rate I wouldn't blame her if she rethought her assault plans on Equestria and gave up while she still has wings at the very least.
I Think you ment “Dear me, that's what is seen in Fire?”. It is seen not see but who am i to juge.
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It was probably a typo but it's been a while so I'm no sure, anyway thanks for noticing it.
I honestly really enjoy this story and although this critique comes late, I have to say there are enough glaring mistakes that it pulls me out of my immersion of this story.
I highly suggest finding some interested readers to do some basic editing touch up, like correcting typos and structure.
The thing that breaks immersion for me is the time line of the universe has bad Continuity and the lore/logic balance. The elements in the void are supposed to have been living characters at one point, like Star Swirl the bearded yet somehow they all existed in the first age where no pony life even existed. Greed also claims the mortal plan drives them mad yet even if the time line made sense Star Swirl shouldn't be able to form complicated thoughts to make complex spells of he was driven mad like Sombra. On the topic of the elements, the choice for certain elements also doesn't make sense, I already saw this mentioned before but I'll also draw notice to the fact Magic and Necromancy aren't opposites as Necromancy is a school of magic. The opposite of magic would be something akin to science and invention. But you've written yourself into a dead end as well with that because of how you made chaos and order magic work with the other element pair. One massive mistake on that front is you don't have a clear division of what does what in your universe. Some things seem powerful and unique but with the unlimited power cap you have in your universe, many elements overlap and could technically replace the others completely (example: what is the difference between mastering magic and warping reality to produce the exact same effect a spell would achieve?) . Overall, it seems like you had a idea of what to do then rolled with it then kept adding it to instead taking your ideas and fleshing them out fully before writing them down. To that end, I highly suggest writing out your ideas and plans. Things like brain storm maps or time lines to make sure everything makes sense in the same universe.
All that said, I still really enjoy the premise of this fic and I plan on reading it to the end and while I am sorry if the criticism came off as harsh I have high hopes for your writing.
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There is a reason I have plans to rewrite this story and you seem to have covered most of them in this post.There are a few points you missed but then again you wouldn't have known them since you don't have the story files.
Just be aware that I inow about the problems in this story and it is something I want to fix.
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I had a few of the same thoughts, and as such had some ideas of my own.
To the lines of;
My brains been working on a theory for that to try and explain it. The answer to the question of "how can they say both of these things and have it still be true" I think I have is fairly simple.
The Elements themselves predate the minds of the beings they now are.
At first there were simply the elements themselves, but they weren't intelligent, or at least not in a way we would really recognise it, and they simply acted as their natures dictated with no way to, as it were, "think outside the box".
The individuals that Twilight is now interacting with came later.
In the "age of ponies" certain individuals be it all at once or over time came to discover these elements and learn about them to a level of mastery that caused a bonding of the two. The result is a being that both knows it was a being of the age of ponies, but also now has memories of acting in a time before that age.
This could help explain why they speak of both things as if they are true with no contradiction, because from their point of view both are true.
Why didn't they bring this up? Simple, no one asked. They've been thinking of things in this way that it has long become normal to them.
On that topic, we get this question.
If the above as assumed to be true, this could also explain why Star Swirl kept their mind while Sombra went doolally. It could all come down to when they mastered their element and bonded with it or possibly be related to the nature of the element itself in regards to who it bonded with.
The first of those two ideas is the easier. It could be that the nature of greed (to want more) caused it to bond with another faster than magic did. The sooner the bond happens the sooner the problems of staying in this plane of existence can kick in. This could also allow Star to see the effect it can have on one that has been bonded for longer and realise he needs to get the hell out of here.
The other idea is a bit more complex. Sombra is a ruler. By the nature of that position he will want more, if not for himself then his nation. This means he has responsibilities and a reason to stick around.
What could have easily started as a want and greed for more to make his nation better could easily have acted as the catalyst for a growing insanity to take and turn that greed inward and selfish. As a general rule of thumb only a sane person will question if what they are doing is crazy, because a crazy person will always think they're sane.
Star on the other hand with this reasoning likely had little to nothing tying them to this plane of existence. So once they became one with the element of magic may well have jumped ship to go study this new plane of existence the first chance he got.
Now a fun bit.
I agree that necromancy is really more a part of magic and not an opposite. But to call science an opposite?! This is something I will not hold back on calling northing short of bad writing. It just shows a complete lack of understanding of what science is as a basic concept.
Ok, going to try and not let this turn into a rant (like I do every other time I see this ridiculous idea turn up in other forms of media), but no promises.
Science is simply the word used to describe the way we learn about the forces of the world around us and how we can take that knowledge and use it to reshape those forces as we may choose. If magic exists then the act of trying to understand it would in and of itself just be another form of science.
Much the same for invention and by extension technology. Both of which also come about as a result of science.
Other options for an opposite of magic could be decay. If magic were the creation of something new where there was before nothing, decay is the reason there was nothing there before and will later be so again. One always follows the other, no matter how much one is often praised and the other shunned.
Or maybe magic itself is made up of two elements, creation and destruction. All forms of magic contain some mix of these two elements. You have transmuted and orange into an apple, but the orange was destroyed to make it. You created a charm spell, but destroyed part of someones free will in doing so. You created a fireball, and I think this one explains itself.
Funnily enough by that logic the classic idea of necromancy, raising the dead, would come under the heading of creation. A.k.a. the so called "good one".
*Edit* This comment sounded shorter in my head
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